Comment from Sergeant F. Dare

Excellent

Nice poem. I also like the picture. Is it drawn or did you take it? Poetry paints its own picture when well done as this one is, and it is enhanced by the one you added

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review. I appreciate your comments about the poem. I took the picture. I can't draw or paint anything. I agree that poetry can "paint its own picture." I am glad you enjoyed it.

reply by Sergeant F. Dare on 05-Dec-2024

That's ok. You took a lovely pic.

Comment from royowen

Excellent

In the fine tradition of making much out just a few syllables contained in many Japanese forms, this is a fine renga poem, that fairly sings to the soul Pam, well done, blessings Roy

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, Roy. I appreciate your comments about meaning with a few syllables. I am glad you liked this one, and I like your description "sings to the soul." It is very meaningful.

reply by royowen on 03-Dec-2024

Well done Pam

Comment from barbara.wilkey

Excellent

I don't understand renga poems, but I do know what I like when I read it. I really enjoyed reading this poem and the artwork that went with us. Thank you for sharing both with us.

 Comment Written 03-Dec-2024

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review. Renga has two parts. The first person writes a haiku. Whoever is next writes a two line poem of 7 syllables each that relate to the basic idea of the previous haiku, then it keeps alternating after that. I am glad you enjoyed this and the artwork.

Comment from Dolly'sPoems

Excellent

The Heron is always so very patient and I enjoyed your peaceful Haiku Pam as the Heron continues to search for a meal at the water's edge, much enjoyed, love Dolly x

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, Dolly. I appreciate your comments about the heron and haiku. I think the heron is probably the most peaceful creature there is. It is also beautiful.

Comment from Debbie D'Arcy

Excellent

This is mesmerisingly beautiful, Pam: the subdued colours, the translucent sun and the solitude. A great and calming Renga poem, a true pleasure. Well done! Debbie

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, Debbie. I appreciate your comments about this poem and I'm glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for sharing about being beautiful, the "subdued colors," solitude, and being calming. It means a lot.

Comment from patcelaw

Excellent

This is quite well done and enjoyed reading it. I wish you a very good day. I wish you also a wonderful week and may you have a very merry and happy Christmas. Patricia.

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reply by the author on 03-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review. I appreciate your comments about the poem and am glad you enjoyed it. Thank you for the good wishes and they are returned to you.

Comment from Ulla

Exceptional

Hi Pam, I love it. It's a perfect response to the previous entry. The picture almost speaks for itself, but your lovely poem not only backs it up but is beautifully written.
This is a fun project. I may even add to it again, even during my time off. Ulla xx

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thank you for the exceptional rating and review, Ulla. I appreciate your comments about the poem and picture. It is a fun project. I'm glad you are participating.

Comment from evilynne

Excellent

That is an interesting little poem and a lovely picture. I am totally challenged when it comes to poetic formats and I am not familiar with the book. I have not read the previous haiku, unfortunately. Evi

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reply by the author on 04-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, Evi. I appreciate your comments about the poem and picture. It's hard to do everything, and everyone has their niches, which makes the site interesting.

Comment from GWHARGIS

Excellent

This was a beautiful scene that your poem has described. I could feel the cold and sense the patience of the heron. We have herons where I live. Very patient. I call them sentinels. Beautifully written. Gretchen

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, Gretchen. I appreciate your comments about the scene and that you could "feel the cold" and also sense the heron's patience. We live on a lake and have at least one heron every year. They are very patient. You have a good description of them, too.

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

Great entry to the book of renga. The imagery of a heron on a cold lake is so serene. Glad you joined the fun challenge! Gypsy should do this more often.

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reply by the author on 05-Dec-2024

Thanks for the review, June. I am glad you liked my entry and the imagery of the heron being serene. I did enjoy the challenge. You should send Gypsy a note. this is a fun project to participate in.