Swimmer's Ear
Stories of the waves16 total reviews
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Very nicely done. It reads as if you captured it perfectly.
...immodest in their geriatric state of nothing to prove - No point in attempting to artificially suck in the gut and swell the chest at our age. (smiley face here)
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Very nicely done. It reads as if you captured it perfectly.
...immodest in their geriatric state of nothing to prove - No point in attempting to artificially suck in the gut and swell the chest at our age. (smiley face here)
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
Comment from Nicki.B
I absolutely love this Julie. I was just in for a sea dip this morning myself although outside temps are only 3 degrees. So my skin was so number it didn't have the opportunity to goosebump lol!
this was so much fun to read and I could picture it really well. I love your opening I am not a toedipper, I am a canonball. Brilliant lol!
Well done this was very enjoyable indeed!
Best Wishes
Nicki
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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I absolutely love this Julie. I was just in for a sea dip this morning myself although outside temps are only 3 degrees. So my skin was so number it didn't have the opportunity to goosebump lol!
this was so much fun to read and I could picture it really well. I love your opening I am not a toedipper, I am a canonball. Brilliant lol!
Well done this was very enjoyable indeed!
Best Wishes
Nicki
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 11-Dec-2024
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Thank you thank you thank you!!!!!
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This poem reminds me that I ought to make a bigger effort to go swimming, in spite of it being winter. This poem suggests how swimming brings back memories of swimming in the ocean, with the conch shell reference. Good description of the senior citizens' skin type and movements, too. I had to go look up the word 'comber.' What an intriguing word.
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This poem reminds me that I ought to make a bigger effort to go swimming, in spite of it being winter. This poem suggests how swimming brings back memories of swimming in the ocean, with the conch shell reference. Good description of the senior citizens' skin type and movements, too. I had to go look up the word 'comber.' What an intriguing word.
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
Comment from pome lover
a great two lines to start the poem. I loved how you were undulating, porpoise-like beneath the flabby armed exercisers-- their arms like melting bubble gum and yours like a metronome. Too funny.
I was reading along, enjoying your arms, efficient as paddles, then I was stopped by a mention of a 400 pound boat. Where did that come from? Just curious as to - well, heck, I can't think of he word for moving fluidly from one thing to another. Anyway it's a good poem. Enjoyable.
Katharine
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a great two lines to start the poem. I loved how you were undulating, porpoise-like beneath the flabby armed exercisers-- their arms like melting bubble gum and yours like a metronome. Too funny.
I was reading along, enjoying your arms, efficient as paddles, then I was stopped by a mention of a 400 pound boat. Where did that come from? Just curious as to - well, heck, I can't think of he word for moving fluidly from one thing to another. Anyway it's a good poem. Enjoyable.
Katharine
Comment Written 11-Dec-2024
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
I rode the waves in your dreamy poem about escapism during an aqua aerobics class Julie and I enjoyed the journey through your well chosen words, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x x x
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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I rode the waves in your dreamy poem about escapism during an aqua aerobics class Julie and I enjoyed the journey through your well chosen words, a fine post for the contest, love Dolly x x x
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thank you Dolly! Much appreciated!
Comment from Y. M. Roger
A unique experience free form with an inviting format and wonderful if not surprising descriptors creating your vision... well done. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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A unique experience free form with an inviting format and wonderful if not surprising descriptors creating your vision... well done. Thanx for sharing and best of luck! ;)
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Comment Written 10-Dec-2024
reply by the author on 10-Dec-2024
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Thanks so much! Your remarks are so appreciated!