Comment from Wendy G

Excellent

Well written and interesting poem. Quite a different story in a poem. Good rhyme and metre, so it flowed well. Best wishes for the contest.
Wendy

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 23-Oct-2024

Hi Wendy, this was an awesome memory. One of my few from five years old, but I will never forget the bums who used to sit by the tracks. Most of them were nice and very thankful for anything you'd give them, but then we got caught trying to bring them a kettle of veggies to boil. However, our parents were right because some were molesting young girls, robbing and killing people.
I once had one grab for me, so that took care of me going back.

Thanks for the kind words, my dear friend. Love, Debi

Comment from Brenda Strauser

Excellent

This is so sad. Why didn't people try to help them? You explained the bums well. I hate to call them that. The poem is well written. Qere they like gypsies?

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Lotsa love, Debi

reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

But one thing I meant to explain to you, Brenda. These were not like innocent homeless people as some were truly dangerous. They were offered jobs on the railroad and the bums refused to work. They just wanted handouts. One of my neighbor friends was murdered a few years later by one. There were good and bad but they were also lazy.

Comment from Sally Law

Exceptional

This is a great contest entry and my vote for sure, mystery poetess. The photo is authentic and shows the loving heart of a five-year-old. Precious offering in rhyming verse. Sending you my best today as always and best wishes for the vote.
Sally Law :))

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 22-Oct-2024

Thank you so much for the wonderful review, awesome comments and the lovely six stars for this one, Sally.
You have no idea how much it means to me. Thank you with all my heart for the six stars too, my awesome friend.
Thanks again.
Love, Debi

Comment from June Sargent

Excellent

There is a lot to be said for compassion. Especially at such a young age! It could have been dangerous for you and your siblings to feed the bums. But, your heart was in the right place. Great story in a poem!

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi June, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from ESOSTINE

Excellent

Thanks for sharing your story when you were just five years old. I am glad you escaped the punishment as you were a minor at that age. I love the flow and the excellent rhymes. Well done, dear. Good luck in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Me again Esostine, I am bound and determined to catch up tonight. So, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from dragonpoet

Excellent

Hi Debi
This is a flowing and well rhymed autobiographical poem that shows you had a generous spirit even at the young age of five.
Keep writing and stay healthy.
Have a wonderful day.
Joan
Joan

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi Joan, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

reply by dragonpoet on 24-Oct-2024

You are most kindly welcome, Debi. It is great when contests and ideas meld.
Joan

Comment from Pam Lonsdale

Excellent

I like the way you've used the prompt, One Day at Five, as both a possible dinnertime and your age. We were taught from an early age to fear these people (we had "hobos"on our tracks), yet I wonder how different life would have been if we had cared for them?

A good entry for this contest, and I wish you luck.

xo
Pam

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi Pam, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear sis.
Love, Debi

Comment from Sanku

Excellent

This is a very poignant memory of a five year old -Looking back from an adult's perspective- The homeless begging for crummbs and children in theor innocence helping them much to the exaspperation of the adults---all the best for the contest..

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi Santha, I kinda got behind but I am getting caught up. I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from Pearl Edwards

Excellent

This sounds like a day that was well remembered, it must have stood out for little 5 years old you. Being tattled on by nosey neighbours for feeding the 'bums', sounds like an adventure. Good luck in the contest.
cheers

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi Valda, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi

Comment from LJbutterfly

Excellent

I remember when homeless people were called bums and beggars. I enjoyed the skillful way you told the story of a day when you were five. The first line of your poem and the last line remind us of your age. Your carefully chosen words are rhythmic and rhyme well. I wish you the best in the contest.

 Comment Written 20-Oct-2024

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reply by the author on 24-Oct-2024

Hi Lorraine, I kinda got behind but I am back to say thank you so very much for the sweetest and kindest words for this one. I knew as soon as the woman who made this contest asked me to join it, what I was going to write about. This day was in the back of mind for a long time and I just remembered it that day. So thank you so very much for your kind words, my dear friend.
Love, Debi