Reality Fades
a Triolet poetic form23 total reviews
Comment from Jasmine Girl
I just love this sentence of "slow, droning bees sing serenades." The buzzing of the bees may sound annoy but if it is a serenade, it must be beautiful. I only see one rhyming among all eight lines.
Well done.
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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I just love this sentence of "slow, droning bees sing serenades." The buzzing of the bees may sound annoy but if it is a serenade, it must be beautiful. I only see one rhyming among all eight lines.
Well done.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 09-Jan-2025
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Thank you sweet Lisa! I went on Shadowpoetry.com and looked around at different poetic forms. This Triolet form caught my eye. Glad you enjoyed it, my friend. I used the same rhyme but added an 's' to the end to give it a change to meet the requirements.
Melissa
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written, triolet and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all you write and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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This is a very well written, triolet and I enjoyed very much listening to it. I wish you the very best with all you write and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hello Patricia. Thanks so much!!
Melissa
Comment from Bill Schott
This triolet, Reality Fades, has the proper formatting and lowers the readers into the subfoliage to where life is slowed to what is absolutely necessary.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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This triolet, Reality Fades, has the proper formatting and lowers the readers into the subfoliage to where life is slowed to what is absolutely necessary.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you Bill!!
Melissa
Comment from mermaids
You have a delicious use of words that takes the reader to another place. I love the repeating line " slow droning bees sing serenades." It shows nature in action and even bees can make us feel good. Your poetic form is smooth and has an almost musical feel to it.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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You have a delicious use of words that takes the reader to another place. I love the repeating line " slow droning bees sing serenades." It shows nature in action and even bees can make us feel good. Your poetic form is smooth and has an almost musical feel to it.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much for a wonderful review. So glad you enjoyed it!!
Melissa
Comment from royowen
What a clever triolet, could described as written almost in monorhyme, but their is a difference, making it quite different with this S addition, well done Melissa, good job, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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What a clever triolet, could described as written almost in monorhyme, but their is a difference, making it quite different with this S addition, well done Melissa, good job, blessings Roy
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you Roy... yes, I used the 's' intentionally to match the requirements of the poem, but also grabbed that mono rhyme feel as well. Thanks for catching that :). Hugs, sweet Roy.
Melissa
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Well done
Comment from Begin Again
So calming, Melissa. Just add a little rippling creek or waterfall and I would be so content to stay. The picture was beautiful but the words added the feeling. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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So calming, Melissa. Just add a little rippling creek or waterfall and I would be so content to stay. The picture was beautiful but the words added the feeling. Very well done.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you Carol... I will consider the creeks and waterfalls in upcoming verses. They sound charming. :)
Melissa
Comment from Rachelle Allen
This was soothing and lovely, with a meter that felt as if I were on a pool raft, indulging in the swells if the most gentle of currents. Just beautiful, Melissa, and topped off with that gorgeous picture!! Xo
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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This was soothing and lovely, with a meter that felt as if I were on a pool raft, indulging in the swells if the most gentle of currents. Just beautiful, Melissa, and topped off with that gorgeous picture!! Xo
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank You Rachelle. I had not written a Triolet in a long time and thought it was time to take one out and dust it off :). So appreciate you!
Melissa
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Like riding a bike - at least for YOU!! Coxo
Comment from Paul McFarland
That's pretty good, Melissa. I have never tried my hand at that exotic stuff. Maybe someday. That's a nice picture to go along with your poem.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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That's pretty good, Melissa. I have never tried my hand at that exotic stuff. Maybe someday. That's a nice picture to go along with your poem.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Thank you so much Paul! So glad you enjoyed it.
Melissa
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
A charming poem Melissa full of summer fun when we don't mind being in the shade as the sun is hot and we need to be cooled down. I am loving those bee serenades here, love Dolly x
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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A charming poem Melissa full of summer fun when we don't mind being in the shade as the sun is hot and we need to be cooled down. I am loving those bee serenades here, love Dolly x
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hi Dolly. Thank you. From your comment, it seems like someone else is talking about bees? Who is it and I will pop over to read their poem. Thanks again.
Melissa
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I meant the one's in your poem Melissa, the bees have long gone in my town x x x
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I see. Well we have 4 inches of snow on the ground, so bees are scarce here too. LOL. Hugs!
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Beautiful Triolet. I love your repetitive lines. The entire poem gives off a peacefulness and the feeling of a late summer afternoon working its way to twilight. Nice to think about on this chilly winter morning. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Beautiful Triolet. I love your repetitive lines. The entire poem gives off a peacefulness and the feeling of a late summer afternoon working its way to twilight. Nice to think about on this chilly winter morning. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 07-Jan-2025
reply by the author on 07-Jan-2025
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Hello Marilyn. Thank you so much. I haven't written this form in a long time and thought I would take it out and dust if off ;). So appreciate you!!
Melissa
