Comment from Swtdreamz

Excellent

Wisk me away
To buoyant seas
Afloat joyous waters - "whisk" me away
and in that sea? gorgeous
Drowning darkness
Turbulent waters
No more - wonder how freaky it would be to sink to its dark depths
No
Perhaps maybe
A life raft
For one - a lifesaver would be good too
good job

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2007

Comment from mayflowerbg

Excellent

Hi, IS!

It was a pleasure reading your poem-- passionate voice, a lot of lovely descriptions, good vocabulary choices.

Wisk me away >>>Did you mean "Whisk"?

Maya

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2007

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2007

Ahhh whisk! I could use a wisking too. LOL

Comment from luna

Excellent

Dear Jewell,

This post was designed so attractively that I just had to stop to read it, and I'm glad I did. I think the part that was the most alluring and held the most meat for me was the last stanza:

No
Perhaps maybe
A life raft
For one


Thank you for sharing your wonderful work.

Yours,

Jenny *smile*

 Comment Written 20-Feb-2007

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reply by the author on 20-Feb-2007

Thanks Jenny

Comment from tecate

Excellent

You seem to write as one longing to find peace, yet not sure of the journeys companion...self? Or is it an indecision of how to separate two different sets of feelings. I am almost afraid to make any kind of comment...but If I didn't like this poem, I wouldn't bother reviewing it...Tecate

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 Comment Written 20-Feb-2007

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You are correct in all areas. Thank you tecate.

Comment from JoAnna Lee

Excellent

I know that feeling all so well. Nicely written, good imagery in free-verse form.
I really got a kick out of ythe ending... I know those feelings, too. Good Job!

Thanks for sharing,
Donna

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