Marilyn found the cave
Yep! It's a cave.16 total reviews
Comment from karenina
Nice job with this sentence starts the story contest! As a see myself I was relating on all points.
I used to love hiking...and caves...
I used to not have arthritis and two slipped lumbar discs too!
(smile)
Karenina
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Nice job with this sentence starts the story contest! As a see myself I was relating on all points.
I used to love hiking...and caves...
I used to not have arthritis and two slipped lumbar discs too!
(smile)
Karenina
Comment Written 22-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I was an adventurous kid whenever I was well enough. Momma said it was as if I forgot I wasn't really well. I said when I am well, I am not sick, so, off I would go. Now it is in my head, o on paper, and on the computer taht i go places and see things. Thanks for the read. karen
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That makes perfect sense! It sounds like from a young age you never let limitations define you...
Comment from GWHARGIS
I enjoyed your story. I like how you fleshed out the main character and seemed to give her a full history by talking about how she was when she was younger. This was very interesting. Gretchen
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I enjoyed your story. I like how you fleshed out the main character and seemed to give her a full history by talking about how she was when she was younger. This was very interesting. Gretchen
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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My muse kept nagging me to write. I reviewed about half of the list. I still have about 100 to go. I owe you six. I will see you later. Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from lancellot
Well, I guess Marilyn will find treasure and adventure the safe way. In her dreams, while wrapped in a warm blanket.
A very reasonable main character. It's about time a protagonist did something normal, and what most older people would do.
Good entry.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Well, I guess Marilyn will find treasure and adventure the safe way. In her dreams, while wrapped in a warm blanket.
A very reasonable main character. It's about time a protagonist did something normal, and what most older people would do.
Good entry.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I am not pushing myself to be something I am not. No amount of plastic surgery, makeup, fancy wardrobe, or expensive herbal supplements will change your age. I have my writing and daydreams for swashbuckling with pirates.
Reality is slightly different:-) Thanks for the read. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
That Best Western makes sense. Jean Lafitte's treasure could be anywhere as he was a very busy pirate/colonial fighter. Marilyn may be a little disappointed in her, however.
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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That Best Western makes sense. Jean Lafitte's treasure could be anywhere as he was a very busy pirate/colonial fighter. Marilyn may be a little disappointed in her, however.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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The adventure of it all carried her past the reality of the situation. I do not push myself past my abilities to satisfy others anymore. I thank you for the read. I loved old Errol Flynn pirate movies. Karen
Comment from Wayne Fowler
I like it. You wrote a terrific story, hitting the realities of old age perfectly - though I would do it even if only for the adventure and I'm 73.
Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I like it. You wrote a terrific story, hitting the realities of old age perfectly - though I would do it even if only for the adventure and I'm 73.
Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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Your body likes you Mr. Mcbragbrag. I am happy for you.
I hope it always likes you. Mine gave me fits all my life. I spent every good day to the full. I have some good memories. I held on to the good with both hands. Thanks for the read. I really do think if my distant couson Jean buried treasure it would be in Galveston. Karen
Comment from CrystieCookie999
I liked reading this contest prompt entry about a cave. It sounds like Mildred and Marilyn used to have the same energy level, but Mildred is more content to stay at home or in a hotel room now. I wonder if Jean Lafitte really is a distant relative, ha ha.
Little suggestions:
She is a sweet lady, and yes. I could certainly use the money, but, he stole it to begin with.
I would suggest punctuating it like this:
She is a sweet lady, and yes, I could certainly use the money, but he stole it to begin with.
I would bet, it would be in Galveston.
I think you can take out the comma after bet.
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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I liked reading this contest prompt entry about a cave. It sounds like Mildred and Marilyn used to have the same energy level, but Mildred is more content to stay at home or in a hotel room now. I wonder if Jean Lafitte really is a distant relative, ha ha.
Little suggestions:
She is a sweet lady, and yes. I could certainly use the money, but, he stole it to begin with.
I would suggest punctuating it like this:
She is a sweet lady, and yes, I could certainly use the money, but he stole it to begin with.
I would bet, it would be in Galveston.
I think you can take out the comma after bet.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024
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I went back and edited, thank you so much for the read and the careful review. I appreciate your time. And Jean Lafitte is actually a distant relative. :-)