Betrayal
A short poem on the theme of betrayal11 total reviews
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your poem shares the pain of betrayal so welll! The way you describe it as something that "slides inside the heart" and "poisoning any hopes or dreams" makes the emotion feel so real. I really love how you end with those questioning lines. Your poem flows beautifully. What a wonderful first post! Welcome! Keep writing!
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reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Your poem shares the pain of betrayal so welll! The way you describe it as something that "slides inside the heart" and "poisoning any hopes or dreams" makes the emotion feel so real. I really love how you end with those questioning lines. Your poem flows beautifully. What a wonderful first post! Welcome! Keep writing!
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Comment Written 22-Mar-2025
reply by the author on 23-Mar-2025
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Thank you so much! The questioning lines just seemed to fit so I am glad you enjoyed them. Thank you very much for taking the time to review my work!
