The Coyote Boys
Viewing comments for Chapter 14 "Wild Dogs"Story about two brothers who change their destiny.
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Comment from Sankey
Another good chapter of a real quirky story about struggling kids and Mum. Good that someone has bashed the Dad up a bit. Keep it coming. I am enjoying this.No spags.
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Another good chapter of a real quirky story about struggling kids and Mum. Good that someone has bashed the Dad up a bit. Keep it coming. I am enjoying this.No spags.
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much. I'm glad you are still enjoying this. Thank you for the extra star. Gretchen
Comment from Wendy G
Not too long - it flowed very smoothly and well. I wonder what Dewey is hatching up. In many ways he is a lot braver than Huck. Perhaps he has a greater need to avenge the brutality he's always received along with the constant humiliation. Perhaps he feels he has less to lose. This is a very powerful story, engrossing but fearsome too.
Wendy
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Not too long - it flowed very smoothly and well. I wonder what Dewey is hatching up. In many ways he is a lot braver than Huck. Perhaps he has a greater need to avenge the brutality he's always received along with the constant humiliation. Perhaps he feels he has less to lose. This is a very powerful story, engrossing but fearsome too.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Wendy. I'm ready for some comedy or happiness. Too much of this takes it out of you. Thanks for this. Gretchen
Comment from Esther Brown
Entranced with the story. The cycle of abuse is a battle between the ones doing the dance and the watchers crying foul. I noted one repeat:
She looks tired. Dark circles seem to swallow her eyes and she looks tired. Can you maybe lose the first one? Reword a tiny bit? I like your story and will go back and reread when life settles a bit. I have a mentally ill son who I have been trying to convince to take his meds again so life has been a bit busy. Esther
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Entranced with the story. The cycle of abuse is a battle between the ones doing the dance and the watchers crying foul. I noted one repeat:
She looks tired. Dark circles seem to swallow her eyes and she looks tired. Can you maybe lose the first one? Reword a tiny bit? I like your story and will go back and reread when life settles a bit. I have a mentally ill son who I have been trying to convince to take his meds again so life has been a bit busy. Esther
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you for catching that repetition. Always appreciate the editing help. Good luck with your son . Gretchen
Comment from Neonewman
It looks like Mathew Strait tangled with someone who fought back like his boys were planning to do. The story gets more interesting with each chapter. Great job,Gretchen. You did find the right stopping place.
God bless,
Steve
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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It looks like Mathew Strait tangled with someone who fought back like his boys were planning to do. The story gets more interesting with each chapter. Great job,Gretchen. You did find the right stopping place.
God bless,
Steve
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you so much, Steve. I'm ready for this one to end. Honestly, it's very dark. But it's getting close. Gretchen
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I'm enjoying it, and it's always a pleasure.
Comment from Rachelle Allen
I wish I'd waited until the morning to read this because that's a lot farther off than my bedtime. How am I possibly going to get my four hours if I'm trying to ward off these jangled nerves, imagining these boys doing the wrong thing for what certainly seems like the right reason. Oy.
Well done, Gretchen.
This one sentence, though, gave me a pause and snagged me. It felt like The Department of Redundancy Department:
She looks tired. Dark circles seem to swallow her eyes and she looks tired.
Everything else flowed like murky water into a black lagoon. This is such a dark tale.
xoxox
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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I wish I'd waited until the morning to read this because that's a lot farther off than my bedtime. How am I possibly going to get my four hours if I'm trying to ward off these jangled nerves, imagining these boys doing the wrong thing for what certainly seems like the right reason. Oy.
Well done, Gretchen.
This one sentence, though, gave me a pause and snagged me. It felt like The Department of Redundancy Department:
She looks tired. Dark circles seem to swallow her eyes and she looks tired.
Everything else flowed like murky water into a black lagoon. This is such a dark tale.
xoxox
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Four hours!?! I can't fathom it. Thank you for this. I hope it wasn't too distressing. Gretchen
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I'm a high-octane kind of girl. And thankfully, my handsome Bobby is the exact same way.
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I'm still alive to tell the story.
Comment from Carol Hillebrenner
It didn't feel long, I enjoyed every minute of it. The father is a monster, and I fear the scratches are from Miss (forgot name) trying to save herself. Then someone else (or an iron skillet) stepped in and saved her. I vote for Dewey getting his way in regard to their father.
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reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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It didn't feel long, I enjoyed every minute of it. The father is a monster, and I fear the scratches are from Miss (forgot name) trying to save herself. Then someone else (or an iron skillet) stepped in and saved her. I vote for Dewey getting his way in regard to their father.
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 05-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Carol. Only a few more chapters then I'm off to fun writing. Gretchen
Comment from Samantha Wymer
I can finally give you a six star, I have been saving one just for you. I hope Dewy and Huck's abusive father gets what is coming to him. He is very mean to the wife and the children. I can't wait until you post the next chapter. Great writing.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I can finally give you a six star, I have been saving one just for you. I hope Dewy and Huck's abusive father gets what is coming to him. He is very mean to the wife and the children. I can't wait until you post the next chapter. Great writing.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Awe, thank you, Samantha. Your nice review has made my night. Much appreciated. Gretchen
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Anytime :)
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Sometimes there just ain't no stoppin'. Nicely done.
The boys might just as well let Momma have a swing with that shovel, as well. She deserves it.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Sometimes there just ain't no stoppin'. Nicely done.
The boys might just as well let Momma have a swing with that shovel, as well. She deserves it.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thanks, Wayne. I don't think she had it in her. She'd given up. I appreciate this review. Gretchen