Collection of a Lifetime
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Comment from RodG
Your Autumn poem does the season justice. I especially like your appeal to almost all our senses in your imagery. You put your reader there with the pumpkins, flitting leaves, cornstalks, and apple cider. Since you chose to rhyme your poem, you might have used 8-6 meter, rather than 7-6 to achieve a more consistent rhythm. Rod
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Your Autumn poem does the season justice. I especially like your appeal to almost all our senses in your imagery. You put your reader there with the pumpkins, flitting leaves, cornstalks, and apple cider. Since you chose to rhyme your poem, you might have used 8-6 meter, rather than 7-6 to achieve a more consistent rhythm. Rod
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your review, I appreciate it.
Comment from SimianSavant
This unmetered autumn poem does a good job of capturing some of the quintessential images of early autumn. The piece itself looks like a Jack-o-lantern, which works well.
Stanza 2: lines 1 and 3 don't rhyme -- merely pointing this out because the rest of this piece follows ABAB rhyming.
Regards,
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reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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This unmetered autumn poem does a good job of capturing some of the quintessential images of early autumn. The piece itself looks like a Jack-o-lantern, which works well.
Stanza 2: lines 1 and 3 don't rhyme -- merely pointing this out because the rest of this piece follows ABAB rhyming.
Regards,
🦍
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Comment Written 09-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 09-Aug-2024
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Thanks so much for your review.