Deconstructing
Cherita poem - Potlatch Club24 total reviews
Comment from Janet Foor
Interesting poetic form. I'm not familiar with this one but enjoyed reading and learning about a different form.
Perfect syllable count and artwork to complement your work.
Nicely done and Happy New year.
Janet
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Interesting poetic form. I'm not familiar with this one but enjoyed reading and learning about a different form.
Perfect syllable count and artwork to complement your work.
Nicely done and Happy New year.
Janet
Comment Written 29-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 29-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the terse, yet, thorough review, Janet. Hope your Christmas was good. Happy New Year.
Jaon
Comment from Trina Layne
Does the cherita poem have to be alliterative or is that your preference? I quite liked it, especially the comparison with destitute dreams. I thought it was a useful simile. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Does the cherita poem have to be alliterative or is that your preference? I quite liked it, especially the comparison with destitute dreams. I thought it was a useful simile. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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No, the alliteration is my choice.
Thanks for the nice review, Trina. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Excellent entry for the cherita Potlatch event. Good syllables count. Nice presentation. I
Well done!
Gypsy
"Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it." - George Santayana
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Excellent entry for the cherita Potlatch event. Good syllables count. Nice presentation. I
Well done!
Gypsy
"Those who cannot remember the past are condemned to repeat it." - George Santayana
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Thanks for your continued support, Marival. It is much appreciated.
Joan
Comment from Begin Again
I'm not a poet and know little about the rules so I will stick to what I see.... the sand castles. What a wonderful way to pass the time on a warm sunny beach, knowing like life, the waves will come and wash all the hard work away. The cycle of life...
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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I'm not a poet and know little about the rules so I will stick to what I see.... the sand castles. What a wonderful way to pass the time on a warm sunny beach, knowing like life, the waves will come and wash all the hard work away. The cycle of life...
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Hi Carol,
Thanks for reading and commenting on my poem. I appreciate all the stars.
Joan
Comment from estory
I thought this was interesting. I don't know much about this form, but there was a sense of rolling in the rhythm of the lines here, that mimicked the wave action. There's an ephemeral nature to the imagery, of the sandcastles being washed away, like someone's dreams being washed away in the realities of life. estory
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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I thought this was interesting. I don't know much about this form, but there was a sense of rolling in the rhythm of the lines here, that mimicked the wave action. There's an ephemeral nature to the imagery, of the sandcastles being washed away, like someone's dreams being washed away in the realities of life. estory
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the thorough and positive review. Estory. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Father Flaps
Hi Joan,
We used to take our kids to PEI every summer. We stayed at Adams Seaview Beach chalets & cottages. Seaview is every bit as nice as Cavendish Beach, but much more privacy. Cavendish is always crowded. The last time we were there was in August of 2020. But my youngest son and daughter have been there the last few years. It was more exciting, taking one of the ferries to PEI. But now, people drive across the Confederation Bridge. That's a bit scary for this old timer! But I've done it twice. And one thing we always enjoyed was helping the kids, and now grandkids, in making sand castles! We always included a moat that would fill with the incoming tide first. But eventually, with stronger waves, the castle would melt like butter, bit by bit, vanishing like a dream.
Nicely penned! Thanks for the memories!
Hugs,
Kimbob
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Hi Joan,
We used to take our kids to PEI every summer. We stayed at Adams Seaview Beach chalets & cottages. Seaview is every bit as nice as Cavendish Beach, but much more privacy. Cavendish is always crowded. The last time we were there was in August of 2020. But my youngest son and daughter have been there the last few years. It was more exciting, taking one of the ferries to PEI. But now, people drive across the Confederation Bridge. That's a bit scary for this old timer! But I've done it twice. And one thing we always enjoyed was helping the kids, and now grandkids, in making sand castles! We always included a moat that would fill with the incoming tide first. But eventually, with stronger waves, the castle would melt like butter, bit by bit, vanishing like a dream.
Nicely penned! Thanks for the memories!
Hugs,
Kimbob
Comment Written 28-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 28-Dec-2024
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Hi Kimbob,
A moat is always a good idea to make a sandcastle last longer.
Thanks for the review and the memories.
Joan
Comment from June Sargent
Isn't that how life goes sometimes - the best laid plans go awry with just one fell swoop. We can't control our circumstances any more than we can the tides. We just have to reconstruct!
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Isn't that how life goes sometimes - the best laid plans go awry with just one fell swoop. We can't control our circumstances any more than we can the tides. We just have to reconstruct!
Comment Written 27-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Hi June
Thanks for reading and reviewing my poem. Glad you liked it.
Joan
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Dragon Poet,
This is a great Cherita poem that you wrote. It is so true that all of the castle made will wash away wwith the tide. Wonderful poem.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Dragon Poet,
This is a great Cherita poem that you wrote. It is so true that all of the castle made will wash away wwith the tide. Wonderful poem.
Cecilia
Comment Written 27-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Thank, Cecilia for taking the time to read and review my poem. It is much appreciated. I am happy that you enjoyed it.
Joan
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Joan,
You're welcome
Comment from kahpot
Wonderful alliteration throughout, and the thought of such a beautiful day, I would let all my sad dreams drift away with that wonderful sandcastle, a great form for all to try, very well written****kahpot
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Wonderful alliteration throughout, and the thought of such a beautiful day, I would let all my sad dreams drift away with that wonderful sandcastle, a great form for all to try, very well written****kahpot
Comment Written 27-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Thanks for the positive comments and the encouragement. Does it mean you will try it?
Joan
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It does, and I will
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I tried, posted, and thoroughly enjoyed the challenge, thank you
"long awaited"
Comment from karenina
Oh boy! Another new form to put on my list to try! I like this style. It's brief but not constraining as to syllable count. Your poem is perfectly themed as it is -- and metaphorically speaks to all the "castles" we built that (alas) do not last nearly as long as we'd hoped...
Nice "S", "C" and "D" alliteration!
Karenina
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Oh boy! Another new form to put on my list to try! I like this style. It's brief but not constraining as to syllable count. Your poem is perfectly themed as it is -- and metaphorically speaks to all the "castles" we built that (alas) do not last nearly as long as we'd hoped...
Nice "S", "C" and "D" alliteration!
Karenina
Comment Written 27-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 27-Dec-2024
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Thanks for reviewing my poem. It was fun to do. I can't wait to see yours. It is sad how quickly some dreams fade away.
Joan
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At one post a month....(none this month!) it might be a while...
It's on my to try list!
