Shrouded
Three-six-nine35 total reviews
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery in each verse.
-A very good opening establishes the premise.
-You capture your feelings very well in verse two.
-The concluding verse shows how important
illumination is to offset your loneliness.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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-Good artwork and nice presentation.
-The syllable count is good, along with the topic.
-Effective imagery in each verse.
-A very good opening establishes the premise.
-You capture your feelings very well in verse two.
-The concluding verse shows how important
illumination is to offset your loneliness.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much.
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You are welcome.
Comment from gansach
This is a good entry for the 3-6-9 Poem competition. Your image is a perfect illustration for your foggy descriptions. I have been in some very thick fogs and that feeling of isolation is so palpable. Your words paint an atmosphere so well. One question~should compassion less be one word in the last stanza or did you mean it to be two? Well done!
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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This is a good entry for the 3-6-9 Poem competition. Your image is a perfect illustration for your foggy descriptions. I have been in some very thick fogs and that feeling of isolation is so palpable. Your words paint an atmosphere so well. One question~should compassion less be one word in the last stanza or did you mean it to be two? Well done!
Comment Written 31-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 31-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from EeanBlack
The darkness of a lost soul searching for any light. The image reminds me of the time I spent in Alaska; yes, looking for light. I'm going to read your book, something I almost never do. You say it's short stories. I'm interested.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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The darkness of a lost soul searching for any light. The image reminds me of the time I spent in Alaska; yes, looking for light. I'm going to read your book, something I almost never do. You say it's short stories. I'm interested.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you so very much.
Comment from Janet Foor
Excellent 3/6/9 poem. Invisibility is an issue for older adults. I watched my mother be ignored as if she were in a shroud.
There's a song from a broadway play titled,
I'm Mr. Cellophane - where nobody know my name.
Good work
Blessings
Janet
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Excellent 3/6/9 poem. Invisibility is an issue for older adults. I watched my mother be ignored as if she were in a shroud.
There's a song from a broadway play titled,
I'm Mr. Cellophane - where nobody know my name.
Good work
Blessings
Janet
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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You are so kind and generous, Janet.
Comment from mermaids
Your vivid use of words brings forth feelings and emotions. "Removed from space and time" is a perfect line that captures the feeling of loneliness in the fog. Best wishes for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Your vivid use of words brings forth feelings and emotions. "Removed from space and time" is a perfect line that captures the feeling of loneliness in the fog. Best wishes for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Neonewman
This is stunning work, my friend. Lonliness removed from space-what a chilling line. You told a great story in these few words, thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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This is stunning work, my friend. Lonliness removed from space-what a chilling line. You told a great story in these few words, thank you for sharing.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you very much for the kind review.
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My pleasure.
Comment from Shanbreen
Don and Vicki, this a well-written 3-6-9 poem with a great imagery. The picture certainly inspires me to long for illumination.
The feeling of invisibility can be so telling, even if you are not alone, shrouded in a dense fog. As I read it, besides the the physical aspects of loneliness, it can also be an emotional aspect. An old song comes to mind: "Lonesome is a little boy, standing in a crowd.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Don and Vicki, this a well-written 3-6-9 poem with a great imagery. The picture certainly inspires me to long for illumination.
The feeling of invisibility can be so telling, even if you are not alone, shrouded in a dense fog. As I read it, besides the the physical aspects of loneliness, it can also be an emotional aspect. An old song comes to mind: "Lonesome is a little boy, standing in a crowd.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I am humbled by your generosity.
Comment from Brenda Strauser
The poem is well written and so descriptive. I like some of the words you used like:enveloped in white shroud. Picture is perfect for your words. Good poem for the contest.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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The poem is well written and so descriptive. I like some of the words you used like:enveloped in white shroud. Picture is perfect for your words. Good poem for the contest.
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for your kind review.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Wow! Super good job with this one! It felt stark and most definitely evoked a feeling of separation from the ebb and flow of real life! Incredible picture to complete the effect, too! I predict this will do great in the 3-6-9 contest! Good luck to you! xoxox
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Wow! Super good job with this one! It felt stark and most definitely evoked a feeling of separation from the ebb and flow of real life! Incredible picture to complete the effect, too! I predict this will do great in the 3-6-9 contest! Good luck to you! xoxox
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I loved your review of my poem, thank you Rachelle.
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My pleasure! xo
Comment from Sally Law
Dang, I wish I had a six star rating left in my purse for this beautiful poem. You've captured the essence of the grey day when sun is absent.
Typo: compassionless is one word.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Dang, I wish I had a six star rating left in my purse for this beautiful poem. You've captured the essence of the grey day when sun is absent.
Typo: compassionless is one word.
Sending you my best today as always, and my very best wishes for the upcoming contest.
Sal :))
Comment Written 30-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I accept your virtual six, thank you so much.
