Willing Hearts
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Comment from estory
The temperature rises throughout this date between Sami and Noah, and she seems to melt in his arms at the end. He says the right things, makes the right moves, and they seem to celebrate their feelings together. We also see how Noah trusts Jose with Sami, so the friends are folded into this relationship too. As usual the dialogue is very realistic, but I still think you can cut a lot of the small talk about what they are going to eat and whether they want dessert. You do seem on top of the body language though. There's a lot going on beneath the dialogue in this scene. estory
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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The temperature rises throughout this date between Sami and Noah, and she seems to melt in his arms at the end. He says the right things, makes the right moves, and they seem to celebrate their feelings together. We also see how Noah trusts Jose with Sami, so the friends are folded into this relationship too. As usual the dialogue is very realistic, but I still think you can cut a lot of the small talk about what they are going to eat and whether they want dessert. You do seem on top of the body language though. There's a lot going on beneath the dialogue in this scene. estory
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. When I cut those things, I get accused of rushing the scene.
Comment from nomi338
Noah is showing uncommon good sense and manners with his attitude towards Sami. Few men would be able to maintain their composure with a woman as beautiful and seductive as your description of Sami implies. Even true love and respect can lead a man to act improperly at times when he becomes overwhelmed by desire. Great job of realistic writing.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Noah is showing uncommon good sense and manners with his attitude towards Sami. Few men would be able to maintain their composure with a woman as beautiful and seductive as your description of Sami implies. Even true love and respect can lead a man to act improperly at times when he becomes overwhelmed by desire. Great job of realistic writing.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Noah is extremely strong and removes himself before he gets in too deep. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from BethShelby
This was a very romantic chapter. I thought he might even propose. This pair see very right for each other now. In the beginning they didn't but falling in love seems to have changed Noah.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This was a very romantic chapter. I thought he might even propose. This pair see very right for each other now. In the beginning they didn't but falling in love seems to have changed Noah.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Yes, Noah has changed. I think Sami has too, a little. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
This was a really sweet chapter, Barbara, but I really thought he was going to propose after the dinner. It had better happen soon, or they will both lose control the way they are acting. Well done, another lovely chapter.
Have a very happy Christmas, and a healthy, productive 2025! Warm wishes, Sandra xx
"I want to caution you, I (I'm) going to mess up, a lot.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This was a really sweet chapter, Barbara, but I really thought he was going to propose after the dinner. It had better happen soon, or they will both lose control the way they are acting. Well done, another lovely chapter.
Have a very happy Christmas, and a healthy, productive 2025! Warm wishes, Sandra xx
"I want to caution you, I (I'm) going to mess up, a lot.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and the catch. I have made the correction.
Comment from Sandollar
This was a great story and a pleasure to read. Not having read the other chapters, I felt as though I wouldn't understand it but I was able to jump in there. People don't realize what's actually going on. Teenage girls are being plucked off the streets, never to be seen again. And not only the young people are being grabbed up. Please tell me what the deal is with picnics. I was not bored with it. It read well. I found one minor error below:
"I want to caution you, I going to mess up, a lot." (I'm sure you meant it to be I'm.)
Best Wishes and Happy Holidays.
Sandollar
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This was a great story and a pleasure to read. Not having read the other chapters, I felt as though I wouldn't understand it but I was able to jump in there. People don't realize what's actually going on. Teenage girls are being plucked off the streets, never to be seen again. And not only the young people are being grabbed up. Please tell me what the deal is with picnics. I was not bored with it. It read well. I found one minor error below:
"I want to caution you, I going to mess up, a lot." (I'm sure you meant it to be I'm.)
Best Wishes and Happy Holidays.
Sandollar
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the catch. I've made the correction. Nothing really. They aren't going to get to go on the picnic something gets in the way. DARN!!
Comment from Sankey
This was a really wonderful chapter. I loved all the procedures and the romance throughout. I look forward to much more. Just one possible spag. I('m) going to mess up, a lot."
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This was a really wonderful chapter. I loved all the procedures and the romance throughout. I look forward to much more. Just one possible spag. I('m) going to mess up, a lot."
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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I have made the correction. Thank you for the catch and the kind reviw.
Comment from Sanku
This.is a beautiful song.thank you for including it.
This is a wonderfully romantic chapter .I enjoyed reading the details of their date .Even the lessons on pistols didn't take the shine out of the romance
Merry Christmas to you and your family
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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This.is a beautiful song.thank you for including it.
This is a wonderfully romantic chapter .I enjoyed reading the details of their date .Even the lessons on pistols didn't take the shine out of the romance
Merry Christmas to you and your family
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I appreciate it.
Comment from Paul McFarland
Very nice post, Barb. Good things happened, and there wasn't any surprises. I was really looking forward to hear Frank Sinatra. That didn't sound like his voice.
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Very nice post, Barb. Good things happened, and there wasn't any surprises. I was really looking forward to hear Frank Sinatra. That didn't sound like his voice.
Comment Written 23-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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I'm not sure why. It's supposed to be Frank Sinatra or at least it is labeled that it is. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear! I feel like that young boy that complains about the movie that has "too much kissing"! Sorry, I don't have the romantic gene. Lol. Anyway, I'm glad that they finally had a real date even if interrupted by work.
Merry Christmas to you and yours!!
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Oh dear! I feel like that young boy that complains about the movie that has "too much kissing"! Sorry, I don't have the romantic gene. Lol. Anyway, I'm glad that they finally had a real date even if interrupted by work.
Merry Christmas to you and yours!!
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Sorry about the genre. It's my area. I do appreciate you dropping by and leaving this kind review.
Comment from Teri7
Another great chapter my friend. Great dialogue between Sami and Noah. I think they both are smitten now. I had guys in the day that felt that way about me. This takes me way back in time! Thank you for sharing my friend. Merry Christmas to you and your family! love and blessings, Teri
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Another great chapter my friend. Great dialogue between Sami and Noah. I think they both are smitten now. I had guys in the day that felt that way about me. This takes me way back in time! Thank you for sharing my friend. Merry Christmas to you and your family! love and blessings, Teri
Comment Written 22-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 23-Dec-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I remember the romance back when we were young. Such wonderful memories.
