Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 30 "Chapter 16 C"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
29 total reviews
Comment from Sanku
So Noah opened up to Sami .Quite a sad story .This confession has brought them close.
When you are enjoying a story it is difficult to pin point errors unless they are bad enough to.interfere with the reading.pleasure. perhaps that's why your readers have not picked them up
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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So Noah opened up to Sami .Quite a sad story .This confession has brought them close.
When you are enjoying a story it is difficult to pin point errors unless they are bad enough to.interfere with the reading.pleasure. perhaps that's why your readers have not picked them up
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review. I am afraid maybe people aren't reading. You've given me another reason. Thank you.
Comment from Douglas Goff
People aren't catching g the errors because they are getting wrapped up in the story. Especially the dialogue. Makes us forget we are exiting when the story is so good.
This chapter was action packed. Lots of activity going on. Lots of secrets. Pretty realistic in adult professional lives. Good job!
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reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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People aren't catching g the errors because they are getting wrapped up in the story. Especially the dialogue. Makes us forget we are exiting when the story is so good.
This chapter was action packed. Lots of activity going on. Lots of secrets. Pretty realistic in adult professional lives. Good job!
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Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I hope that's correct. That's a good thing. I sometimes wonder if they're even bothering to read or just collecting the money.
Comment from Wendy G
I wasn't sure how or when Noah took the pregnancy kit from her pocket, or how she didn't know he did, but I didn't think it appropriate for him to do that without asking, and I didn't think it was appropriate for him to yell at her rather than just ask for the information he wanted. Maybe just me. However, they are starting to share more with each other about meaningful life experiences, which is good.
Wendy
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Her head leaned against his chest. again. (Remove full stop after "chest")
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I wasn't sure how or when Noah took the pregnancy kit from her pocket, or how she didn't know he did, but I didn't think it appropriate for him to do that without asking, and I didn't think it was appropriate for him to yell at her rather than just ask for the information he wanted. Maybe just me. However, they are starting to share more with each other about meaningful life experiences, which is good.
Wendy
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Her head leaned against his chest. again. (Remove full stop after "chest")
Comment Written 12-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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It was supposed to be a comma. Thank you for the catch. Noah reached into her jeans pocket and took the pregnancy kit out, after he accused her. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Aw... I love how the story is unfolding... it's so romantic.
I think Sami and Noah are going to be fine.
I didn't see Noah's story coming. No wonder he is guarded and finds opening up hard to do.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Aw... I love how the story is unfolding... it's so romantic.
I think Sami and Noah are going to be fine.
I didn't see Noah's story coming. No wonder he is guarded and finds opening up hard to do.
Well done
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novalis
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Yes, Noah has a lot to overcome. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
I didn't notice any errors so that seems to be ok. The story line in great and explains Noah's adherence to rules. If he had followed even common sense his childhood friend wouldn't have been unsupported when she met the man who killed her.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I didn't notice any errors so that seems to be ok. The story line in great and explains Noah's adherence to rules. If he had followed even common sense his childhood friend wouldn't have been unsupported when she met the man who killed her.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from Sankey
This was a wonderful chapter. Lots of twists and turns. Family and most of all some lovely romantic moments. Noah seems a lovely, caring man.
I look forward to where this is heading. No spags today.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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This was a wonderful chapter. Lots of twists and turns. Family and most of all some lovely romantic moments. Noah seems a lovely, caring man.
I look forward to where this is heading. No spags today.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from GWHARGIS
I'm terrible at editing, but I can tell you how a story made me feel or shat I like or dislike about a character. I liked how Noah, being the kind of guy he is, was so sure that Sami was getting the pregnancy test for herself. He is a bit of a hothead, but does give her the opportunity to explain things. His rigidness is perfectly balanced by her spontaneity. This was another great chapter in this book. Gretchen
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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I'm terrible at editing, but I can tell you how a story made me feel or shat I like or dislike about a character. I liked how Noah, being the kind of guy he is, was so sure that Sami was getting the pregnancy test for herself. He is a bit of a hothead, but does give her the opportunity to explain things. His rigidness is perfectly balanced by her spontaneity. This was another great chapter in this book. Gretchen
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the kind review and support.
Comment from judiverse
Somehow, I don't see Sami and Noah as a lasting couple. It's just the protective custody thing that has brought them together. Sami is needy and Noah has a job that makes lots of demands. Interesting that when Noah sees the pregnancy test, he immediately thinks it is for Sami and makes his assumptions about her past. I think Noah would be the one to judge what's best for Sarah if she is pregnant. Let Noah make his decision based on agency policy. Interesting backstory Noah tells about Ella and how it's affected him. Great work. I'll stop second-guessing Noah and Sami now. judi
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Somehow, I don't see Sami and Noah as a lasting couple. It's just the protective custody thing that has brought them together. Sami is needy and Noah has a job that makes lots of demands. Interesting that when Noah sees the pregnancy test, he immediately thinks it is for Sami and makes his assumptions about her past. I think Noah would be the one to judge what's best for Sarah if she is pregnant. Let Noah make his decision based on agency policy. Interesting backstory Noah tells about Ella and how it's affected him. Great work. I'll stop second-guessing Noah and Sami now. judi
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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LOL Noah has a lot of issues to work through. We'll see if Sami can break down those walls. Thank you for the kind review.
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You're welcome. To me, Sami's the one with the issues. Noah has to think about his job and everyone's safety. judi
Comment from nomi338
What a sad and motivating story about Noah and the young girl his carelessness caused to be abducted. Many of us are motivated by some mistake we live to regret. It can be a very strong motivator as was the case in this case.
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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What a sad and motivating story about Noah and the young girl his carelessness caused to be abducted. Many of us are motivated by some mistake we live to regret. It can be a very strong motivator as was the case in this case.
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the understanding.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
That's quite a story Noah told Sami and little wonder he's so protective of her because he's clearly never really forgiven himself. These two love birds seem to be getting closer and closer and, now that Noah has revealed this very private matter, I imagine Sami will warm to him still more. An enjoyable chapter, Barbara, and do I sense from the dialogue here that the end is in sight? Well done! Debbie. Small edit below:
I'm willing (to) take the risk
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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That's quite a story Noah told Sami and little wonder he's so protective of her because he's clearly never really forgiven himself. These two love birds seem to be getting closer and closer and, now that Noah has revealed this very private matter, I imagine Sami will warm to him still more. An enjoyable chapter, Barbara, and do I sense from the dialogue here that the end is in sight? Well done! Debbie. Small edit below:
I'm willing (to) take the risk
Comment Written 11-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 12-Aug-2024
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Thank you for the catch. I have added that crazy little word. I appreciate the help.
