Spirited Justice
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Comment from Wendy G
Well, that's something good happening for Donatelli = a possible romance to think about. Garth and the others (and the ghosts) seem to be moving on well while Donatelli seems to be bumbling a bit with a big chip on his shoulder instead of working with them all as a team.
Wendy
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Well, that's something good happening for Donatelli = a possible romance to think about. Garth and the others (and the ghosts) seem to be moving on well while Donatelli seems to be bumbling a bit with a big chip on his shoulder instead of working with them all as a team.
Wendy
Comment Written 22-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Maybe a smile or two from Jenna will help remove that chip on Donatelli's shoulder.... as long as Garth doesn't get in his way... purely in Donatelli's head but he's known to do that. Thanks for reading and enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Oh dear. Poor Donatelli! He's got everyone who's working with or for him, at an advantage over him. Garth has connections and Danni and Eleanor have super powers. Hope he learns to watch what he says even when they're not around. At least, there's a romance in his future!
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Oh dear. Poor Donatelli! He's got everyone who's working with or for him, at an advantage over him. Garth has connections and Danni and Eleanor have super powers. Hope he learns to watch what he says even when they're not around. At least, there's a romance in his future!
Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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I think, or at least hope, that a few nice evenings with Jenna might knock some of that chip away...though it might take a sledgehammer. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
This is an interesting chapter. I would advise about the heavy amount of banter and dialogue. Also, I know it's fiction, and you have ghosts, but I think your ghosts should let the readers know the limits or rules surrounding what they can and cannot do. Or it may hurt your story. Like the Scarlett witch in Dr. Strange 2. That was a mess.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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This is an interesting chapter. I would advise about the heavy amount of banter and dialogue. Also, I know it's fiction, and you have ghosts, but I think your ghosts should let the readers know the limits or rules surrounding what they can and cannot do. Or it may hurt your story. Like the Scarlett witch in Dr. Strange 2. That was a mess.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Through out the other chapters it has been mentioned what the rules for each ghost has been and they are different since one is a junior ghost. LOL Humor and dialogue are kind of my style like nitty gritty is yours but I appreciate your thoughts and suggestions. I'll keep it in mind as I continue.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Ric Myworld
Conflict and emotions are the keys to good stories and you certainly are never lacking for either when you write. Your memory bank is a double-sized vault. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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Conflict and emotions are the keys to good stories and you certainly are never lacking for either when you write. Your memory bank is a double-sized vault. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 21-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 23-Sep-2024
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And that double-sized vault might be why I am awake when I should be sleeping. I wake up with a story line whirling through my head. Now what's with that? Thanks for stopping by. Hope all is well.
Smiles, Carol