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They Linger Still

A time of sorrow for the Cherokee

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Comment from jim vecchio
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That was a shameful chapter in our country's history. We will probably never know all the heartbreaks that followed those good people on their forced journey. Of course, there were many scourges between settlers and Indians, but many were connected to the ownership of land.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you. I doubt if the bother having written deeds to the land but the probably didn't need them until we came on the scene. Thanks for the review.
    Beth
Comment from lyenochka
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Beautifully illustrated and presented with the staggered lines. I like your use of alliteration and consonance in the poem especially the last line. Best wishes in the contest!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 05-Sep-2024
    Thank you so much. I'm glad you like it.
    Beth
Comment from Harry Craft
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Great subject for a poem! I really enjoyed this one. And the photo is great to go with the poem as well. The history here is so sad too. Yes, these people must have been heartbroken. Great work!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Harry. I really appreciate the review and comments.
    Beth
reply by Harry Craft on 05-Sep-2024
    You are very welcome Beth!
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
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Wow, you've captured this scene very well, Beth! I've never heard of the Trail of Tears so thank you for the notes and the fact that you've actually driven along it which makes it so much more real to the reader. Good alliteration and evocative second line which for me drives the verse. Well done and good luck! Debbie

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Debbie. I live near the Cherokee and many of the started on the trail from here.
    Beth
Comment from Rachelle Allen
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Oh my! This is very Halloween-y. That reminds me: Do you know why ghosts can't have children? Because they have hollow weenies! HAHAHA!

Eerie-cool haiku!

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Rachelle, you're too funny. Did you share that one with your student or did they share with you? Thanks for the review.
    Beth
reply by Rachelle Allen on 04-Sep-2024
    I honestly don't remember where I heard that joke, but it definitely was NOT from a student. I stay away from any kind of "questionable" jokes with them!! That's very thin ice these days!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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Thank you for sharing this contest entry with us. I counted six syllables in the second line, then I looked up echoing. I didn't know it had three syllables. It does. I learned something new. I enjoyed reading and good luck with the contest.

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Barbara, I appreciate the review. I didn't look up echoing because, I pronounce it with three syllables. You might say it differently.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
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Beautiful Haiku, Beth. Very original. Not a common topic, which is a shame. thanks for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Marilyn. I'm glad you like my haiku. Congratulation on you win. I enjoyed the one you wrote.
    Beth
Comment from Begin Again
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I agree! How sad it must have been to have the immigrants come in and chase them from their own land that they had lived on for many many decades. Politicians were arrogant people back then too!
Smiles, Carol

 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Carol. There is place where many of them lived ont he outskirts of Chattanooga called Red Clay. It was a big Indian settlement. Chattanooga was settled by a halfbreed named John Ross. He became Chief of the Cherokee. Chattanooga was called Ross's Landing.
Comment from Tom Horonzy
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The world still is consumed with bullying. Whether the Chinese, Mexicans, Latter Day Saints, Jews, or various tribes of indigenous people. Huns and Moors, Greeks, Persians. Make War not Love has been the call.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
    Thanks for the review on my poem about the Trail of tears. I enjoyed your comments.
    Beth
reply by the author on 19-Sep-2024
    Thanks for the review on my poem about the Trail of tears. I enjoyed your comments.
    Beth
Comment from patcelaw
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This was a painful time in history for those who live through it. I enjoyed very much your presentation and it works out very well. Have a good day and may God bless you. Patricia.

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 Comment Written 04-Sep-2024


reply by the author on 04-Sep-2024
    Thank you Patricia. Yes it was painful to give up your home and be forced to walk such a long distance. Many died along the way.
    I hope you're having a good week.