Road Trip
A dad refuses to follow his son's advice.16 total reviews
Comment from Shanbreen
Yes, "a man needs hope and freedom to truly feel alive." I like the pacing of this poem. It moves well and I can see myself in the situation you paint with poetic words. All the best for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Yes, "a man needs hope and freedom to truly feel alive." I like the pacing of this poem. It moves well and I can see myself in the situation you paint with poetic words. All the best for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you for the encouraging review. The poem was loosely based on a true story.
Comment from HarryT
Well past sixty is not that old any longer. I bowl with people are vigorous and they are over ninety. I like your story well told with well-done rhyme. Glad your dad had the gumption to do what he knew was best for him. Hopefully, your children will have learned no matter how old, unless impaired, people have a right to decide about their own lives. This work is well done and carries a valuable life lesson.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Well past sixty is not that old any longer. I bowl with people are vigorous and they are over ninety. I like your story well told with well-done rhyme. Glad your dad had the gumption to do what he knew was best for him. Hopefully, your children will have learned no matter how old, unless impaired, people have a right to decide about their own lives. This work is well done and carries a valuable life lesson.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging review. The poem was loosely based on a true story.
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi Egomega,
This is a nice story poem about how children try to micromanage their parents when they don't have to.
It shows the father knew what he was doing and the son
owes him an apology.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy holidays.
Joan
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Hi Egomega,
This is a nice story poem about how children try to micromanage their parents when they don't have to.
It shows the father knew what he was doing and the son
owes him an apology.
Good luck in the contest
Keep writing and stay healthy
Happy holidays.
Joan
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Happy holidays to you too, and thank you for the encouraging review.
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Thank you and you're welcome, egomega.
Joan
P S Just to let you know I just published a book titled, "The Interloper and other stories in prose and poetry. If you want to take a look there is a link to it on Amazon.com at the end of my profile page.
Comment from harmony13
The author's words made me smile. The poem is interesting, descriptive,
and creative. The last stanza says so much. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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The author's words made me smile. The poem is interesting, descriptive,
and creative. The last stanza says so much. The poem flows and
connects well. The artwork is awesome and compliments this poem.
Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from RodG
I really enjoyed this narrative poem about a father who would not be denied. His message in the last stanza should be heeded by all of us. I can easily relate to the Father who took a chance and was rewarded. Rod
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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I really enjoyed this narrative poem about a father who would not be denied. His message in the last stanza should be heeded by all of us. I can easily relate to the Father who took a chance and was rewarded. Rod
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging review.
Comment from zanya
I have to say I smiled my way through this inspiring poem- the generational tables are turned and all for a good cause - love- dialogue enhances the flow - it's superb really and wish I had 6 left!
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reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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I have to say I smiled my way through this inspiring poem- the generational tables are turned and all for a good cause - love- dialogue enhances the flow - it's superb really and wish I had 6 left!
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Comment Written 30-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 30-Nov-2024
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Thank you for your encouraging review.