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Our First Kiss

3-6-9 poem for contest

34 total reviews 
Comment from TPAC
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Weird, filled with emotions. Sole purpose is a mate: very interesting. I felt, I never had that choice. I believed, if I did, the elements prevailing my life would kill her. Just to hurt me. I'm better alone.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much for reviewing!
Comment from patcelaw
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This is a nicely written 369 poem for the contest and I wish you the very best in the contest. May you have a lovely day a very good week and may God bless you. Patricia.

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much Patricia for your review!
Comment from CM Pickard
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Very sweet contest entry, perfect selection of photo too. It doesn't pretend to do anything more than it's designed to do and crafts a fun little story while it's at it. Well done

 Comment Written 07-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much!
Comment from DonandVicki
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Katiemae, I will pray for you, I'm so sorry that you are going through all this. I loved your poem and can remember my first kiss. This line in your poem affected me the most: "When I look, I see eternity In your beauteous innocent face."

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much!)
Comment from mermaids
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There is a feeling of love and tranquility in your words. Excellent 3-6-9 form that captures good feelings and a scene of romance. "But all the planets kicked into place" is a great last line that sums up your words.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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This is absolutely charming, Katie! The visual is a delight and your series of 3-6-9 verses skilfully captures the magnitude and thrill of that first kiss. I particularly like the change of tone in the last stanza to a more colloquial and exaggerated one, adding fun to the theme. Just one edit: Our fi(r)st kiss. (Your version sounds a little less tender:))
Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much Debbie!
    Luv&stuff
Comment from Gloria ....
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This is simply a delightful and innocent expression of love at first sight.

I very much enjoy the confessional aspect and the artwork too.

Wishing you all the best with the Contest Committee. :)

Gloria

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 06-Nov-2024
    Why thanks ever so much for your lovely
    comments and stellar rating.
    Luv&stuff
    Katherine
Comment from Barry Penfold
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A lovely poem and such a cute image. Thanks for sharing. Yes, that first kiss is the one. Love your last stanza. Take care and have a most wonderful day. Keep writing.
Regards
Barry Penfold.

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much Barry!
Comment from Nicole Dover
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I think that this is a decent poem. I'd like to know what the last line means. Perhaps it is an old expression I've never heard before?

Looking forward to hearing back - Nicole

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 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    It'd sort of an.old expression
    Thanks so very much for reviewing
Comment from EeanBlack
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:YES. The one that puts your universe into place. I own that kiss. Well, I leased it for a day. Then, you know, had car trouble. Then it rained. Then she wasn't home. So, I just gave it to the girl next door. Come to find out, I had the address wrong and it was her all along. This was sappy(cool), but pretty. That's romance in a nutshell anyway. Right?

 Comment Written 06-Nov-2024


reply by the author on 07-Nov-2024
    Thanks so very much!
reply by EeanBlack on 07-Nov-2024
    Always.