Giving in - to Giving.
Conflict turns to trust30 total reviews
Comment from boberto
Amusing. I enjoyed this. The ending is super. You
provided all the necessary elements for story.
Your plot, characters and dialog are believable.
Good luck in the contest.
boberto
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Amusing. I enjoyed this. The ending is super. You
provided all the necessary elements for story.
Your plot, characters and dialog are believable.
Good luck in the contest.
boberto
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thank You much. ZeeZee
Comment from Annmuma
Great story. Lots of emotion and imagery. Good job and good luck in the contest. I've just begun to read the entries. ann
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Great story. Lots of emotion and imagery. Good job and good luck in the contest. I've just begun to read the entries. ann
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thanks Ann.
Comment from grumpylinguist
Wow, nice bit of drama here in such a limited amount of space. I thought this was an excellent microfiction entry. I love how she's looking out the window when saying her last line; I got a total visual from that. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Wow, nice bit of drama here in such a limited amount of space. I thought this was an excellent microfiction entry. I love how she's looking out the window when saying her last line; I got a total visual from that. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thanks for reading and leaving a comment. ZeeZee
Comment from rama devi
Excellent micro fiction. More concise than most of the other ones and yet speaks volumes in those last two lines. Brilliant job. No words are wasted.
Good luck in the contest. I find nothing to fix.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Excellent micro fiction. More concise than most of the other ones and yet speaks volumes in those last two lines. Brilliant job. No words are wasted.
Good luck in the contest. I find nothing to fix.
Warm Regards,
rama devi
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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rama devi, thank you so much for stopping by and reading my 100 words. ZeeZee
Comment from jshep
Love the ending. You have done a fantastic job with this one. Not one wasted word to be had, and it is an old story, but with a better ending then most. NO spag or changes to recommend. Would say this is a great contender in the contest. Excellent.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Love the ending. You have done a fantastic job with this one. Not one wasted word to be had, and it is an old story, but with a better ending then most. NO spag or changes to recommend. Would say this is a great contender in the contest. Excellent.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thanks J.... a bit of a fairy tale. Kiss Kiss, ZeeZee
Comment from Robbin
A conflict and resolution presented clearly in this moment in a couple's life who chose life. Clever read with good characters. Good luck with the contest. Robbin
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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A conflict and resolution presented clearly in this moment in a couple's life who chose life. Clever read with good characters. Good luck with the contest. Robbin
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thank you very much for the encouragements. ZeeZee
Comment from Russel Chale
Great exchange of dialogue. You achieved the objective very well here, in my opinion. It's a good piece of microfiction as required by the contest. Good luck in the voting.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Great exchange of dialogue. You achieved the objective very well here, in my opinion. It's a good piece of microfiction as required by the contest. Good luck in the voting.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thank you Russel Chale, I appreciate the kind words. ZeeZee
Comment from AlvinTEthington
An interesting take on the married man having an affair. He actually takes responsibility for his child; something we hear far too little of in today's world. You show your reader that there are people out there who after a mistake (in this case, marriage), do take responsibility for their actions. Excellent work; it flowed well.
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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An interesting take on the married man having an affair. He actually takes responsibility for his child; something we hear far too little of in today's world. You show your reader that there are people out there who after a mistake (in this case, marriage), do take responsibility for their actions. Excellent work; it flowed well.
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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AlvinTEthington, thank you for reading and commenting. This was a bit of a fairy tale. It seldom happens. ZeeZee
Comment from suneagle
LOL. Very funny, but sad in its own special way - I guess that is what satire is supposed to evoke. Well done.
"You get the four AM feeding."
("You get the 4:00 a.m. feeding.")
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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LOL. Very funny, but sad in its own special way - I guess that is what satire is supposed to evoke. Well done.
"You get the four AM feeding."
("You get the 4:00 a.m. feeding.")
Comment Written 01-Sep-2008
reply by the author on 01-Sep-2008
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Thanks you suneagle, for reading the 100 words. I am not sure which is correct way to indicate time. I've seen it both ways. Thanks again. ZeeZee
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I've just shown you. My comments are based on this authority:
http://grammar.ccc.commnet.edu/GRAMMAR/numbers.htm
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Thank you very much. ZeeZee
Comment from Diny
Well this was acreative effort to this contest one in which I am sad to say dosent usually endup that way- but I liked the read and am a sap for happy endings- Good luck-write onDiny
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2008
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Well this was acreative effort to this contest one in which I am sad to say dosent usually endup that way- but I liked the read and am a sap for happy endings- Good luck-write onDiny
Comment Written 20-Aug-2008
reply by the author on 20-Aug-2008
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100 words that tell a story.. hard, very hard. It was a great challenge. Thanks for reading. ZeeZee