Two-Faced
A Flash - Talking out of the both sides of your mouth.16 total reviews
Comment from Wendy G
Being two faced is actually quite an important issue, because it is tied so much with the ability to trust another. Wasn't quite sure about the ending - is it that he wouldn't wear his present face if he had another option?
Wendy
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Being two faced is actually quite an important issue, because it is tied so much with the ability to trust another. Wasn't quite sure about the ending - is it that he wouldn't wear his present face if he had another option?
Wendy
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
lol It might be a stretch without the photo, but with it, it works perfectly. Plus, I always go for the stretch because sometimes it works out very well and if not, it was worth a shot! Nicely done.
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lol It might be a stretch without the photo, but with it, it works perfectly. Plus, I always go for the stretch because sometimes it works out very well and if not, it was worth a shot! Nicely done.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Esther Brown
Chuckling. Oh those sweet little lies that go with kisses..."Miss Contrary Mary" needs a period. Two faced seems to me like the Biblical "forked tongue" I guess. Saying one thing and meaning another. Saying she is beautiful to get kisses while hating her gossiping. I liked the ending.
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Chuckling. Oh those sweet little lies that go with kisses..."Miss Contrary Mary" needs a period. Two faced seems to me like the Biblical "forked tongue" I guess. Saying one thing and meaning another. Saying she is beautiful to get kisses while hating her gossiping. I liked the ending.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from CrystieCookie999
This flash fiction post seems to suggest that there are literal two-faced people and not-so-literal two-faced people.
I liked the way the dialogue carries the story.
Little suggestions at the beginning:
"Can't stand that girl? Always putting down other girls."
I think, if the young man is talking, he might mean to say it with this punctuation:
"Can't stand that girl! Always putting down other girls."
"Miss Contrary Mary"
I think you just need a period after Mary. Then the quotation marks would follow.
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This flash fiction post seems to suggest that there are literal two-faced people and not-so-literal two-faced people.
I liked the way the dialogue carries the story.
Little suggestions at the beginning:
"Can't stand that girl? Always putting down other girls."
I think, if the young man is talking, he might mean to say it with this punctuation:
"Can't stand that girl! Always putting down other girls."
"Miss Contrary Mary"
I think you just need a period after Mary. Then the quotation marks would follow.
Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from Barry Penfold
Yes, the message is there. Well done. A lot of people wear two faces. Such a shame when they only need one. Thanks for sharing and take care. Have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Yes, the message is there. Well done. A lot of people wear two faces. Such a shame when they only need one. Thanks for sharing and take care. Have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2024
Comment from DonandVicki
I got the message the first read through. He has two faces but only one expression? He is what he is and that makes him obvious to the casual observer. Nice short story with a lot of meaning.
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I got the message the first read through. He has two faces but only one expression? He is what he is and that makes him obvious to the casual observer. Nice short story with a lot of meaning.
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Comment Written 21-Oct-2024