the ants
Dodoitsu poem33 total reviews
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice put together. Interesting graphic. Thanks for sharing. I must admit to finding some Japanese poetry difficult to evaluate. All the best for the contest. Take care and have a most wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Nice put together. Interesting graphic. Thanks for sharing. I must admit to finding some Japanese poetry difficult to evaluate. All the best for the contest. Take care and have a most wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation, Sanku.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-You set the scene well in the beginning,
and then describe them "invading everywhere."
-Very good concluding lines how how
humans deal with this situation.
-Well done. Have a great 2025!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation, Sanku.
-You wrote a good poem with a good topic.
-You set the scene well in the beginning,
and then describe them "invading everywhere."
-Very good concluding lines how how
humans deal with this situation.
-Well done. Have a great 2025!
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from karenina
7-7-7-5 count. (I had to look it up to refresh my memory)
Aren't we humans into "overkill" though?
Poor ants. Teeny tiny posts and we crush them with giant feet!
Anything to save a picnic, I guess!
Cute!
Karenina
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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7-7-7-5 count. (I had to look it up to refresh my memory)
Aren't we humans into "overkill" though?
Poor ants. Teeny tiny posts and we crush them with giant feet!
Anything to save a picnic, I guess!
Cute!
Karenina
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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true They are so tiny but we are so helplessagainst them!
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My fear of bugs is entirely disproportionate to their size!
Comment from lyenochka
That's a good contrast between the orderly and "regimental" ants marching everywhere compared to the "huge humans" in their "helpless rage" against such an army.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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That's a good contrast between the orderly and "regimental" ants marching everywhere compared to the "huge humans" in their "helpless rage" against such an army.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
Ants are tenacious and they often follow the leader blindly and get into the corners where they cannot be stamped on. I once baked some scones and put them in a cupboard high up with the lid off to cool off. The ants marched from the floor, climbed along the cabinets and into the high cupboard to eat my scones! I was horrified! I had to throw them all away. I enjoyed your lively post riddled with ants, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Ants are tenacious and they often follow the leader blindly and get into the corners where they cannot be stamped on. I once baked some scones and put them in a cupboard high up with the lid off to cool off. The ants marched from the floor, climbed along the cabinets and into the high cupboard to eat my scones! I was horrified! I had to throw them all away. I enjoyed your lively post riddled with ants, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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so true so true. WE keeps sweets in a deep saucer of water! somehow they can't swim across I think! Thanks for stopping by.
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Ha ha ha, a great solution!
Comment from kahpot
Yes, unfortunately we humans do this, and most times without even knowing it, and yes, they do invade and can cause quite the obstacle sometimes, a wonderful read for the challenge club****kahpot
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Yes, unfortunately we humans do this, and most times without even knowing it, and yes, they do invade and can cause quite the obstacle sometimes, a wonderful read for the challenge club****kahpot
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Some bite and their bites can be painful..Thanks for stopping by
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Hi, I have never heard of thus type of poem. I'm learning all the different types. Ants are pretty amazing. I like some of the words you used in tge poem. Very good writing.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Hi, I have never heard of thus type of poem. I'm learning all the different types. Ants are pretty amazing. I like some of the words you used in tge poem. Very good writing.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you very much .I should have written the rules in my author notes...
Comment from Trina Layne
I love the flow of your writing here. Nature provides us with so much material. Thanks for sharing your perspective on ants. I'm not sure what a dodoitsu poem is but I hope you met all the technical elements of the craft. Nevertheless, congratulations on your work!
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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I love the flow of your writing here. Nature provides us with so much material. Thanks for sharing your perspective on ants. I'm not sure what a dodoitsu poem is but I hope you met all the technical elements of the craft. Nevertheless, congratulations on your work!
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thank you very much for stopping by.It is a 4 lines poem with syllable count 7,7,7,5. usually with humour or irony ..i should have mentioned this in my author notes..
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I don't like ants in my house but outside they are fun to watch. I am not a fan of fire ants; their bite isn't at all good. I enjoyed reading.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Thank you for sharing this club entry with us. I don't like ants in my house but outside they are fun to watch. I am not a fan of fire ants; their bite isn't at all good. I enjoyed reading.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thank you very muuch.
Comment from Darlene BoClair
Red ants are insects I have not seen in my life time. Reading your poetry makes ants seem dangerous to humans. There are so many styles of poetry and I liked that you've taken the time to introduce this style. I like a poet who educate the readers.
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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Red ants are insects I have not seen in my life time. Reading your poetry makes ants seem dangerous to humans. There are so many styles of poetry and I liked that you've taken the time to introduce this style. I like a poet who educate the readers.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 30-Dec-2024
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thank you very much.
