Goodnight Sweet Summer
Until next year...18 total reviews
Comment from dragonpoet
Hi
This is a nice personification of the seasons and of a quiet peaceful change from Summer to Autumn. Good choice of artwork. It is full of Autumn colors and seems in show the breeze.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Hi
This is a nice personification of the seasons and of a quiet peaceful change from Summer to Autumn. Good choice of artwork. It is full of Autumn colors and seems in show the breeze.
Good luck in the contest.
Keep writing and stay healthy
Have a great day
Joan
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Many thanks Joan for your review and good luck wishes. Take care!
Comment from jaded831
Your poem creates a feeling. I had to look up the word zephyrs, once I did your poem came alive. I love the changing seasons. Summer changing to fall is a pleasant transition.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Your poem creates a feeling. I had to look up the word zephyrs, once I did your poem came alive. I love the changing seasons. Summer changing to fall is a pleasant transition.
Comment Written 03-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks so very much for your lovely comments and review!
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I enjoyed this poem. I.like the title: goodbye sweet summer. The picture is perfect for the poem. I hate to see summer go too. Good luck in the contest.
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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I enjoyed this poem. I.like the title: goodbye sweet summer. The picture is perfect for the poem. I hate to see summer go too. Good luck in the contest.
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks for your review Brenda and good luck wishes too!
Comment from SimianSavant
I'm definitely not ready for this. There are another three weeks of summer left to go! But I suppose folks are already thinking about Christmas.
This does capture the public sentiment at the moment though, which is what matters as far as contests are concerned. You have good presentation with picture, colors, font and so on. The only issue I see is the line height. It's a bit tight and causing collisions, such as with your capital G on the first line with the M of the second line. You can probably change this in the advanced editor. In the basic editor, you can chance it with the line-height CSS property. Let me know if you have any questions about this (I can only help with basic editor as I never use the "advanced" editor).
Regards,
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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I'm definitely not ready for this. There are another three weeks of summer left to go! But I suppose folks are already thinking about Christmas.
This does capture the public sentiment at the moment though, which is what matters as far as contests are concerned. You have good presentation with picture, colors, font and so on. The only issue I see is the line height. It's a bit tight and causing collisions, such as with your capital G on the first line with the M of the second line. You can probably change this in the advanced editor. In the basic editor, you can chance it with the line-height CSS property. Let me know if you have any questions about this (I can only help with basic editor as I never use the "advanced" editor).
Regards,
🦍
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thanks for your review and suggestions. I double-spaced the lines and that fixed the problem.
Take care!
Comment from Pam (respa)
-Nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-A very good opening line
establishes the premise.
-Very good use of the seasons
to show how much you will
miss summer and will dream about
during the rest of the seasons.
-A good entry; good luck!
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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-Nice artwork and presentation.
-The syllable count is good,
along with the topic.
-A very good opening line
establishes the premise.
-Very good use of the seasons
to show how much you will
miss summer and will dream about
during the rest of the seasons.
-A good entry; good luck!
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Tha so very much Pam. So glad you liked it.
Enjoy your week!
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You are very welcome. Enjoy your week, too.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
A lovely entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. It's true that we spend the rest of the year dreaming about Summer after it's gone. the artwork and color works well in your presentation. Good luck
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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A lovely entry for the 5-7-5 writing prompt. It's true that we spend the rest of the year dreaming about Summer after it's gone. the artwork and color works well in your presentation. Good luck
Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Thank you so much Marilyn!
Comment from Bill Schott
This 5-7-5, Goodnight Sweet Summer, has the proper formatting and notes that the sense of summer stays with us from the end of that season until again finds us.
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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This 5-7-5, Goodnight Sweet Summer, has the proper formatting and notes that the sense of summer stays with us from the end of that season until again finds us.
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Many thanks Bill for your wonderful comments and review.
Comment from RodG
I can only echo the Speaker's farewell to Summer. I, too, will be "dreaming" of that season all the rest of the year. I also appreciate your artwork where Summer is personified. Rod
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reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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I can only echo the Speaker's farewell to Summer. I, too, will be "dreaming" of that season all the rest of the year. I also appreciate your artwork where Summer is personified. Rod
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Comment Written 02-Sep-2024
reply by the author on 03-Sep-2024
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Many thanks Rod for reviewing my contest entry.
Take care!