Anatomy of a Marriage
Viewing comments for Chapter 4 "Anatomy of a Marriage, Part 4"A story of a couple whose marriage is in trouble.
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Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
a very credible piece of dialogue here, Beth, and I could feel myself as Marsha in the office. Also the relief that maybe there's another reason for his conduct, no matter that this could be arguably more complex and entrenched to deal with than an affair. Well done, Beth. Debbie
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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a very credible piece of dialogue here, Beth, and I could feel myself as Marsha in the office. Also the relief that maybe there's another reason for his conduct, no matter that this could be arguably more complex and entrenched to deal with than an affair. Well done, Beth. Debbie
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 14-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Debbie. I enjoyed reading your comments and I appreciate you saying it was well done.
Beth
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Thank you, Debbie. I enjoyed reading your comments and I appreciate you saying it was well done.
Beth
Comment from Pam Lonsdale
This sounds like a gift - someone coming to you with an answer to your biggest problem. And willing to do the "heavy lifting", as well.
I don't see this being an easy situation though. Trenton will fight it, I'm sure. As any alcoholic would.
A good chapter, Beth.
xo
Pam
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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This sounds like a gift - someone coming to you with an answer to your biggest problem. And willing to do the "heavy lifting", as well.
I don't see this being an easy situation though. Trenton will fight it, I'm sure. As any alcoholic would.
A good chapter, Beth.
xo
Pam
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Pam. I hope I can do this story justice. I wish my friend who is Marsha in the story was still living to fill me in on some more details. I appreciate the review.
Beth
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
This story gets better as it goes along. I am glad that it sounds like Marsha will stick by her husband's side and help him with his addiction. Alcoholism ruins so many lives but with work it can be controlled. Thanks for sharing another great chapter.
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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This story gets better as it goes along. I am glad that it sounds like Marsha will stick by her husband's side and help him with his addiction. Alcoholism ruins so many lives but with work it can be controlled. Thanks for sharing another great chapter.
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 30-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I'm glad you are liking this story.
Beth
Comment from Wendy G
He is fortunate to have a company which is willing to go to those lengths for him. Perhaps there is a chance for him after all, if he is willing to accept his need of help. That's the first step. Then we'll see if he values his marriage enough to stop lying and remain faithful.
Well written.
Wendy
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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He is fortunate to have a company which is willing to go to those lengths for him. Perhaps there is a chance for him after all, if he is willing to accept his need of help. That's the first step. Then we'll see if he values his marriage enough to stop lying and remain faithful.
Well written.
Wendy
Comment Written 30-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Wendy. These large firms are good about helping employees they consider valuable and don't want to lose.
Befh
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Sounds like the Company is first rate and definitely going the extra mile.
Well written. One point I most like is that you offer no clue whether the intervention will work, and that's the direction of the work, or not.
Best wishes.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Sounds like the Company is first rate and definitely going the extra mile.
Well written. One point I most like is that you offer no clue whether the intervention will work, and that's the direction of the work, or not.
Best wishes.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Wayne. I'm pleased that you are reading this and giving me helpful comments.
Beth
Comment from royowen
What a blessings a faithful woman is, they are an incredible gift, because if they choose to divorce early when there is a chance of preventative intervention, that is a marvellous gift, how many marriages have been saved by a forgiving, loving gracious woman like Marsha, beautifully Written Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : Either(s) he's going out...
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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What a blessings a faithful woman is, they are an incredible gift, because if they choose to divorce early when there is a chance of preventative intervention, that is a marvellous gift, how many marriages have been saved by a forgiving, loving gracious woman like Marsha, beautifully Written Beth, blessings Roy
Typo : Either(s) he's going out...
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Roy. I always appreciate you encouraging reviews.
Beth
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Most welcome
Comment from Rachelle Allen
Oh, wow. This is getting really good. I'm in for the full ride now. Can't wait to see where this is going. It's intense, but it's well done. Good, believable dialogue, well-framed plot, good pacing. You've nailed it on every level, Beth.
In this sentence, I think you left out "not" after "did," right?
It felt awkward telling the receptionist she was there to see Bill. He did keep her waiting long.
And, finally, two spags in this paragraph:
Eithers he is going out to drink, or he is spending all of his time with that woman, whoever she is?
Delete the 's' on the end of the first word, and use a period rather than a question mark at the end of the sentence.
Fine chapter, Beth! I am officially immersed!
xoxox
Also, there's a missing quotation mark at the end of this paragraph:
He told me it is a policy that partners go out after work to a local bar to go over to cases with the clients and discuss strategy for dealing with them.
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Oh, wow. This is getting really good. I'm in for the full ride now. Can't wait to see where this is going. It's intense, but it's well done. Good, believable dialogue, well-framed plot, good pacing. You've nailed it on every level, Beth.
In this sentence, I think you left out "not" after "did," right?
It felt awkward telling the receptionist she was there to see Bill. He did keep her waiting long.
And, finally, two spags in this paragraph:
Eithers he is going out to drink, or he is spending all of his time with that woman, whoever she is?
Delete the 's' on the end of the first word, and use a period rather than a question mark at the end of the sentence.
Fine chapter, Beth! I am officially immersed!
xoxox
Also, there's a missing quotation mark at the end of this paragraph:
He told me it is a policy that partners go out after work to a local bar to go over to cases with the clients and discuss strategy for dealing with them.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Rachelle, I enjoyed reading your comments and I really appreciate you taking the time to help me get rid of some spags.
Beth
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Anytime! xo
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written story and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It's a sad thing when people can't be faithful to their marriages and the story is very evident of that kind of thing happening. May you have a blessed week and may God bless your writing. Patricia.
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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This is a very well written story and I enjoyed very much listening to it. It's a sad thing when people can't be faithful to their marriages and the story is very evident of that kind of thing happening. May you have a blessed week and may God bless your writing. Patricia.
Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Patricia, I appreciate you listening to my story. You aren't letting being in the hospital keep you from reviewing.
Beth
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Thank you, Patricia, I appreciate you listening to my story. You aren't letting being in the hospital keep you from reviewing.
Beth
Comment from jim vecchio
Marsha certainly takes it on the chin. My wife would have told me to smarten up, don't even come home with alcohol on your breath. I guess Trenton's demons are a lot stronger. Your story is unfolding very well, By the way, you spelled "Trenton" two different ways in your review at the top of the story.
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reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Marsha certainly takes it on the chin. My wife would have told me to smarten up, don't even come home with alcohol on your breath. I guess Trenton's demons are a lot stronger. Your story is unfolding very well, By the way, you spelled "Trenton" two different ways in your review at the top of the story.
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Oct-2024
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Thank you, Jim. I glad you are still reading my post. I don't thing all wives were brave enough to challenge their husbands. My friend who I based this story on would do anything to avoid a confrontation.
Beth
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I wanted to keep my wife and she demanded honesty, so I never broke her trust.
Comment from Begin Again
Alcohol can play a vicious part in destroying someone's life. I saw it happen to my brother. You have written this very well and the reader can see how you are coming to this decision.
Smiles, Carol
We've have talked
For brief moment,
local bar to go over to cases
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reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Alcohol can play a vicious part in destroying someone's life. I saw it happen to my brother. You have written this very well and the reader can see how you are coming to this decision.
Smiles, Carol
We've have talked
For brief moment,
local bar to go over to cases
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Comment Written 29-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 29-Sep-2024
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Thank you, Carol. I'm glad I never had to deal with men who drank. At least not in my immediate family. I did at work and Mom had four brothers who were alcoholics.
Beth
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My brother lost his family and his house...and amost his job...but he was good at faking things... It was really sad.
Smiles, Carol