Willing Hearts
Viewing comments for Chapter 27 "Chapter 15 B"Solve a crime and fall in love at the same time?
36 total reviews
Comment from Mia Twysted
It would help if the words were in a bigger font. After reading for a while, my eyes were unable to follow without losing my place and having to find my place again. This pulled me out of the story, leaving me to reconnect each time.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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It would help if the words were in a bigger font. After reading for a while, my eyes were unable to follow without losing my place and having to find my place again. This pulled me out of the story, leaving me to reconnect each time.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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I'm sorry. I copied and pasted from my word document, and I write in 28 font, but when I paste it here, this is the way it comes out. Not sure what to do about it. Thank you for sharing.
Comment from tfawcus
For a chapter which is mainly sitting about waiting for things to happen, you've managed to hold my interest well with the natural conversation and the dynamics between the characters, Noah and Sami in particular.
I know this is perfectly acceptable these days, but I hate it! but I could care less who you date (couldn't care less)
I'm hoping it takes only a few more weeks, but I can't promise." After a few silent moments, few/few
I have a feeling this is the calm before the storm. You handle rises and falls in the tempo of your stories well.
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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For a chapter which is mainly sitting about waiting for things to happen, you've managed to hold my interest well with the natural conversation and the dynamics between the characters, Noah and Sami in particular.
I know this is perfectly acceptable these days, but I hate it! but I could care less who you date (couldn't care less)
I'm hoping it takes only a few more weeks, but I can't promise." After a few silent moments, few/few
I have a feeling this is the calm before the storm. You handle rises and falls in the tempo of your stories well.
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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It is the calm before the storm. Thank your for the kind review and pointing out some issues.
Comment from lyenochka
It's good that Sami knows Mateo well enough to explain his actions. And it's good that she can clear up the real relationship she has with him so that Noah need not be insecure about her feelings for him. Now there's a new mystery puzzle box. I wonder what that will lead to - maybe a clue?
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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It's good that Sami knows Mateo well enough to explain his actions. And it's good that she can clear up the real relationship she has with him so that Noah need not be insecure about her feelings for him. Now there's a new mystery puzzle box. I wonder what that will lead to - maybe a clue?
Comment Written 23-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 23-Jul-2024
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The puzzle box will come into play. LOL Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written chapter for your book and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It moves along very well and has read aloud. It also has very good sentence structure very good paragraph and your punctuation all are very very good. Have a good day good week and may God bless you. Patricia.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This is a very well written chapter for your book and I enjoyed listening to it very much. It moves along very well and has read aloud. It also has very good sentence structure very good paragraph and your punctuation all are very very good. Have a good day good week and may God bless you. Patricia.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from royowen
I love the way Sami gives reassurance that Mateo is not the man for her, but she cares for him, and asks Bob if there's more she may worry then, With permission Noah draws her into his arms and reassures her. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I love the way Sami gives reassurance that Mateo is not the man for her, but she cares for him, and asks Bob if there's more she may worry then, With permission Noah draws her into his arms and reassures her. Beautifully written Barbara, blessings Roy
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
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Welcome
Comment from Gypsy Blue Rose
Hello, Barbara,
Another excellent chapter. I feel like I know all the characters personally, especially Sami and Noah.
I hope, mateo's plan works.
I love the way Noah offers hugs when Sami is upset, it's fatherly.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Hello, Barbara,
Another excellent chapter. I feel like I know all the characters personally, especially Sami and Noah.
I hope, mateo's plan works.
I love the way Noah offers hugs when Sami is upset, it's fatherly.
Well done!
Gypsy
"Poetry heals the wounds inflicted by reason" -- Novali
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from estory
Sami seems to take great pains to make sure everyone knows she doesn't feel any romantic inclinations to Mateo. And he is off digging into this traffickers ring, and discovering Chen isn't the kingpin. So the story will unfold from here. The suspense wasn't too great here, the tension was low, again, you digress into lots of small talk. I would leap into the action. The conversation is realistic, but not really essential to the plot of this story. estory
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Sami seems to take great pains to make sure everyone knows she doesn't feel any romantic inclinations to Mateo. And he is off digging into this traffickers ring, and discovering Chen isn't the kingpin. So the story will unfold from here. The suspense wasn't too great here, the tension was low, again, you digress into lots of small talk. I would leap into the action. The conversation is realistic, but not really essential to the plot of this story. estory
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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All of the information in this post will be needed to enhance future posts. Nothing is there that won't be needed. Thank you for th ekind review.
Comment from Ric Myworld
It's nice to be back to reading and reviewing, at least until some time in August when I have to go again. Kind of our loveable pets, we get attached to good characters. Thanks for sharing.
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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It's nice to be back to reading and reviewing, at least until some time in August when I have to go again. Kind of our loveable pets, we get attached to good characters. Thanks for sharing.
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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Thank you for the encouragement.
Comment from Sanku
The puzzle box sounds intriguing. Hope there are some secrets there .would make the plot aa bit more saucy. With the slow blooming of romance the kidnappedMyra was left behind in our thought .Good that you reminded us..
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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The puzzle box sounds intriguing. Hope there are some secrets there .would make the plot aa bit more saucy. With the slow blooming of romance the kidnappedMyra was left behind in our thought .Good that you reminded us..
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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There is a secret in this box. Thank you for the kind review.
Comment from Sankey
This was another great read. Ulla is stalling on her main store again. I guess it is time for me to get some more writing done. You may have seen some of what I am putting up, elsewhere. Not a writing site. One spag...here's the American added "o" again. available to help?"
"If you want me to[o]."
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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This was another great read. Ulla is stalling on her main store again. I guess it is time for me to get some more writing done. You may have seen some of what I am putting up, elsewhere. Not a writing site. One spag...here's the American added "o" again. available to help?"
"If you want me to[o]."
Comment Written 22-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 22-Jul-2024
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I have made the correction. Most of the time my spell check will make that correction, but this time it didn't I wonder why. I appreciate the help.