End of it All
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Comment from Ric Myworld
It appears, head hung and heart broken. But when things are at their worst, we must pick up our chins, spit into the wind, and hope it's blowing in the opposite direction. :-)
Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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It appears, head hung and heart broken. But when things are at their worst, we must pick up our chins, spit into the wind, and hope it's blowing in the opposite direction. :-)
Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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I love your review. It's so much fun.
Thanks for reading, Ric.
Comment from Debbie Pope
I like this, Heather. It's pretty with the alliteration of the "s" sounds. I'm a little confused though. "Shimmery" sounds nice. But they shattered when you shared them with a special person? Did the sharing make that person run off? That's my take on it. Seems to me you could easily clarify in the descriptive line. With these one liners, the descriptive line and title add so much.
Anyway. That's my groggy thoughts (I just woke up). Good luck in the competition. Like I said, these are very pretty words.
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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I like this, Heather. It's pretty with the alliteration of the "s" sounds. I'm a little confused though. "Shimmery" sounds nice. But they shattered when you shared them with a special person? Did the sharing make that person run off? That's my take on it. Seems to me you could easily clarify in the descriptive line. With these one liners, the descriptive line and title add so much.
Anyway. That's my groggy thoughts (I just woke up). Good luck in the competition. Like I said, these are very pretty words.
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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That's one possible interpretation. What I meant to say though, is that when you shared your love with that person he/she disappeared.
Thanks for reading.
I'll add a note now.
Comment from Jesse James Doty
This is very alliterative and gets straight to the point. The title and line above it tell part of the story and the one-line poem tells all the rest. I love the way the words swirl around my mouth when I read them out loud. An excellent poem worthy of winning the contest.
Jesse
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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This is very alliterative and gets straight to the point. The title and line above it tell part of the story and the one-line poem tells all the rest. I love the way the words swirl around my mouth when I read them out loud. An excellent poem worthy of winning the contest.
Jesse
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for this kind review, Jesse.
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You're welcome, my friend.
Enjoy the weekend.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Hi Maria, I like the way you pick up the "shimmering" of the sea as imagery for the magical and ethereal nature of dreams and how they can change in an instant once the driving force behind them (the sea or the loved one) recedes. Well done and good luck! Debbie xx PS I imagined the sea behind her but I may be wrong:))
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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Hi Maria, I like the way you pick up the "shimmering" of the sea as imagery for the magical and ethereal nature of dreams and how they can change in an instant once the driving force behind them (the sea or the loved one) recedes. Well done and good luck! Debbie xx PS I imagined the sea behind her but I may be wrong:))
Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 24-Aug-2024
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I think the sea is in the picture, but I didn't think of it when I wrote the poem. Thanks so much for reading.
Comment from Shirley Ann Bunyan
A one line poem using effective alliteration and telling the story of a regretted encounter which started out with high hopes and dreams.
Expressed succinctly and well using so few words. Not easy to do. Well done.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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A one line poem using effective alliteration and telling the story of a regretted encounter which started out with high hopes and dreams.
Expressed succinctly and well using so few words. Not easy to do. Well done.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your very kind review.
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You're welcome :)
Comment from TPAC
I believe the word them would enhance this thought. When I share them with you. A possible way to say such heart felt concerns: in my given opinion. Could be off key: but thinks it comforts this conveyance.
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reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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I believe the word them would enhance this thought. When I share them with you. A possible way to say such heart felt concerns: in my given opinion. Could be off key: but thinks it comforts this conveyance.
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Comment Written 23-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 23-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your review and suggestion.