Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 41 "Chapter 24 Willing Hearts"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
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Comment from gansach
I haven't read your story from the beginning, but I have caught a chapter here and there as I glance through the postings. I may not understand all that's going on, but enough to be interested in the characters and plot and continue reading. I like it very much. The conversations feel very natural, the situations believable and well-written. Nicely done!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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I haven't read your story from the beginning, but I have caught a chapter here and there as I glance through the postings. I may not understand all that's going on, but enough to be interested in the characters and plot and continue reading. I like it very much. The conversations feel very natural, the situations believable and well-written. Nicely done!
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Wendy G
It seems they both really want this to work, but she will have to toughen up a bit, I think. She seems to be emotionally needy, and require constant reassurance, and his job requres him to be tough and able to separate from his emotions. They are not a geat match, but stranger things have happened, and still worked out! Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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It seems they both really want this to work, but she will have to toughen up a bit, I think. She seems to be emotionally needy, and require constant reassurance, and his job requres him to be tough and able to separate from his emotions. They are not a geat match, but stranger things have happened, and still worked out! Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 28-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
Once again, a lovely, varying chapter. From all different angles. I still can't wait to see these guys get married. I am hoping that is coming soon. Well done, keep at it!
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Once again, a lovely, varying chapter. From all different angles. I still can't wait to see these guys get married. I am hoping that is coming soon. Well done, keep at it!
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from T B Botts
Hello Barbara,
I liked the banter about the unpleasant weather and the possible need for barf bags. So much of the story involves the somewhat rocky relationship that Noah and Sami have. There seems to be a constant need for reassurance of love. If this relationship is going to work, she's going to have to grow up. Part of being a cop is the danger they face every day, and being the spouse of someone in law enforcement requires an ability to carry on life without creating extra stress in the relationship.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Hello Barbara,
I liked the banter about the unpleasant weather and the possible need for barf bags. So much of the story involves the somewhat rocky relationship that Noah and Sami have. There seems to be a constant need for reassurance of love. If this relationship is going to work, she's going to have to grow up. Part of being a cop is the danger they face every day, and being the spouse of someone in law enforcement requires an ability to carry on life without creating extra stress in the relationship.
Have a blessed evening gal.
Tom
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. You're correct. Let's see what happens.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
Sami and Noah both have willing hearts to fall in love, but is his life so different they can't really make one life together? Noah is so used to a job with danger and unexpected things happening that changing to a husband's life with a family coming along may be awfully boring.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Sami and Noah both have willing hearts to fall in love, but is his life so different they can't really make one life together? Noah is so used to a job with danger and unexpected things happening that changing to a husband's life with a family coming along may be awfully boring.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from lancellot
Writing and editing are good, as always. I know it is choice or style, but I would recommend a few things. Also, 3/4's done. It 'feels' like it is going on too long. The 'romance' fiction is very light on romance. And the romance is kind of complete. Noah loves Sami, (why? who knows. Because he's supposed to) but they both know and acknowledge it.
notes:
"What's he doing?" asked Sami.
-I think the readers understand why. So having Sami not, makes her look, well.... childish???
Not receiving as much as he wanted, he hung up. "Sami?" When she faced him, he continued, "Have dinner ready by six o'clock."
"Roger that, Boss."
-Why is Sami calling him 'Boss'?
reserve a car, and an appointment for nine o'clock in the morning with the SunDrop LLC's CEO.
- Shouldn't he say. "Try to make an appointment." Basically, he's a cop, not a dictator.
Stepping closer, he said, "You're probably right." He touched her arm. "Sami?"
- He is apologizing again without saying I'm sorry. That happens a lot. Sor of like, unforced errors, where Sami corrects him.
"Are you okay?" asked Sami barely in front of the computer.
-These three words happen a lot.
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Writing and editing are good, as always. I know it is choice or style, but I would recommend a few things. Also, 3/4's done. It 'feels' like it is going on too long. The 'romance' fiction is very light on romance. And the romance is kind of complete. Noah loves Sami, (why? who knows. Because he's supposed to) but they both know and acknowledge it.
notes:
"What's he doing?" asked Sami.
-I think the readers understand why. So having Sami not, makes her look, well.... childish???
Not receiving as much as he wanted, he hung up. "Sami?" When she faced him, he continued, "Have dinner ready by six o'clock."
"Roger that, Boss."
-Why is Sami calling him 'Boss'?
reserve a car, and an appointment for nine o'clock in the morning with the SunDrop LLC's CEO.
- Shouldn't he say. "Try to make an appointment." Basically, he's a cop, not a dictator.
Stepping closer, he said, "You're probably right." He touched her arm. "Sami?"
- He is apologizing again without saying I'm sorry. That happens a lot. Sor of like, unforced errors, where Sami corrects him.
"Are you okay?" asked Sami barely in front of the computer.
-These three words happen a lot.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 28-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from judiverse
I don't think Noah barks orders. He is the one in charge here, and he feels the responsibility. I like his chopping wood to work off his frustrations. Galvin apparently hasn't contacted the New Orleans office, and Noah is frustrated because he can't yet close the case. I wouldn't be surprised if Noah isn't promoted to replace Galvin. Maybe something new has developed in the human trafficking case. Fun bit about Jose not barfing on the trip. Also, with Bob's comment about the tape of the conversation being erased.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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I don't think Noah barks orders. He is the one in charge here, and he feels the responsibility. I like his chopping wood to work off his frustrations. Galvin apparently hasn't contacted the New Orleans office, and Noah is frustrated because he can't yet close the case. I wouldn't be surprised if Noah isn't promoted to replace Galvin. Maybe something new has developed in the human trafficking case. Fun bit about Jose not barfing on the trip. Also, with Bob's comment about the tape of the conversation being erased.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thank you for sharing this wonderful review. I am hoping things work out. We'll see.
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You're welcome. I enjoy the humorous touches you added in this. judi
Comment from Jacob1395
I really liked the banter between Sami and Noah in this piece. It really brought their character's to life in your writing, Barbara, and I thought you did an excellent job with this. Another well written chapter. I can't wait to read the next one.
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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I really liked the banter between Sami and Noah in this piece. It really brought their character's to life in your writing, Barbara, and I thought you did an excellent job with this. Another well written chapter. I can't wait to read the next one.
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
This story is really good. It kept me engaged to the end. The dialogue flows nicely and it's easy to keep track of all the players. I look forward to reading the whole novel. Great job. Keep them coming.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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This story is really good. It kept me engaged to the end. The dialogue flows nicely and it's easy to keep track of all the players. I look forward to reading the whole novel. Great job. Keep them coming.
Cecilia
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I'm glad they had that chat; it needed saying and now all is good... for now! I loved it that Jose didn't barf on Boss. (I'd never heard that word before, so I had to check it out.) Now, what the heck has happened to Galvin? I think there is something suspicious going on with him. Well done, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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I'm glad they had that chat; it needed saying and now all is good... for now! I loved it that Jose didn't barf on Boss. (I'd never heard that word before, so I had to check it out.) Now, what the heck has happened to Galvin? I think there is something suspicious going on with him. Well done, Barbara. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 27-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 27-Oct-2024
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Galvin isn't a good person. Thank you for the kind review