Reflections For The New Day
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Comment from Lady & Louis
Beautiful, Jewell - this one speaks to me, not only of my own state these days, but even more strongly of Louis's state, the pure happiness of his soul. Lovely work, and I particularly like the reminder of the joy in silent moments - even though they may last only seconds!
Merry Christmas,
Louise :)
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Beautiful, Jewell - this one speaks to me, not only of my own state these days, but even more strongly of Louis's state, the pure happiness of his soul. Lovely work, and I particularly like the reminder of the joy in silent moments - even though they may last only seconds!
Merry Christmas,
Louise :)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Thank you Louise. So good to hear from you.
Comment from mmichelle97219
A voice unheard can still be loud though action spent on soothing deeds. A well done poem, Jewell. It is very pretty.
Michelle
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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A voice unheard can still be loud though action spent on soothing deeds. A well done poem, Jewell. It is very pretty.
Michelle
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Gracias, my belle. I appreciate the kind review.
Comment from Oatmeal
VisionaryPoet,
This is a nice poem. Your flow is good. I enjoyed your descriptive words very much. The theme is nice.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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VisionaryPoet,
This is a nice poem. Your flow is good. I enjoyed your descriptive words very much. The theme is nice.
There was no SPAG. No room for improvement.
I look forward to seeing you again.
Love you,
Oatmeal
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Thanks Oats.
Comment from RaymondJohn
Great job. It isn't needed for sure. I like the third stanza very much. It sums everything up very nicely. Have a joyous Christmas. Ray.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Great job. It isn't needed for sure. I like the third stanza very much. It sums everything up very nicely. Have a joyous Christmas. Ray.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Huh? What isn't needed? Did I forget something. lol
Comment from Wendyanne
Hi Jewell. You have used some truly stunning imagery to express your thoughts and feelings in this lovely piece of poetry. Excellent
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Hi Jewell. You have used some truly stunning imagery to express your thoughts and feelings in this lovely piece of poetry. Excellent
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2007
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Hey girl. Stunning is a wonderful word to use describing my poem. What a compliment.
Comment from sngldad4gd
"In the bouncy step
of the confident soul"
"La la la la
la la la la
a la la la la la la
Sing, sing a song, make it simple
To last the whole day long
No matter if it's good enough
For anyone else to hear
Just sing
Sing a song"
HMMMM! Your poem brought that little bouncy tune back, so, I would say you did awesome. Ray :>)
(hehehe I hear ya singing it over there,LOL)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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"In the bouncy step
of the confident soul"
"La la la la
la la la la
a la la la la la la
Sing, sing a song, make it simple
To last the whole day long
No matter if it's good enough
For anyone else to hear
Just sing
Sing a song"
HMMMM! Your poem brought that little bouncy tune back, so, I would say you did awesome. Ray :>)
(hehehe I hear ya singing it over there,LOL)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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karen Carpenter did that. lol You're funny.
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Hehehehehe, thank you. My Mom said I had inner beauty, before she left me on the side of the road with a pork chop round my neck, hahahahaha. Just kidding. :>)
Comment from tony bronk
this is a lovely poem about something or someone I don't understand. I liked your cadence and vivid imagery, though. I was just a bit confused who you are talking about. tony
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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this is a lovely poem about something or someone I don't understand. I liked your cadence and vivid imagery, though. I was just a bit confused who you are talking about. tony
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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I could be talking about any one. It is about spirit. We all have a song within, we just aren't listening or paying attention. It's rather mystical. Try to not think so hard. lol
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forget it.. tony
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OH...are you saying you don't have this kind of joy? My apologies if I'm not catching your quick wit. I'm a little dense this morning! Short on sleep!!
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was that sarcasm? i didn't mean anything. some poems are just harder to understand the poets state of mind, than others. nothing wrong with that. gees. tony
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Noooooooooooo, not at all. NO sarcasm! I was trying to figure out your reply that's all. thought I missed something all together. You ok? This is just wierd. Have a wonderful day. I think we're on a different page. No offense intended in the least or taken for that matter.
Comment from grecianviolet
This poem flows nicely and includes beautiful and original words and imagery...I enjoyed reading it very much, and find no problems or sticky parts in the last two stanzas. The last two lines of the first stanza, though, I believe are a bit confusing:
Where no words spoken or sung
Need be exclaimed aloud
I know that exclaimed can also mean shouting, but it makes this part a bit confusing. I would recommend using a more specific word, such as 'shouted' to get your meaning across clearly. But this is only stylistic, and maybe it doesn't feel that way to anyone but me.
I enjoyed reading!
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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This poem flows nicely and includes beautiful and original words and imagery...I enjoyed reading it very much, and find no problems or sticky parts in the last two stanzas. The last two lines of the first stanza, though, I believe are a bit confusing:
Where no words spoken or sung
Need be exclaimed aloud
I know that exclaimed can also mean shouting, but it makes this part a bit confusing. I would recommend using a more specific word, such as 'shouted' to get your meaning across clearly. But this is only stylistic, and maybe it doesn't feel that way to anyone but me.
I enjoyed reading!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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thanks. I'll take a peek at those lines and see what honing I need to do.
Comment from rhymer1
Thanks for shining a bit of free-verse sunshine through the shower of gloom I read on fs today. You flow and emjambment make it sing and the missing rhyme is not noticed. In fact, I had to go back to assure mysel it was unrhymed. that take talent. slainte, rhymer1
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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Thanks for shining a bit of free-verse sunshine through the shower of gloom I read on fs today. You flow and emjambment make it sing and the missing rhyme is not noticed. In fact, I had to go back to assure mysel it was unrhymed. that take talent. slainte, rhymer1
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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Thanks very much. rhyming is rarely something I do unless the poem just comes to me that way. I never intend on rhyming. Kinda wierd I know but thanks for the wonderful comments.
Comment from sengwriter
Hi Jewell,
Nice confidence earning poem. It's within you - that's a great line to fetch one a good amount of confidence.
I admire your style in telling this truth and the transition of your lines smoothly arrives a commendable conclusion where I liked your lines like -
Where hope is his pillow
And joy his comforter
Gautam :)
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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Hi Jewell,
Nice confidence earning poem. It's within you - that's a great line to fetch one a good amount of confidence.
I admire your style in telling this truth and the transition of your lines smoothly arrives a commendable conclusion where I liked your lines like -
Where hope is his pillow
And joy his comforter
Gautam :)
Comment Written 18-Dec-2007
reply by the author on 18-Dec-2007
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Thank you Gautam.
