haiku (the glory of God)
inspired by the artwork on the LArora Potlatch Club post15 total reviews
Comment from Cindy Decker 3
Joan,
This is an excellent poem. Nice photo.
I love the auroras we seldom see here in PA. The ones I have seen are magical, and remind me of the colorful side of God, I like that you liken the lights to hope and faith.
Excellent club entry, Joan.
Best wishes,
Cindy
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Joan,
This is an excellent poem. Nice photo.
I love the auroras we seldom see here in PA. The ones I have seen are magical, and remind me of the colorful side of God, I like that you liken the lights to hope and faith.
Excellent club entry, Joan.
Best wishes,
Cindy
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Hi Cindy,
Thanks for reading and reviewing. I still haven't seen them. It always seems to be cloudy on the nights they are around here.
Joan
Comment from lyenochka
Gorgeous picture! And God is our Hope and so faithful despite the faithlessness of humankind. Great message about the glory of God displayed in all His Creation!
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Gorgeous picture! And God is our Hope and so faithful despite the faithlessness of humankind. Great message about the glory of God displayed in all His Creation!
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the continued support and nice comments, Helen.
Joan
Comment from AP Apgar
What an excellent poem and beautiful picture presentation supporting -the poem is well written - using no capital letters and with a connection between the first and second lines - poem praising the glory of God -
well done.
If I may, allow me to give you a couple of suggestions to enhance your beautiful poem - Your picture is big and beautiful, but your type is small and shy - I would suggest balancing your type with the picture size. (it rhymes, haha)
Haiku Poems I've seem often use Bold and Italics type sometimes, and center each line for balance - additionally - perhaps experiment with some of the many types of lettering available -
Admittedly, some I have experimented with were not legible, (lol) but it's the way I found my style -
And then, the font size - don't be shy - for this poem for example -26 - 28 would be appropriate if you dare - Your haiku is coming along nicely - keep up the good work!! Always double check your syllable count -
'the glory of Gods most spectacular display - light of hope and faith' Good Job
Bless, AP
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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What an excellent poem and beautiful picture presentation supporting -the poem is well written - using no capital letters and with a connection between the first and second lines - poem praising the glory of God -
well done.
If I may, allow me to give you a couple of suggestions to enhance your beautiful poem - Your picture is big and beautiful, but your type is small and shy - I would suggest balancing your type with the picture size. (it rhymes, haha)
Haiku Poems I've seem often use Bold and Italics type sometimes, and center each line for balance - additionally - perhaps experiment with some of the many types of lettering available -
Admittedly, some I have experimented with were not legible, (lol) but it's the way I found my style -
And then, the font size - don't be shy - for this poem for example -26 - 28 would be appropriate if you dare - Your haiku is coming along nicely - keep up the good work!! Always double check your syllable count -
'the glory of Gods most spectacular display - light of hope and faith' Good Job
Bless, AP
Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Thanks for the constructive criticism, Alan.
Joan
Comment from patcelaw
This is a very well written haiku, and I wish you the very best with it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I wish you a good weekend and may God bless you.
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reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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This is a very well written haiku, and I wish you the very best with it. I wish you the very best with all of your writing. I wish you a good weekend and may God bless you.
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 19-Jul-2024
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Hi Patricia. Thanks for the nice review.
Joan
Comment from Bill Schott
This haiku, The Glory of God, has the proper formatting and looks to the amazing light shows in the sky to give example of the power and promise of God for us.
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reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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This haiku, The Glory of God, has the proper formatting and looks to the amazing light shows in the sky to give example of the power and promise of God for us.
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Comment Written 18-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 18-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your continued support and encouragement, Bill. It is much appreciated.
Joan