2024 Gypsy's Tanka
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Comment from Rachelle Allen
This was excellent with all the metaphors and personifications throughout which have nothing whatever to do with these forces of nature, except as how they mirror human experiences (or vice versa). GREAT tanka! Very exciting and erotic. xoxo
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This was excellent with all the metaphors and personifications throughout which have nothing whatever to do with these forces of nature, except as how they mirror human experiences (or vice versa). GREAT tanka! Very exciting and erotic. xoxo
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Rachelle. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Rachelle. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Right back atcha!! xoxo
Comment from GWHARGIS
I could see the movement of the water as the impatient stream or river hurried to join the calmer and larger body of water. It made me think about youth and how impatient we are to get out into the world. This was a stunning and clever poem. Gretchen
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I could see the movement of the water as the impatient stream or river hurried to join the calmer and larger body of water. It made me think about youth and how impatient we are to get out into the world. This was a stunning and clever poem. Gretchen
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Gretchen. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Gretchen. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from shelley kaye
i like the 'r' alliteration in the first two lines
i think it made the unite line stand out more
nice imagery and smooth flow throughout...
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
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i like the 'r' alliteration in the first two lines
i think it made the unite line stand out more
nice imagery and smooth flow throughout...
thank you for sharing!
shelley :)
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Shelley. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Shelley. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Pamusart
Hi, Gypsy
There was a time on here where I exclusively wrote, tankas and haikus
That was about five years ago. So you're writing a book of them, huh?
Tell me something are you responsible for creating the layout and creating the manuscript yourself?
This Tonka is beautiful. Wind of change has been said many times so it's a little bit trite
But it's still beautiful. A critic once told me to not use a famous expressions and poetry because she thought they were trite. Who cares about that. F that to the winds. I still do it. Sometimes it's accidental, and sometimes it's deliberate
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Hi, Gypsy
There was a time on here where I exclusively wrote, tankas and haikus
That was about five years ago. So you're writing a book of them, huh?
Tell me something are you responsible for creating the layout and creating the manuscript yourself?
This Tonka is beautiful. Wind of change has been said many times so it's a little bit trite
But it's still beautiful. A critic once told me to not use a famous expressions and poetry because she thought they were trite. Who cares about that. F that to the winds. I still do it. Sometimes it's accidental, and sometimes it's deliberate
I enjoyed reading your poem
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Pam. I do all my presentations and poems, I think you have asked me this before. I have many books in Fanstory and two published books of haiku. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Pam. I do all my presentations and poems, I think you have asked me this before. I have many books in Fanstory and two published books of haiku. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from Bill Schott
This tanka, The Winds of Change, has the proper formatting and finds the power pushing through the obstructive geography until it reaches the open and peaceful sea.
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This tanka, The Winds of Change, has the proper formatting and finds the power pushing through the obstructive geography until it reaches the open and peaceful sea.
Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Bill. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Bill. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
Comment from royowen
The seas and winds are always a marvellous metaphor for the storms of life that beset us in our sometimes turbulent lives. This is a very well written poem my friend, great alliteration in the first line, well dine, blessings Roy
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The seas and winds are always a marvellous metaphor for the storms of life that beset us in our sometimes turbulent lives. This is a very well written poem my friend, great alliteration in the first line, well dine, blessings Roy
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Roy. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Roy. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Most welcome
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Great job
Comment from patcelaw
Very nice it is very nicely presented. I enjoyed listening to it and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and make God bless you. Patricia.
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Very nice it is very nicely presented. I enjoyed listening to it and I wish you the very best with all of your writing. May you have a wonderful weekend and make God bless you. Patricia.
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
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Thank you very much, Patricia. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
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Thank you very much, Patricia. May you have a wonderful weekend.
Gypsy 😊
