Ben Paul Persons
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Comment from Barry Penfold
Moving along nicely. Setting the scene for a showdown with the expectation of bloodshed. You are gathering quite a cast of characters, and I look forward to the future action. All the best and thanks for sharing.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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Moving along nicely. Setting the scene for a showdown with the expectation of bloodshed. You are gathering quite a cast of characters, and I look forward to the future action. All the best and thanks for sharing.
Take care.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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Thank you for your awesome review.
Comment from Elias Noor
This chapter masterfully balances faith, suspense, and moral conflict, making for a riveting read. A few small refinements could enhance immersion, but overall, it is a strong, well-written, and gripping continuation of the story.
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reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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This chapter masterfully balances faith, suspense, and moral conflict, making for a riveting read. A few small refinements could enhance immersion, but overall, it is a strong, well-written, and gripping continuation of the story.
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Comment Written 01-Feb-2025
reply by the author on 01-Feb-2025
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Thank you.
But were I to attempt to refine, I would no doubt encumber the wrong elements, mucking up the soup instead of enhancing immersion. (frowny face here)
