Spiritual Rhythm
A Lune of Spiritual art21 total reviews
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Perfectly fitting the brief, your 5-3-5 lune skilfully and playfully combines music with the sound of rain on a tin roof. I can virtually hear the harmony, Don, in your imaginative verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Perfectly fitting the brief, your 5-3-5 lune skilfully and playfully combines music with the sound of rain on a tin roof. I can virtually hear the harmony, Don, in your imaginative verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Debbie so very much for your kind thoughts and review.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
DonandVicki,
This is a lovely lune poem. Those three simple lines is perfect. I love to listen to the rhythmic rain, especially at night when going to sleep at night.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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DonandVicki,
This is a lovely lune poem. Those three simple lines is perfect. I love to listen to the rhythmic rain, especially at night when going to sleep at night.
Well done and good luck in the contest.
Cecilia
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Cecilia for your thoughtful review.
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You're welcome
Comment from nomi338
There is something so pleasing and harmonious about the sound of rain on a tin roof. Totally dissimilar to the sound of a cat on a hot tin roof. (Sorry Mr. Tennessee Williams). I could not resist, I am after all an unrepentant fool. I did enjoy the poem by the way.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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There is something so pleasing and harmonious about the sound of rain on a tin roof. Totally dissimilar to the sound of a cat on a hot tin roof. (Sorry Mr. Tennessee Williams). I could not resist, I am after all an unrepentant fool. I did enjoy the poem by the way.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I always look forward to your reviews, Nomi.
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That is very kind of you.
Comment from patcelaw
I like the use of the words harmony on a tin roof as it is raining. May you have a very blessed day and may God give you a very merry Christmas and a very happy new year. Patricia.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I like the use of the words harmony on a tin roof as it is raining. May you have a very blessed day and may God give you a very merry Christmas and a very happy new year. Patricia.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much, Patricia for your kind thoughts and review.
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-I guess you wrote an acrostic lune!
-It's often interesting how things
come out when they aren't planned.
-You wrote a very good lune with a good topic.
-Each line is very good and describes
the joy that comes from a "rhythmic rain."
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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-Very nice artwork and presentation.
-I guess you wrote an acrostic lune!
-It's often interesting how things
come out when they aren't planned.
-You wrote a very good lune with a good topic.
-Each line is very good and describes
the joy that comes from a "rhythmic rain."
-A very good concluding line.
-A good entry; good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you so much Pam.
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You are very welcome.
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I have heard the pitter patter for the last two days as the heavy rain is noisy and also comforting. You created the delightful sound of harmony in your post, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I have heard the pitter patter for the last two days as the heavy rain is noisy and also comforting. You created the delightful sound of harmony in your post, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much, Dolly.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
Wow, these words speak v
olumes. Picture and words go together great. It is so clever that it came out as an acrostic. I enjoyed this poem. Good luck.in the contest.
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Wow, these words speak v
olumes. Picture and words go together great. It is so clever that it came out as an acrostic. I enjoyed this poem. Good luck.in the contest.
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Bernda for the kind thoughts and review.
Comment from Mark D. R.
Fantastic idea you penned. And by fortuitous chance you did the Lune as an acrostic poem. Nature, indeed, crafts art every day, even in stormy weather.
Your last line is a nice twist and transition from the natural rhythm of the rain.
I only suggest for these wee poems, you uncap the first words and consider increasing the font size. The latter IMHO improves the presentation value to other reviewers. (Whether you add a squiggle or dash after your middle line is a stylistic choice by you, the poet.)
Best wishes in the contest voting. My guess you will get serious traction for your entry.
Mark
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Fantastic idea you penned. And by fortuitous chance you did the Lune as an acrostic poem. Nature, indeed, crafts art every day, even in stormy weather.
Your last line is a nice twist and transition from the natural rhythm of the rain.
I only suggest for these wee poems, you uncap the first words and consider increasing the font size. The latter IMHO improves the presentation value to other reviewers. (Whether you add a squiggle or dash after your middle line is a stylistic choice by you, the poet.)
Best wishes in the contest voting. My guess you will get serious traction for your entry.
Mark
Comment Written 19-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much, Mark for the six and generous review.
Comment from lyenochka
I liked your "tin roof harmony" which keeps up with the musical theme in the alliterative second line "rhythmic rain". Nature puts on a lovely concert at all times of the day. Best wishes in the contest!
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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I liked your "tin roof harmony" which keeps up with the musical theme in the alliterative second line "rhythmic rain". Nature puts on a lovely concert at all times of the day. Best wishes in the contest!
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you so very much for your kind thoughts and review.
Comment from Lana Marie
This is a really good lune poetry contest. I love that in your author notes you point out that it's also in an acrostic. I can almost hear the dripping of the raindrops on the roof.
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reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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This is a really good lune poetry contest. I love that in your author notes you point out that it's also in an acrostic. I can almost hear the dripping of the raindrops on the roof.
This rating does not count towards story rating or author rank.
The highest and the lowest rating are not included in calculations.
Comment Written 18-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 19-Dec-2024
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Thank you, Lana for the wonderful review.