City Council at its Finest
Cheapskate - chapter 315 total reviews
Comment from EeanBlack
Two shots are significant unless I'm a big sissy. Somebody needs to die, pome! Three paragraphs and nobody dies is a no, no. LOl. It's getting interesting. You got drugs, guns, and illegals.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Two shots are significant unless I'm a big sissy. Somebody needs to die, pome! Three paragraphs and nobody dies is a no, no. LOl. It's getting interesting. You got drugs, guns, and illegals.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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and one murder, don't forget! Mildred the lawyer.
And Kate couldn't kill Marilyn's husband with her right there, but she did incapacitate him.
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Oh, you are correct of course, I didn't put that together. It must be the painkillers. LOL
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
This is a tense read as the story evolves and we become aware something is about to happen. Perhaps a good idea to write a list of characters and a precis of the story so far for those just coming into it? Also, I was a bit confused by the first sentence of para starting: Kate got off two shots... But thank you for sharing. I'll be looking forward to finding out why Marilyn screamed. Take care Debbie
...kidnap me to make Jim (go) through with it
Mar(i)lyn's husband
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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This is a tense read as the story evolves and we become aware something is about to happen. Perhaps a good idea to write a list of characters and a precis of the story so far for those just coming into it? Also, I was a bit confused by the first sentence of para starting: Kate got off two shots... But thank you for sharing. I'll be looking forward to finding out why Marilyn screamed. Take care Debbie
...kidnap me to make Jim (go) through with it
Mar(i)lyn's husband
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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yes, I fixed the "go". don't know where in the world the "went" came from. I sound eliterate. Jim is Marilyn's husband.
Debbie, if you have 10 minutes to spare, I don't think it would take that long to check out the first two chapters, and you would get a better feel for the story, than if I wrote a short blurb before each one - if you have time, and don't mind?
Comment from Barry Penfold
Nice story line and good build up to the shooting incident. I am sure looking for more and will wait patiently for the next instalment. Seems as though there may well be quite a few active participants. Well done.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Nice story line and good build up to the shooting incident. I am sure looking for more and will wait patiently for the next instalment. Seems as though there may well be quite a few active participants. Well done.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Barry! What a very nice review! It is much appreciated!
Katharine
Comment from Teri7
to kidnap me to make Jim went through with it.
go through with it
hold of Jim, but I'm scare to."
(scared)
This is a very good chapter with a lot of great excitement. Can't wait to read more. Great descriptive words and dialogue! love and blessings, Teri
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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to kidnap me to make Jim went through with it.
go through with it
hold of Jim, but I'm scare to."
(scared)
This is a very good chapter with a lot of great excitement. Can't wait to read more. Great descriptive words and dialogue! love and blessings, Teri
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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good grief, I even went through it twice and missed those things. The "went' makes me sound illiterate! sheesh!
Thanks for the catches!
Comment from DonandVicki
A very engaging flash fiction, I was pulled in from the start. You keep the reader wanting more at the end. I will be looking forward to the next chapter. Don
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reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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A very engaging flash fiction, I was pulled in from the start. You keep the reader wanting more at the end. I will be looking forward to the next chapter. Don
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 01-Dec-2024
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Thanks, Don! it's the third chapter - getting wilder. I'm having fun with it and am delighted that you like it. Gotta correct some errors I've been told are there, then off to chapter 4.
Thanks again!
Katharine
