An Anguished Array of Acrostics
Viewing comments for Chapter 2 "Nothing of the Old You Remains"Acrostics that spell out their own poem!
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Comment from Y. M. Roger
An intriguing acrostic with the air of a master talking to a student about breaking free from the past... Good presentation here. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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An intriguing acrostic with the air of a master talking to a student about breaking free from the past... Good presentation here. Thanx for sharing and best of luck in the contest!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind review!
Comment from snow lucidity
i thought the poem was quite choppy and did not flow very well. it jumped around from idea to idea without explaining a thought before moving to another. my friend and i read it 3 times and still felt it barely made sense. some things were worded beautifully but i would work on finishing one message before jumping to another. i really enjoyed the lines in the "YOU" section. they were worded beautifully and provoked deep thinking. keep up the good work!
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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i thought the poem was quite choppy and did not flow very well. it jumped around from idea to idea without explaining a thought before moving to another. my friend and i read it 3 times and still felt it barely made sense. some things were worded beautifully but i would work on finishing one message before jumping to another. i really enjoyed the lines in the "YOU" section. they were worded beautifully and provoked deep thinking. keep up the good work!
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Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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It's really cool to see what parts of a poem some people like compared to others!! It's hilarious because the part you like is actually my least favorite haha - just goes to show we all like different styles! :) I definitely had trouble with keeping the flow somewhat cohesive - it's always a little bit tricky with acrostics for me! I'm really glad you gave me an honest review though, because now I know what I can do better for next time! Hope you have an amazing week!
(p.s. just wanted to clear up the meaning as a whole I was trying to get across - Pretty much: an old man wanted to write a biography of his life, but started to wonder if he had the 'authority' to, because he couldn't remember the kid/young adult he used to be. He was basically trying to write down snippets of memories, but still couldn't remember so he just decided to embellish/make stuff up!)
Comment from Gayla putnam
This is a powerful poem. I instantly got caught up in the mood. The drawing is also great. It conveys so much emotion and depth. Just a few stanzas interrupt the flow. The ones that seem abrupt are D and U. A different word or two would facilitate the emotion you are trying to achieve. All in all, this is a fantastic poem, and I am in awe of the piece.
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is a powerful poem. I instantly got caught up in the mood. The drawing is also great. It conveys so much emotion and depth. Just a few stanzas interrupt the flow. The ones that seem abrupt are D and U. A different word or two would facilitate the emotion you are trying to achieve. All in all, this is a fantastic poem, and I am in awe of the piece.
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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I very much felt the same way about those lines! I wanted to edit them a bit, but couldn't figure out how to do it while keeping the acrostic and meaning both intact haha. I'm so glad you enjoyed reading! Hope you have an amazing week :)
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
This is a rather in depth view of the subject of your acrostic poem. The descriptors goe into some rather in depth evaluation of the subject. This one is quite heavy duty. It is well constructed and detailed. Well done and good luck.
Robert
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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This is a rather in depth view of the subject of your acrostic poem. The descriptors goe into some rather in depth evaluation of the subject. This one is quite heavy duty. It is well constructed and detailed. Well done and good luck.
Robert
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you so much for the kind review! Have an awesome week :)
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You're very welcome.
Comment from talented150
This truly a work of art! I couldn't get enough of your thoughts, and was a little bit sad when the last verse came into view. You have so much talent, I just want to read more of your writings. The subject matter hits me because I am old, too, and some of the things I used to do like dancing and creatively styling hair are gone because of health reasons. But I like how you said, "Forge a new-old story" because you can do it without my permission. You are gifted!
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This truly a work of art! I couldn't get enough of your thoughts, and was a little bit sad when the last verse came into view. You have so much talent, I just want to read more of your writings. The subject matter hits me because I am old, too, and some of the things I used to do like dancing and creatively styling hair are gone because of health reasons. But I like how you said, "Forge a new-old story" because you can do it without my permission. You are gifted!
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
i loved your philosophical poem full of wisdom and purpose, you have here a genius acrostic poetry full of soul and inspiration: congratulations and i hope you win a contest with it,
Warm wishes,
Sarah
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i loved your philosophical poem full of wisdom and purpose, you have here a genius acrostic poetry full of soul and inspiration: congratulations and i hope you win a contest with it,
Warm wishes,
Sarah
Comment Written 06-Oct-2024
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
What a beautifully written poem! Your thoughts on memory and the passage of time is so interesting. The word choices of "growing wrinkles" and "gleams of youth" beautifully captures the passage of time and the wisdom that comes with it. Well done!
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reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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What a beautifully written poem! Your thoughts on memory and the passage of time is so interesting. The word choices of "growing wrinkles" and "gleams of youth" beautifully captures the passage of time and the wisdom that comes with it. Well done!
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Comment Written 04-Oct-2024
reply by the author on 07-Oct-2024
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Thank you for the review!! So glad you enjoyed, and I hope you have an amazing week!