An Anguished Array of Acrostics
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Comment from Robert Zimmerman
I can sense the emotion in your poem. You linked the emotion of the loss of the tree to questions about your emotions and reality. Well written for content and style. good luck in the contest.
Robert
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I can sense the emotion in your poem. You linked the emotion of the loss of the tree to questions about your emotions and reality. Well written for content and style. good luck in the contest.
Robert
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from tempeste
Ciao mystery poet, you now have 4 votes.
When I was in my early 20s my parents sold our villa and we moved closed by.
We left three majestic beech trees and two very tall pine trees. We loved them.
Passing by a year later( I avoid to go by up to then) to my shock the new owners had cut down the three beech trees and had chopped off 1/3 of the pine trees.
I cried my heart out and literally grieved for months , it still upsets me 30 years later thinking of their unjust demise.
Your oak tree was at least rotten , my beautiful beech trees were healthy and magnificent.
You needed two people to embrace the trunks. True giants.
Those "criminals " were without doubt fined because it is against the law to cut such trees down.
I was always convinced my beech trees would be safe so you can imagine the trauma I suffered.
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Ciao mystery poet, you now have 4 votes.
When I was in my early 20s my parents sold our villa and we moved closed by.
We left three majestic beech trees and two very tall pine trees. We loved them.
Passing by a year later( I avoid to go by up to then) to my shock the new owners had cut down the three beech trees and had chopped off 1/3 of the pine trees.
I cried my heart out and literally grieved for months , it still upsets me 30 years later thinking of their unjust demise.
Your oak tree was at least rotten , my beautiful beech trees were healthy and magnificent.
You needed two people to embrace the trunks. True giants.
Those "criminals " were without doubt fined because it is against the law to cut such trees down.
I was always convinced my beech trees would be safe so you can imagine the trauma I suffered.
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from royowen
Oh yes, it seems like it's a desecration of nature if we chop down a treen. It reminds of the song, "There's nothing as beautiful as a tree" even in the bible it gets a brilliant rap, this is a heartfelt acrostic for a fine piece of writing, well done, blessings Roy
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Oh yes, it seems like it's a desecration of nature if we chop down a treen. It reminds of the song, "There's nothing as beautiful as a tree" even in the bible it gets a brilliant rap, this is a heartfelt acrostic for a fine piece of writing, well done, blessings Roy
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from Sarah Probe S.
great poem about dying nature, evoking autumn landscapes and grief, very monotonous and emotional at the same time,
Many thanks,
God bless you,
Sarah
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great poem about dying nature, evoking autumn landscapes and grief, very monotonous and emotional at the same time,
Many thanks,
God bless you,
Sarah
Comment Written 02-Oct-2024
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
AI doesn't like my original review. So we'll try again. Well done on the challenge of this prompt and your particular theme which powerfully portrays grief in all its elements, leaving its toxic residue deeply embedded. Good luck! Debbie
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AI doesn't like my original review. So we'll try again. Well done on the challenge of this prompt and your particular theme which powerfully portrays grief in all its elements, leaving its toxic residue deeply embedded. Good luck! Debbie
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from Y. M. Roger
Oh, what true words run through your well-crafted acrostic here -- like your mixture of rhyme schemes throughout... thanx for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest!! ;)
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Oh, what true words run through your well-crafted acrostic here -- like your mixture of rhyme schemes throughout... thanx for sharing and best of luck to you in the contest!! ;)
Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from kiwisteveh
Your piece is a little deeper than the other acrostic poems I have reviewed tonight as you establish your connection to the decayed oak and wax philosophical about the links between you.
You have managed the Acrostic construction well and also the thread of rhyme, although loose in places. No detectable meter, but as always it is better to forgo that than to torture word choice and syntax into a strict framework.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Your piece is a little deeper than the other acrostic poems I have reviewed tonight as you establish your connection to the decayed oak and wax philosophical about the links between you.
You have managed the Acrostic construction well and also the thread of rhyme, although loose in places. No detectable meter, but as always it is better to forgo that than to torture word choice and syntax into a strict framework.
Good luck in the contest.
Steve
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2024
Comment from Ang Tang
This poem captures the pain of loss and the emotional conflict that comes with letting go. The metaphor of the rotting tree effectively symbolizes something cherished, perhaps a relationship or a cherished memory, that decays over time. The speaker's decision to cut it down, though necessary, brings deep regret and sadness. The imagery of crashing hopes and childhood memories gives a strong sense of nostalgia and longing for what could have been. The poem's tone is heavy with sorrow, especially as the speaker wrestles with feelings of guilt, wishing they could have fallen with the tree to remain connected to it. The final lines suggest a deep emotional wound that has festered, too ingrained to be removed. The poem is deeply introspective, with strong use of metaphor and symbolism, though it could benefit from a bit more clarity in its narrative arc.
**Rating: 4.5 stars**. The emotion and depth are striking, but some parts feel slightly ambiguous.
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This poem captures the pain of loss and the emotional conflict that comes with letting go. The metaphor of the rotting tree effectively symbolizes something cherished, perhaps a relationship or a cherished memory, that decays over time. The speaker's decision to cut it down, though necessary, brings deep regret and sadness. The imagery of crashing hopes and childhood memories gives a strong sense of nostalgia and longing for what could have been. The poem's tone is heavy with sorrow, especially as the speaker wrestles with feelings of guilt, wishing they could have fallen with the tree to remain connected to it. The final lines suggest a deep emotional wound that has festered, too ingrained to be removed. The poem is deeply introspective, with strong use of metaphor and symbolism, though it could benefit from a bit more clarity in its narrative arc.
**Rating: 4.5 stars**. The emotion and depth are striking, but some parts feel slightly ambiguous.
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Comment Written 01-Oct-2024