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Two very real women in not so real situation.

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Comment from Samantha Wymer
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I want to say congratulations to all the others on getting a recognition ribbon for this amazing story. I love how how great minds think alike. Keep up the amazing work. I truly enjoy reading this. I hope the Mercedes is okay driving through Amish country lol.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Hahaha. It would definitely get some looks!! Thanks for the nice feedback. xoxo
reply by Samantha Wymer on 22-Sep-2024
    You're welcome
Comment from Y. M. Roger
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Ummm.... can anyone say 'What fresh hell is this'? Yep... I'm thinking you are more patient than I think I would have been ... team or not, banjo music is definitely called for here... Aaack!! Gonna have to catch up at some point, I'm sure, but right now I need a break.... lol! Well-written (if that's a thing in this situation) and I sure hope you eventually jettison this one... Have a great week ahead, Red! :) Yvette

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Hahaha. Thanks, Miss Southern Charmer! It's a story you'll love, and it's co-written with a member on here whose style you would also love. Gretchen (GW) Hargis. If you're not familiar with her work, definitely give her a read. Entertaining and oh-so readable and fun. xoxox
Comment from patcelaw
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You got me laughing with this one with your adventure and Jane riding chat again. I can kind of see why you would like to ditch her at the mall or something, but I also find it very hilarious that you say that she may show up at the convention where you're going with a shotgun And take you out. The story has been delightful and I have enjoyed every minute of it. Patricia.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    This means the world to me. Thank you for this fantastic review!! xoxoxo
Comment from Jacob1395
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This was really fun to read. I could feel Gretchen's excitement in her dialogue and it made me laugh when she did want to get rid of their travelling companion, you're doing a brilliant job of showing the characters personalities through their dialogue. I really enjoyed reading it.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    You write the best reviews, Jacob. Thank you for the encouragement very much! xoxo
Comment from Robert Zimmerman
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Hello Rachelle. I have returned to FS after a three-year hiatus. I was happy to see your writing on the front page. It appears I have dropped into the middle of a book, and I always enjoyed your use of language and nuance in your writing. I chuckled through this read. That was quite an interesting conversation. The last phrase in the last sentence made me laugh out loud. It's good to read your writing again.

Robert

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    What a wonderful review this is to receive!! Thank you, Robert, and welcome home! It's great to have you back. xoxox
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 22-Sep-2024
    You are welcome! I've only posted one poem so far.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    I'll check it out and Fan you again! Thanks for letting me know. xoxo
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 22-Sep-2024
    Thank you, Rachelle. You were, and are, one of my favs here.

    Z
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Oh, you sweet-talkin' reviewer, you!!! xxoxo
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 22-Sep-2024
    I'm grinning ear to ear.
reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Well, let's put a candle in you and put you out on the front porch!!!
reply by Robert Zimmerman on 23-Sep-2024
    Just not a roman candle! HAHAHA
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
    hahaha
Comment from T B Botts
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Hello Rachelle,
Oh my word. Somehow I would have to figure out a way to get rid of this lady. Maybe contact a policeman and tell him she threatened to blow up the store or lock her in the bathroom or trip her and hope she broke a leg or something. She's obviously one of those people you can't afford to be nice to, she take it as gospel that you like her, and you'll be stuck with her forever. The really scary part is, if you let her return with you after the convention, she might never leave you alone. She might invite herself to your home for a few weeks at a time or find out about a vacation you're taking and decide to join you. She will take over your life if you don't become something she absolutely despises. Good luck gal. You've crafted an absolute monster.
Have a blessed day.
Tom

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Jane Babies is ALLLL Gretchen's fault. All I did was think it was a hilarious concept and help flesh her out. Thank you for the fun, in-depth, OH-SO accurate assessment of this new traveling companion. xoxox
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
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Rachelle, I love this chapter. I feel bad for Gretchen, Rebekah, and you. Jane is so annoying. I've known people like that. They are energy vampires.

The dialog is funny. I'm happy for Rebekah. She is very lucky to have you and Gretchen.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    I love that term: energy vampires. Definitely these kinds of people can suck the life out of a person! Hopefully, they can ditch her soon. I appreciate this lovely review. xoxo
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I laughed out loud as I read. I can't imagine a person as horrible as Baby Jane, but I'm sure they exist and not just in this story. Thank you for sharing. I am enjoying this read.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Ohhhh, do they ever!! And once you encounter one, you are cured for life! Thanks for the terrific review. I always love your feedback. xoxox
Comment from BethShelby
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This is a hilarious story. Jame sounds like a nightmare who actually believes she is delightful. I found it amusing you want to introduce her to Lancelot. I've read a few of poems or stories. A person like Jane could spoil what might be pleasant. I'm surprised Gretchen isn't car sick even if she is getting to drive.

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    Hahaha. I know the rest of us are pretty nauseous! And, yes, these people like Jane who think they are SOO talented and cannot for the life of themselves "read the room" enough to realize they are the only ones who think they're great! I appreciate this understanding review. xoxo
Comment from GWHARGIS
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The way you drew out her words was spectacular. I think the beginnings of each poem were hysterical. I knew that as graphic as they started, they were only going to get worse. I loved the detail of Rebekah rocking as she said the Lord's prayer. That added to the uncomfortableness of the situation. You nailed the little nuances of her character. Jane is going to be a real thorn in our side. Lol. Perfect intro to her (unique) character. Gretchen

 Comment Written 22-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 22-Sep-2024
    So grating, isn't it? And I like your text, where you drew them out, too. As for Rebekah rocking and saying the Lord's Prayer, that was your idea!! It fit in perfectly with the whole tableau and made it even more hilarious. Have you read some of the reviews about Jane's syntax? She's grating on us ALL!! er, I mean, on us ALLLLLLLLLL!! Thanks for the great review. xoxox