Full Moon Madness
Full moons bring out the wild side of everyone, even seniors18 total reviews
Comment from DonandVicki
A wonderful poetic/ prose that caught my attention. This line especially: " Thank God she had on her nightgown and was covered from her shoulders to the top of her knees." My daughter worked at a nursing home and could tell tales just like this.
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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A wonderful poetic/ prose that caught my attention. This line especially: " Thank God she had on her nightgown and was covered from her shoulders to the top of her knees." My daughter worked at a nursing home and could tell tales just like this.
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Hi,
thanks for taking the time to read and review this. Part of this is taken from real life accounts and part is made up, but could just as well be reality.
Comment from SimianSavant
This definitely has a feeling of realism to it. I have heard these sort of stories about obese patients in particular. Vile.
could disable me with one one blow from his steel like fist <= you have a duplicate ONE in there. Also, write "steel-like" because the word LIKE only works as an adjective when attached to STEEL with a hyphen.
Thanks for the read, and for participating,
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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This definitely has a feeling of realism to it. I have heard these sort of stories about obese patients in particular. Vile.
could disable me with one one blow from his steel like fist <= you have a duplicate ONE in there. Also, write "steel-like" because the word LIKE only works as an adjective when attached to STEEL with a hyphen.
Thanks for the read, and for participating,
🦍
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks for catching those errors. I appreciate your great review.
Comment from Amelie Johns
Great nursing home entry! I enjoyed this read. It wasn't an easy task as I found out when I attempted it and failed lol. Very humorous, creative and entertaining. Best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Great nursing home entry! I enjoyed this read. It wasn't an easy task as I found out when I attempted it and failed lol. Very humorous, creative and entertaining. Best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks for taking the time to review this, I appreciate it.
Comment from marilyn quillen
Nice, very nice, sounds like life here on the farm every night!When I was a lot younger, my dad used today everytime 1 moved out 2 moved back in, I never truly understood his reasoning until my kids were grown and would go off to college, get married then move back in here. Now I realize my father was a genius
BUT REALLY I LOVED YOUR STORY, you have quite an imagination and know how to get it down on paper, very good job, congratulations
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Nice, very nice, sounds like life here on the farm every night!When I was a lot younger, my dad used today everytime 1 moved out 2 moved back in, I never truly understood his reasoning until my kids were grown and would go off to college, get married then move back in here. Now I realize my father was a genius
BUT REALLY I LOVED YOUR STORY, you have quite an imagination and know how to get it down on paper, very good job, congratulations
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks so much for the encouraging review. Hopefully the kids will go and stay gone soon.
Comment from Begin Again
Creepiness, for sure! I don't think I will be visiting any nursing homes during the month of October when all the loonies are lurking everywhere. Thanks for sharing your story.
smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Creepiness, for sure! I don't think I will be visiting any nursing homes during the month of October when all the loonies are lurking everywhere. Thanks for sharing your story.
smiles, Carol
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Ha, ha, ha, thanks for the humorous review. I appreciate your taking the time to read this.
Comment from Cecilia A Heiskary
Hi,
This is a very interest poem. You could turn it into a short story if you wanted to. You have a very good start. What happened to Mrs. Culpepper? Was she left outside to defend herself. Great poem. I found a couple this things that may need your attention.
none of the patients were supposed to be using the phones{,} but I-a comma.
with one hand{,} and pushing the elevator{ }button with the other-this could use a comma as well as removing the space.
Cecilia
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Hi,
This is a very interest poem. You could turn it into a short story if you wanted to. You have a very good start. What happened to Mrs. Culpepper? Was she left outside to defend herself. Great poem. I found a couple this things that may need your attention.
none of the patients were supposed to be using the phones{,} but I-a comma.
with one hand{,} and pushing the elevator{ }button with the other-this could use a comma as well as removing the space.
Cecilia
Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks for catching those errors. Of course this is just a story for a contest, but I suppose I could expand it out.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
This was such a wild ride! You've created such wonderful characters. I could picture every chaotic moment. Your humor shines through and it was so much fun to read. You've done a great job keeping the pace. This felt crazy but also somehow relatable at the same time. I loved it!
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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This was such a wild ride! You've created such wonderful characters. I could picture every chaotic moment. Your humor shines through and it was so much fun to read. You've done a great job keeping the pace. This felt crazy but also somehow relatable at the same time. I loved it!
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the encouraging review. You never know what's going to happen on a full moon, especially in a nursing facility.
Comment from royowen
An excellently written on the shenanigans that can go on in an institutional facility for the slightly and extremely bent patients, the delusional to the fancy imaginations they can bare, I've never really been in one, but perhaps I won't go in one, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy.
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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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An excellently written on the shenanigans that can go on in an institutional facility for the slightly and extremely bent patients, the delusional to the fancy imaginations they can bare, I've never really been in one, but perhaps I won't go in one, heh heh, well done, blessings Roy.
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Comment Written 23-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024
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Thanks for the excellent review. I hope I never have to visit one of my relatives in one, or even worse, be visited by my relatives while I'm in one.
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No it's not pleasant
