Dodie Rae
Viewing comments for Chapter 9 "A plan"A young woman unwilling to submit to abuse.
15 total reviews
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
Enjoyed the chapter but you left me hanging again and wondering who is driving that truck! I am paying particular attention to your use of dialogue because I have such trouble making mine sound natural and yours is so well done.
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Enjoyed the chapter but you left me hanging again and wondering who is driving that truck! I am paying particular attention to your use of dialogue because I have such trouble making mine sound natural and yours is so well done.
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn. I work in the food industry, and I think this helps with my dialogue. What an honor to have you look at my work, my friend.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Steve Foreman
Great chapter, it is gripping, even if it was a stand-alone piece of writing. It has a good mix of narrative and dialogue. "Yes, I'm starving (for more!) and a bit hung over (waiting for more!)."
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Great chapter, it is gripping, even if it was a stand-alone piece of writing. It has a good mix of narrative and dialogue. "Yes, I'm starving (for more!) and a bit hung over (waiting for more!)."
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Steve, for the exceptional Six stars, my friend. I enjoy clever and what you did here has made my morning.
"Yes, I'm starving (for more!) and a bit hung over (waiting for more!)."
God bless,
Steve
Comment from GWHARGIS
I like this investigative side of Dodie. She is a born investigator. You could write another book, about her solving crimes while still trying to control this beast. Lol. I'd read it. So you've already sold one!! This was great. I'm hoping Sam stays in the dark to protect herself. Gretchen
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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I like this investigative side of Dodie. She is a born investigator. You could write another book, about her solving crimes while still trying to control this beast. Lol. I'd read it. So you've already sold one!! This was great. I'm hoping Sam stays in the dark to protect herself. Gretchen
Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Gretchen, for this exceptional six-star review, my friend. I had a ton of fun with this chapter. I enjoy how if feels like I'm in the scene with the characters as they tell their story.
God bless,
Steve
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That's how it feels when I write. I'm just taking notes and they are writing the story. It was really good. Gretchen
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They do take the lead. What a wonderful world, the land of imagination.
Comment from Ric Myworld
Well, as always, great chapter, and then you left me anxiously awaiting the next chapter to find out who was driving the black truck, obviously a known person. Thanks for sharing.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Well, as always, great chapter, and then you left me anxiously awaiting the next chapter to find out who was driving the black truck, obviously a known person. Thanks for sharing.
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Ric, for this excellent review, my friend. Yeah! She recognized the driver, but needs to verify before she re-acts.
God bless,
Steve
Comment from Wayne Fowler
Ah, drama and suspense.
And well written.
"Great; they're walking this way." - I think a comma would work here since there is not a complete sentence on each side. Or a period if you want more separation.
Best wishes.
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reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Ah, drama and suspense.
And well written.
"Great; they're walking this way." - I think a comma would work here since there is not a complete sentence on each side. Or a period if you want more separation.
Best wishes.
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Comment Written 04-Aug-2024
reply by the author on 04-Aug-2024
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Thank you, Wayne, for this excellent review. I look forward to your reviews as you are always willing to help. I appreciate this more than you know, my friend.
God bless,
Steve.
