Spirited Justice
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Comment from Esther Brown
You drew me from my efforts at catching up my computer tasks, just thought to read a few. Now I need to go back and read all the ones I missed! Your characters sing! Esther
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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You drew me from my efforts at catching up my computer tasks, just thought to read a few. Now I need to go back and read all the ones I missed! Your characters sing! Esther
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I am blessed by your friendship and your stars. You are so kind and I apology (sort of) for taking you from your work, but at the same time I am thrilled. Thank you for reading and enjoying this one.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Carol Clark2
Good chapter! Things like this make my heart race. LOL! I like the way you ended with 'just a few more seconds,' as if anything could happen in the next chapter. A few small fixes: 'he saw the clerk...admiring the delicate (petals).' 'Jose, I don't know about this(.)' Good tension in this chapter!
Hugs! Carol
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Good chapter! Things like this make my heart race. LOL! I like the way you ended with 'just a few more seconds,' as if anything could happen in the next chapter. A few small fixes: 'he saw the clerk...admiring the delicate (petals).' 'Jose, I don't know about this(.)' Good tension in this chapter!
Hugs! Carol
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Thanks for catching those oops! I made and I have fixed. Appreciate the eagle eyes. As for the story, I m thrilled that you could feel the tension and anticipate what was coming next.
Smiles, Carol
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You're welcome. The editor within never quits! Sorry.
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Thank heavens for me!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Alejandro was found out, but will he get away. I have a feeling he'll get caught, if not right away very soon. I enjoyed reading.
Jose's voice remained steady. "Listen to me. (steady,)
After a pause, Jose's voice softened. "Listen, I trust you. I (softened,)
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Alejandro was found out, but will he get away. I have a feeling he'll get caught, if not right away very soon. I enjoyed reading.
Jose's voice remained steady. "Listen to me. (steady,)
After a pause, Jose's voice softened. "Listen, I trust you. I (softened,)
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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It's a wonder you don't give up on me, Barbara. I will never get these right no matter how much I try, but do know that I appreciate the help. thanks for the review and comments.
Smiles, Carol
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Not a problem
Comment from Jacob1395
Woah, that's a brilliant intense way to end your chapter on, Carol. I could really feel the tension Alejandro was feeling as he tried to impersonate Arthur. Now I can't wait to find out how he is going to get out of this situation. Another excellent piece.
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Woah, that's a brilliant intense way to end your chapter on, Carol. I could really feel the tension Alejandro was feeling as he tried to impersonate Arthur. Now I can't wait to find out how he is going to get out of this situation. Another excellent piece.
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I must now rack my brain and decide the man's fate. He never meant to be the bad guy, but he has fallen to Jose's manipulation. Now does he pay the price or reap the benefits? I better get busy if we are to learn the outcome.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Harry Craft
Another great chapter. I felt like I was watching a gangster movie! I was waiting for him to get caught. I like the line of a neon sign above him arrest this man. That was good. Keep up the great work Carol!
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Another great chapter. I felt like I was watching a gangster movie! I was waiting for him to get caught. I like the line of a neon sign above him arrest this man. That was good. Keep up the great work Carol!
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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I must now rack my brain and decide the man's fate. He never meant to be the bad guy, but he has fallen to Jose's manipulation. Now does he pay the price or reap the benefits? I better get busy if we are to learn the outcome.
Smiles, Carol
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LOL! Yes, get busy Carol. We want to know!
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Oh dear, I was hoping he wouldn't do it!! There are bound to be cameras everywhere. And of course, Jose's father! He was right, he won't get away with it, but Jose might. This chapter was excellent, Carol, I felt everything Alejandro was feeling, and everyone else. Very well done, my clever friend. Love you lots. Sandra xxx
I've been so tired these last few days, and haven't been able to concentrate on anything. I see you have two other posts I haven't read, I will read them today. xxx
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Oh dear, I was hoping he wouldn't do it!! There are bound to be cameras everywhere. And of course, Jose's father! He was right, he won't get away with it, but Jose might. This chapter was excellent, Carol, I felt everything Alejandro was feeling, and everyone else. Very well done, my clever friend. Love you lots. Sandra xxx
I've been so tired these last few days, and haven't been able to concentrate on anything. I see you have two other posts I haven't read, I will read them today. xxx
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 12-Sep-2024
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Don't you worry about me...Take care of yourself. Have you been overworking and not getting enough rest or IS IT SOMETHING ELSE???
I'm glad you enjoyed this chapter and things are going to explode....The other posts are simply stories reminding me of who I am, I guess.
Thank you and take care....
Smiles,hugs and lots of love, Carol
Comment from royowen
Would he indeed get away with? And he certainly had intoxicated the girl into thinking that the deception had worked, but he did escape with the papers, but will he get away with it? Yet all will be manifest in the due time. Well done, beautifully, written, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Would he indeed get away with? And he certainly had intoxicated the girl into thinking that the deception had worked, but he did escape with the papers, but will he get away with it? Yet all will be manifest in the due time. Well done, beautifully, written, blessings Roy
Comment Written 12-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Yes, a little honey will take you much farther it seems. Thank you for the review and for enjoying another chapter. I appreciate your constant support.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Poor Alejandro - what did he get himself into? That was a clever thing to give the rose and compliment the young clerk. But I would have thought they would have closed his account when he was considered dead. I know some banks even require fingerprints to get into the vault. The signatures probably did not match. Jose really didn't consider the peril he was putting his friend in to force him to do this. I guess we'll find out if he gets away.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Poor Alejandro - what did he get himself into? That was a clever thing to give the rose and compliment the young clerk. But I would have thought they would have closed his account when he was considered dead. I know some banks even require fingerprints to get into the vault. The signatures probably did not match. Jose really didn't consider the peril he was putting his friend in to force him to do this. I guess we'll find out if he gets away.
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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In the story, the bank probably hasn't been notified of his death yet because it just happened and those involved are technically tied up in other places. Of course, the signatures didn't match so it's all happening on a wing and a prayer so to speak.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lancellot
Interesting chapter. You do good job letting the reader not only follow the scene externally, but the internal turmoil only adds to the thrill and pacing of the heist. The reader has to wonder what that bank officer actually was going to say.
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reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Interesting chapter. You do good job letting the reader not only follow the scene externally, but the internal turmoil only adds to the thrill and pacing of the heist. The reader has to wonder what that bank officer actually was going to say.
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Comment Written 11-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 13-Sep-2024
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Like Alejandro, I didn't wait to see.... thanks for the review, your thoughts and appreciation for the story line.
Smiles, Carol
