The Poets Menagerie
Viewing comments for Chapter 13 "Broken Toes"A collection of poems
20 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Beautifully capturing the life of a ballerina. Some nice alliteration in nthe first few lines. Great artwork for your presentation. Excellent entry for the Nonet poetry contest. Good luck.
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Beautifully capturing the life of a ballerina. Some nice alliteration in nthe first few lines. Great artwork for your presentation. Excellent entry for the Nonet poetry contest. Good luck.
Comment Written 21-Nov-2024
reply by the author on 21-Nov-2024
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Hi, Marilyn. Thanks so much for reading in offering your kind words and observations. Very important to me. I'm sure you know, feedback is very valuable. In any form that it comes in so long as it's well you know, all these people here are great as like yourself. Thank you again for this review and I hope you have a great night!
Comment from bob cullen
What a delightful form of poem. Nine lines, with a countdown of syllables from nine to one. And it flowed so smoothly. It also told a complete story. Very clever.
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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What a delightful form of poem. Nine lines, with a countdown of syllables from nine to one. And it flowed so smoothly. It also told a complete story. Very clever.
Comment Written 25-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 25-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Bob. I'm so glad you liked it. I'm glad to be back to be able to share some words with you all again and uh, it's nice to see everyone familiar names coming up like yours. Thank you for your support. And I appreciate your review and the time it takes as we are all busy.Thanks again have an amazing day!
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very nicely written nonet for the contest and I wish you the very best with the coMay you have a wonderful day and may God bless you and give you much happiness. Patricia.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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This is a very nicely written nonet for the contest and I wish you the very best with the coMay you have a wonderful day and may God bless you and give you much happiness. Patricia.
Comment Written 24-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hello, Patricia. So nice to see you here! Thank you so much for your kindness. And like before it has now, I appreciate your comments and stopping in for a read. I'm glad you liked it. I hope that you two are blessed and are having a wonderful day.Thanks again!
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Hello, Patricia. So nice to see you here! Thank you so much for your kindness. And like before it has now, I appreciate your comments and stopping in for a read. I'm glad you liked it. I hope that you two are blessed and are having a wonderful day.Thanks again!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hi Lea, your nonet shape is well done and I love your 'f' alliteration, particularly those "fluttered limbs" (depicting the flying birds from her tutu). From the exquisite grace of her performance, the reality of her pain and crushed toes brings home the cruelty of her art. Possibly, this is a metaphor for all those artists who translate their pain into artistry. Well done on this original and inspired verse, Lea. Good luck! Debbie
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hi Lea, your nonet shape is well done and I love your 'f' alliteration, particularly those "fluttered limbs" (depicting the flying birds from her tutu). From the exquisite grace of her performance, the reality of her pain and crushed toes brings home the cruelty of her art. Possibly, this is a metaphor for all those artists who translate their pain into artistry. Well done on this original and inspired verse, Lea. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hello Debbie, how are you? Nice to see your words again! As always an inspired and insightful review, thank you for that! You are inside the cover of my book. As well as Rachelle and my friend Bob. I hope that you are doing well. Is that everything in your world is peaceful? Thank you for your review and through your kind words.Have a great day!
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Dear Lee, it's lovely to see you back, as well as your unique and lovely verses. I can assure you, you've been missed. I hope everything has now settled down and you're enjoying some peace at long last. It's been such a long journey for you but I'll always remember your story getting here xx
Comment from royowen
Yes, one wonders how many ballerinas having fallen victim to what can bevone an obsession and possibly cause the death like models who have to be ridiculously thin, beautifully written nonet Lea, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Yes, one wonders how many ballerinas having fallen victim to what can bevone an obsession and possibly cause the death like models who have to be ridiculously thin, beautifully written nonet Lea, blessings Roy
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Roy!! Hi!! Nice to see you here and your words! Thank you. I'm glad you like the poem.As always wonderful to see you here.Putting out the beautiful words that you always do! Thank you so much for your review. I really appreciate it! Always kind and insightful. Thank you again. I'll be around for a bit. Have a great day.Hope you are well!
Comment from Neonewman
I hear they are put through the wringer to dance the way they do. Broken toes say it all. But it is beautiful to watch them perform. Thank you for sharing your talent, Lea.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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I hear they are put through the wringer to dance the way they do. Broken toes say it all. But it is beautiful to watch them perform. Thank you for sharing your talent, Lea.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Steve, thank you for find review. And the kind words I appreciate it so much.Glad my meaning came through! I appreciate you stopping in for A. Reason offering your thoughts.I hope your day is amazing.Thanks again!
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My pleasure, Lea.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh so very true. Many professional athletics, that included ballerinas do suffer to be great at their sport. Thank you for sharing this nonet poetry contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Oh so very true. Many professional athletics, that included ballerinas do suffer to be great at their sport. Thank you for sharing this nonet poetry contest entry with us. I enjoyed reading and want to wish you luck with the contest.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hello Barbara!!! Nice to see you here and see your magical words! Thanks so much for your review and for stopping in to have a read. And I saw your wonderful comet on the interview.Thank you for that too! I'll be around for a bit.Have yourself an amazing day!
Comment from Dolly'sPoems
You revealed the pain sometimes suffered by true artists as they give everything to their art and I enjoyed your well formed nonet, a fine presentation Lea, love Dolly x x x
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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You revealed the pain sometimes suffered by true artists as they give everything to their art and I enjoyed your well formed nonet, a fine presentation Lea, love Dolly x x x
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Dolly! Nice to see you. I've been away for a while. Thank you so much for offering your thoughts. Once again, you and others have been instrumental and showing me in general ways how to do things, although i'm still challenged with punctuation. Lol. Thank you for reading writing. I hope that you are well. Everything is great in your world. Thanks again.We will talk again soon!
Comment from Jacob1395
I think it is certainly true that the best art, including writing, comes from a deep emotional pain inside us, which can be quite painful for us, but it can be good as well to get it out of our system in some way. An excellent piece, Lea, I enjoyed reading it.
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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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I think it is certainly true that the best art, including writing, comes from a deep emotional pain inside us, which can be quite painful for us, but it can be good as well to get it out of our system in some way. An excellent piece, Lea, I enjoyed reading it.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024
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Hi, Jacob. Good to see you here again. Thank you so much for reading and writing. I appreciate it as always and for you. It's like full words.I am grateful to receive! I hope that you are well and things.In your world are good and your writing is going along tremendously. Thanks again and have the best day!
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I love nonets, and it appears you do, as well, since this one glides along just like the ballerina it is describing!
I noticed a couple little spags:
*Dancing toes PAINT (omit the 's')
*bewildered should be capitalized
I'm not sure about the meaning of "shelves of air human show." If it were "Shelves of human air show," I could liken it to an airplane, and that would make sense to me, because of the way dancers can take flight.
Cool artwork you chose.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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I love nonets, and it appears you do, as well, since this one glides along just like the ballerina it is describing!
I noticed a couple little spags:
*Dancing toes PAINT (omit the 's')
*bewildered should be capitalized
I'm not sure about the meaning of "shelves of air human show." If it were "Shelves of human air show," I could liken it to an airplane, and that would make sense to me, because of the way dancers can take flight.
Cool artwork you chose.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Something like she's so light, so frail she floats on air. Thank you as always. My friend gone ahead and I've made the changes. You know me in punctuation, i'm just a stellar star.At that l o l thank you, my friend.Hope your day is amazing!