BOOK OF RENGA POEMS
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A New Day Dawns"Renga is a collective poets Japanese poem
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Comment from Natureschild
Hi Ulla, I am not familiar with this form of poetry, so I did some investigation. Here is what I found:
Traditionally, renga is written by a group of poets, with each participant contributing alternating verses.
Renga alternates between hokku (a 5-7-5 syllable verse) and waki (a 7-7 syllable verse).
The tone of a renga typically shifts between serious and light-hearted themes.
Each verse must connect to the one immediately before it but not necessarily to earlier verses. This connection might involve imagery, mood, or narrative progression.
Since your poem and my research conflict in the definition of a renga (my research may be wrong), I can only review it as I see it and not on the structure of its form.
The imagery is strong and vivid. I think your image is very nice too.
Did you intend the syllable count to be 5-8-6? Nevertheless, it's quite evocative.
Regards, Terry
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Hi Ulla, I am not familiar with this form of poetry, so I did some investigation. Here is what I found:
Traditionally, renga is written by a group of poets, with each participant contributing alternating verses.
Renga alternates between hokku (a 5-7-5 syllable verse) and waki (a 7-7 syllable verse).
The tone of a renga typically shifts between serious and light-hearted themes.
Each verse must connect to the one immediately before it but not necessarily to earlier verses. This connection might involve imagery, mood, or narrative progression.
Since your poem and my research conflict in the definition of a renga (my research may be wrong), I can only review it as I see it and not on the structure of its form.
The imagery is strong and vivid. I think your image is very nice too.
Did you intend the syllable count to be 5-8-6? Nevertheless, it's quite evocative.
Regards, Terry
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Begin Again
Good day, Ulla! I don't know the rules, but the words and photo you used are beautiful and match perfectly, giving the reader a sense of peace as the sun stretches over the horizon and says, "Good Morning."
Smiles, Carol
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Good day, Ulla! I don't know the rules, but the words and photo you used are beautiful and match perfectly, giving the reader a sense of peace as the sun stretches over the horizon and says, "Good Morning."
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hola, guapa,
Excellent chapter for our Renga Book. We have sunshine and cold on and off. I am ready for the winter solstice on December 21st. The Renga form has the right renga composition. Good syllables and connection between lines. Thank you for participating in our book with such beautiful verse.
besitos y abrazos
MariVal
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Hola, guapa,
Excellent chapter for our Renga Book. We have sunshine and cold on and off. I am ready for the winter solstice on December 21st. The Renga form has the right renga composition. Good syllables and connection between lines. Thank you for participating in our book with such beautiful verse.
besitos y abrazos
MariVal
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Bill Schott
The basic entry for the renga would be a tanka-form with five lines. Almost no one else has entered mor than a haiku though. I would add two seven-syllable or so lines to this. Happy day.
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The basic entry for the renga would be a tanka-form with five lines. Almost no one else has entered mor than a haiku though. I would add two seven-syllable or so lines to this. Happy day.
Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from BethShelby
I don't know the rules to a renga so I can't say but I assume your read them and followed them. I wish that was my day with unseasonable warm weather. It is cold here after some unseasonably warm day and I don't like the cold. Nice done and well illustrated.
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I don't know the rules to a renga so I can't say but I assume your read them and followed them. I wish that was my day with unseasonable warm weather. It is cold here after some unseasonably warm day and I don't like the cold. Nice done and well illustrated.
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2024
Comment from Sugarray77
Hello Ulla and well done. I am not familiar with the Renga form, but will definitely check it out. Your imagery and choice of art compel me to treat sunrises as fresh starts, and the off slant of the last line/satori is perfect to add depth and resonance. I really enjoyed this one, my friend.
Melissa
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Hello Ulla and well done. I am not familiar with the Renga form, but will definitely check it out. Your imagery and choice of art compel me to treat sunrises as fresh starts, and the off slant of the last line/satori is perfect to add depth and resonance. I really enjoyed this one, my friend.
Melissa
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Comment Written 02-Dec-2024