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Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Well, this was a unique party. How did you end up with the jacket cop going after Jim? Much preferred the police, who Humpwhistle recognized as the strippers, hauling Jane out of the room. Hope it was a lie about the Jag.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Well, this was a unique party. How did you end up with the jacket cop going after Jim? Much preferred the police, who Humpwhistle recognized as the strippers, hauling Jane out of the room. Hope it was a lie about the Jag.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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I grew up in Augusta, Ga, the home of the Masters Golf tournament. The Augusta National is famous and their green jackets are for the winners of their prestigious tournament only. When that guy showed up in one, I had to respond.
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hey Katharine.
This is very good. I loved several sentences that you strategically put into the mix. The thing that really tickled me was seeing Fred Ridley showed up looking for a Masters jacket. That's quite funny.
Augusta National probably believes they have the right to every green jacket ever made. They probably thought this one was in jeopardy. Fred just came to save it. This is very funny. I enjoyed reading it.
Robert.
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Hey Katharine.
This is very good. I loved several sentences that you strategically put into the mix. The thing that really tickled me was seeing Fred Ridley showed up looking for a Masters jacket. That's quite funny.
Augusta National probably believes they have the right to every green jacket ever made. They probably thought this one was in jeopardy. Fred just came to save it. This is very funny. I enjoyed reading it.
Robert.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 30-Oct-2024
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Robert, I grew up in Augusta and believe me their green jacket is the creme de la creme of high honor, and a Masters green jacket was mentioned as being worn to the party so I had to comment on it. :) I'm glad you enjoyed it and thank you very much for the lovely 6!
Katharine
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You're welcome. The jacket is a great touch. I have a Masters rain jacket hanging in my closet and a Masters tee shirt. Both were purchased at Augusta. 😁
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Great. and thanks! We used to love going to the tournament.
I was talking about the Masters Jacket - actually that the winner of the tournament gets that only winners have. That's what I thought Rachelle was talking about, and since I'm from Augusta I thought it'd be fun to write what I did. It's really a like a sport coat with the Augusta National Golf Club insignia on it.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aw, Katharine, that was fabulous! I have read a few of these now, and I'm wondering, Who is Jane? She doesn't sound very nice in any of the stories. There are loads of fake police around, not only in these stories but in real life too. Lol. I really enjoyed your story at the convention; if it actually does ever happen, what fun it would be. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Aw, Katharine, that was fabulous! I have read a few of these now, and I'm wondering, Who is Jane? She doesn't sound very nice in any of the stories. There are loads of fake police around, not only in these stories but in real life too. Lol. I really enjoyed your story at the convention; if it actually does ever happen, what fun it would be. Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much, Sandra! Jane, to me, is one of the most obnoxious, maddening villains of all time. Rachelle and Gretchen really thought up a humdinger when they conjured her up. She's a bad egg all through their story.
I told Judi I hoped she didn't mind my putting her under the table. She said that was fine, she wasn't partial to having bits of food thrown at her. :) I probably would've been under the table with her.
Thanks again for reading my version and for your always kind words!
Katharine
Comment from EeanBlack
Very good writing. It is a very creative piece and I enjoyed it. I especially like the word harangue. It really fits at this site. Keep writing for the love of writing.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Very good writing. It is a very creative piece and I enjoyed it. I especially like the word harangue. It really fits at this site. Keep writing for the love of writing.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Hi, there, Eean! Thank you very much for your kind words and for the lovely 6! I just read one where the police were strippers. It was wild and wooly, though not my kind of scene.
I'll have to see what you've been up to. Thanks for reading mine.
Katharine
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Anytime miss Katharine.
Comment from judiverse
This is fantastic! Just as of you'd really been there. I wasn't expecting them to be fake policemen, but that just added to the fun. If Jane gets a new Jaguar, that's great. She won't have to bum a ride with Gretchen and Rachelle again. I loved the Southern accent, and if memory serves me right, Gretchen did use one on occasion. That sounds like me, under the table scribbling notes on what was going on and coming up with a script about it. This one of my favorite versions that I've read. judi
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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This is fantastic! Just as of you'd really been there. I wasn't expecting them to be fake policemen, but that just added to the fun. If Jane gets a new Jaguar, that's great. She won't have to bum a ride with Gretchen and Rachelle again. I loved the Southern accent, and if memory serves me right, Gretchen did use one on occasion. That sounds like me, under the table scribbling notes on what was going on and coming up with a script about it. This one of my favorite versions that I've read. judi
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Thanks, Judi!!! I hope you didn't mind being under the table, but I thought you, capitalizing of fresh fodder for a play would be perfect.
Thanks a lot for the 6-er! It is much appreciated!
Katharine
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You're welcome. This is great! I'm always looking for fresh fodder for writing, so that's the place I'd be. Also, I like to avoid being hit by particles of food. judi
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laughing. Yeah, I'm not fond of food fights myself. I'd probably be under there with you.
Comment from Jacob1395
That last line did make me laugh, I'm sure that's the sort of thing that might not seem so funny at first but in years to come it does. An excellent chapter addition, I really enjoyed reading it.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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That last line did make me laugh, I'm sure that's the sort of thing that might not seem so funny at first but in years to come it does. An excellent chapter addition, I really enjoyed reading it.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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thanks Jacob! I worked hours on that thing this morning. I've only read one other so far, and it had the police as strippers! yikes.
Thanks so much for the lovely 6! I'm glad you liked it!
Katharine
Comment from royowen
Actually Jane has appeared in every story I've read about the shenanigans going on in that there hall, (where is that hall?) that she could muck up a drunken footballers convention, I like Judi writing a play furiously under the tangle, while all this is going, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : A(nd) lays into them.
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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Actually Jane has appeared in every story I've read about the shenanigans going on in that there hall, (where is that hall?) that she could muck up a drunken footballers convention, I like Judi writing a play furiously under the tangle, while all this is going, beautifully written, blessings Roy
Typo : A(nd) lays into them.
Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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thanks, Roy. Yeah, old Jane's been a constant thorn - one of the best, most maddening villains I've read in ages.
I told Judy I hoped she didn't mind my putting her under the table, but I'm sure her play would be a hit.
Thanks for your kind words, Roy!
Katharine
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Well done Katharine
Comment from Begin Again
At least your police turned out to be fake actors...mine were strippers and what a wild party it turned into. I enjoyed reading your rendition, and it was lots of fun. We should do this more often.
Smiles, Carol
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reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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At least your police turned out to be fake actors...mine were strippers and what a wild party it turned into. I enjoyed reading your rendition, and it was lots of fun. We should do this more often.
Smiles, Carol
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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strppers! Now that's original. going to get my hair trimmed. will read this when i get back.
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Thanks! I hope you enjoy it.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I do have a southern twist not quite a drawl. I like how I sounded in this. Lol. You cracked me up with several parts in this. I loved the ending with the photographs being sent to guests. Great addition. Gretchen
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I do have a southern twist not quite a drawl. I like how I sounded in this. Lol. You cracked me up with several parts in this. I loved the ending with the photographs being sent to guests. Great addition. Gretchen
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Comment Written 29-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 29-Oct-2024
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thanks!! worked for hours on it. phew.