Voices
When you can't determine what's real and what's not25 total reviews
Comment from Ric Myworld
Now this is one of those stories that I'm glad to know is fiction. But that doesn't do anything to take away from the impact it made on this reader. Glad to see you have joined the "Little Workshop of Horrors." Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Now this is one of those stories that I'm glad to know is fiction. But that doesn't do anything to take away from the impact it made on this reader. Glad to see you have joined the "Little Workshop of Horrors." Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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I'm not sure that I can keep up with their line of horror stories but I did give it a shot. I'm not too much into the gore stuff though I had fun with writing a few scary ones.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
So you've gone to the dark side. Just kidding. It is a good story. There are people who claim to hear voices that cause them to kill. At least, this one is taking the voices messages out on himself. It is better than killing someone who isn't hearing the voices. You made it very dramatic.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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So you've gone to the dark side. Just kidding. It is a good story. There are people who claim to hear voices that cause them to kill. At least, this one is taking the voices messages out on himself. It is better than killing someone who isn't hearing the voices. You made it very dramatic.
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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This one was on the dark side. Scared my self even! It was creepier than I intended but that happens when I start writing and it gets a mind of its own.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Harry Craft
The wind howled through the broken windowpane like the old gray wolf that Grandpa shot last year. Wow! What an imaginative line. I really liked this line Carol. A great story that brings back some old memories. Keep up the great work!
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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The wind howled through the broken windowpane like the old gray wolf that Grandpa shot last year. Wow! What an imaginative line. I really liked this line Carol. A great story that brings back some old memories. Keep up the great work!
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Oh I hope you can put those memories away, Harry. I know my first husband had some bad bad times when he returned from Vietnam. I couldn't walk into the room without turning a light on... or chop chop!
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Karen Cherry Threadgill
How utterly gruesome. This is miraculous. I am glad you are here to pick up the slack. I am getting more folksy in my writing and you are getting bloodier. The balance of life. This is just amazing in it's intensity. Love you sweetie. Karen
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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How utterly gruesome. This is miraculous. I am glad you are here to pick up the slack. I am getting more folksy in my writing and you are getting bloodier. The balance of life. This is just amazing in it's intensity. Love you sweetie. Karen
Comment Written 27-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thanks for all the encouragement! I shiver each time I dabble my toes in with the sharks...those who actually know what they are doing when they write horror stories. I give it my best with a twist and hope someone enjoys it. You put a great big smile on my face. Awesome!
Smiles and hugs, Carol
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You are my queen honey bunch. Are their things you can't write about? Ever done a western or a historical busoms heaving romance? :-)
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Not much! Little shorts but nothing substantial...
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I have really tried, and except for Juanita the naked lady, I couldn't do squat for westerns.
Karen
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I don't even think I could do naked ladies. LOL
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Well, Juanita just marched through town in a hot fit because no one would sell a dress or fabric to her because she was not their kind. So, she figured all the wives in town would want her clothed now. Well, as soon as they picked up their husbands jaws off the floor. Karen
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It sounds as if schizophrenia was alive and well in the life of Jackson. He seems to have lost Rachel, maybe to a drunk driver; maybe only in his imagination. Still, he will die for her.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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It sounds as if schizophrenia was alive and well in the life of Jackson. He seems to have lost Rachel, maybe to a drunk driver; maybe only in his imagination. Still, he will die for her.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Creepy, huh? Almost scared myself when I was writing...Got up and locked the doors. LOL Thanks so much for reading and the kind comments.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from LJbutterfly
Wow! This was engaging and chilling. The thought processes of the narrator are realistic. I've talked to veterans who heard voices taunting them or instructing them, rendering them unable to distinguish between their imaginations or reality. You've captured the character of this tormented narrator to his sad ending. Well done.
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Wow! This was engaging and chilling. The thought processes of the narrator are realistic. I've talked to veterans who heard voices taunting them or instructing them, rendering them unable to distinguish between their imaginations or reality. You've captured the character of this tormented narrator to his sad ending. Well done.
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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It's a scary thought isn't it? It's bad enough if someone would get dementia and not remember their past, but to have voices telling you who or what you are would be terrifying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
Hello Carol.
As I read this one, I said to myself, "This is quite a surprise." I'm well aware that good writers can write in many forms and genres. This one just caught me by surprise. The self-dialogue was very good and directed the story. There are some mysteries in the words. It was an entertaining and suspenseful read, and it's done well.
Robert
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Hello Carol.
As I read this one, I said to myself, "This is quite a surprise." I'm well aware that good writers can write in many forms and genres. This one just caught me by surprise. The self-dialogue was very good and directed the story. There are some mysteries in the words. It was an entertaining and suspenseful read, and it's done well.
Robert
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much for the review and your comments, Robert. I wasn't sure if I could pull this one off, but it seems to reach the reader and that's all I can ask. It's not my usual genre but lately I've been asked to try... I did...and probably scared myself...LOL
Smiles, Carol
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you're welcome, Carol. We were in Huricane Helena. Still no power, internet, and just got cell service back tonight
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Oh wow, how do you do it, Carol? This is mesmerising in its intensity and other worldliness. As ever, within your well-crafted narrative is a little gem that pierces the imagination and that's the story of the grandpa and the wolf. It stays with the reader almost as a grounding (despite its poignancy) amid the chaos of the protagonist's instability. And the last sentence is superb! Well done, Carol! Debbie
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Oh wow, how do you do it, Carol? This is mesmerising in its intensity and other worldliness. As ever, within your well-crafted narrative is a little gem that pierces the imagination and that's the story of the grandpa and the wolf. It stays with the reader almost as a grounding (despite its poignancy) amid the chaos of the protagonist's instability. And the last sentence is superb! Well done, Carol! Debbie
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Thanks so much...I had no idea where my brain was going when I first started writing this one...At first I thought I was really killing Rachelle, but then nope... she was already dea and he was killing himself. Crazy, huh?
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Mrs. KT
Holy Toledo, Carol!
Definitely "Little Workshop of Horrors!"
I don't do well with composing works in this genre, but yours is frightening wonderful!
Well-paced and filled with tension.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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Holy Toledo, Carol!
Definitely "Little Workshop of Horrors!"
I don't do well with composing works in this genre, but yours is frightening wonderful!
Well-paced and filled with tension.
Thank you for sharing!
fondly,
diane
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 27-Sep-2024
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I think someone slipped an evil muse into my brain because this has never been my genre. But here I am writing scary stuff... Had to check the locks on the door. LOL Thanks for the review, Diane.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Wendy G
Well done. Worthy of a six, (but sorry, none left) with the excellent writing and build up of tension throughout, until the dramatic climax, and revelation.
Wendy
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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Well done. Worthy of a six, (but sorry, none left) with the excellent writing and build up of tension throughout, until the dramatic climax, and revelation.
Wendy
Comment Written 26-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 26-Sep-2024
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I'll take the virtual six with a smile and a big thank you. I get so nervous when I try this new stuff... climbing out of the box so to speak. thanks so much, Wendy.
Smiles, Carol