Bubble on The Wind
Afraid to drift up high without support15 total reviews
Comment from nancyjam
This is a sweet and clever entry to the contest and I think children would love this imaginative story. I can just see it illustrated as book . Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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This is a sweet and clever entry to the contest and I think children would love this imaginative story. I can just see it illustrated as book . Good luck in the contest.
Nancy
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much Nancy! You just sent me adrift on cloud 9! I'm so glad you enjoyed this! Thank you for the wonderful review and contest wishes! :o)
Comment from Alexandra Trovato
This is an excellent poem. It is written with vivid and good rhymes. It has a compelling image presentation. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes.
Alex
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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This is an excellent poem. It is written with vivid and good rhymes. It has a compelling image presentation. I enjoyed reading this.
Best wishes.
Alex
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Hi Alex, If this poem brought a smile to your face then I did my job! Thank you for the lovely review! :o)
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It did. You're welcome!
Comment from Noreen Bernardo
This is such a delightful poem with so much imagination! What a fun adventure. I read it twice. It's certainly a poem I would enjoy reading to my young grandchildren.
Best wishes to you!
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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This is such a delightful poem with so much imagination! What a fun adventure. I read it twice. It's certainly a poem I would enjoy reading to my young grandchildren.
Best wishes to you!
Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Hi Noreen, I'm absolutely thrilled you enjoyed the poem and read it twice! I don't think anyone can compliment you more than that! Thank you so much! Thanks for the contest wishes too! :o)
Comment from Harambe iz ur Daddy
Well rhymed and metered, and this should be a popular entry considering kids love bubbles and your piece is super colorful. A couple lines are slightly clumsy with the natural enunciation vs. binary meter (e.g. "As new airborne flyboys") but overall it works.
Some minor edits:
To where they'd ever been <= I think you probably mean "never", not "ever"?
So these two <= extra space here
To surf the airs delights <= unless "air" is supposed to be plural, it appears this should be possessive: air's
Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
🦍
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Well rhymed and metered, and this should be a popular entry considering kids love bubbles and your piece is super colorful. A couple lines are slightly clumsy with the natural enunciation vs. binary meter (e.g. "As new airborne flyboys") but overall it works.
Some minor edits:
To where they'd ever been <= I think you probably mean "never", not "ever"?
So these two <= extra space here
To surf the airs delights <= unless "air" is supposed to be plural, it appears this should be possessive: air's
Thanks for the read and good luck in the contest,
🦍
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Hi Harambe, The editor always seems to play with spaces and lines in my poems. I had to re-set the poem because it ran together. I think I mistakenly erased the "n" in the line.."To where they'd never been" and left an extra space after... So these two... Sometimes I wonder if I'll ever get the poem posted right? LOL Glad you didn't find too many errors! Thank you for the wonderful review and wishes for the contest! :o)
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem is absolutely delightful! I love how you take something as simple as a bubble and a spider and turn it into this adventure in the sky.
The poem flows so nicely - it was a joy to read. It's such a heartwarming tale of friendship. What a fun read!
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reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Your poem is absolutely delightful! I love how you take something as simple as a bubble and a spider and turn it into this adventure in the sky.
The poem flows so nicely - it was a joy to read. It's such a heartwarming tale of friendship. What a fun read!
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Comment Written 27-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 27-Mar-2025
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Hi Michael, I didn't know when I started where this poem was going! I wrote about a poem about a Kite, balloon and bubble
having fun together, quite a while ago so, I thought I'd give a new bubble a journey of his own. I'm glad you enjoyed it! Thank you for the wonderful review! :o)
