Unfinished Brushstrokes
Viewing comments for Chapter 1 "Unfinished Brushstrokes - Chap 1"story of love, loss, new beginnings and secrets.
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Comment from karenina
Oh boy.. I barely got my ticket stamped and buckled my seatbelt and you're already soaring through mortals and bringing us a spirit!
(*Check spelling in your list of characters:
"Magaret Ashley - Eleanor's sister")
C.J. Grey.... Hmmm. Might the " C" stand for Charles?
Already we have a detective!
Woo hoo!
Carol's on her way!
Karenina
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Oh boy.. I barely got my ticket stamped and buckled my seatbelt and you're already soaring through mortals and bringing us a spirit!
(*Check spelling in your list of characters:
"Magaret Ashley - Eleanor's sister")
C.J. Grey.... Hmmm. Might the " C" stand for Charles?
Already we have a detective!
Woo hoo!
Carol's on her way!
Karenina
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Good morning, Karenina
Writing mode hasn't kicked into gear yet so I thought I better thank a few people for sticking with me and helping me out. I need all the help I can get!
there is going to be a lot happening in this story if I can get my act together.
Smiles, Carol
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Pom Poms are ready! I'm in full cheerleader mode!
Comment from Wendy G
You have written an excellent and intriguing chapter and it will be interesting to see these relationships change and develop now that a will is involved. I will enjoy seeing what has happened in the intervening years between the prologue and now. (And I am wondering if CJ Grey is somehow linked with the Charles of the prologue).
Wendy
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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You have written an excellent and intriguing chapter and it will be interesting to see these relationships change and develop now that a will is involved. I will enjoy seeing what has happened in the intervening years between the prologue and now. (And I am wondering if CJ Grey is somehow linked with the Charles of the prologue).
Wendy
Comment Written 09-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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I think Eleanor and Charles both kept the love they shared so briefly deep within their hearts. It's a shame they never connected while Eleanor was alive but one neverknows... when you are a ghost, travel is cheap. LOL
Smiles, Carol
Comment from prettybluebirds
You captured my attention immediately with this intriguing chapter. I'm so glad you are starting another story that includes ghosts. I think you have found your niche with this ghost stuff. I hope this story is as excellent as your last one.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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You captured my attention immediately with this intriguing chapter. I'm so glad you are starting another story that includes ghosts. I think you have found your niche with this ghost stuff. I hope this story is as excellent as your last one.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Me too! I never intended to write another ghost story, but this one just started needling me until I jumped in. Now I hope I can do it justice. I believe Eleanor will be another Benny... fun loving and mischievous. Too bad her family never saw that side of her.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from lyenochka
Now you've become the ghost writer, I mean, the writer of ghosts! Lol. I guess Eleanor will have more power as a ghost to help set things justly and apparently resolve some mystery, too!
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Now you've become the ghost writer, I mean, the writer of ghosts! Lol. I guess Eleanor will have more power as a ghost to help set things justly and apparently resolve some mystery, too!
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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Have no idea why I am writing a ghost story again. Maybe I am suppose to learn something from it. Who knows? But I think Eleanor will be another Benny...happy go lucky and eager to help.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
It looks like your doing another ghost story. Did you have some encounters with the supernatural lately? Once again you are testing our ability to keep up with a vast cast of characters. I think you must have acquired a new muse. just kidding. I always enjoyed your creative stories and I'm sure I will enjoy this one. As usual, I bet we are in for a wild ride.
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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It looks like your doing another ghost story. Did you have some encounters with the supernatural lately? Once again you are testing our ability to keep up with a vast cast of characters. I think you must have acquired a new muse. just kidding. I always enjoyed your creative stories and I'm sure I will enjoy this one. As usual, I bet we are in for a wild ride.
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 09-Jul-2024
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I have no idea, Beth, why I jumped into another ghost story especially when I hated the beginning of the first one. But the characters grew on me and so did the story. This one is different, yet possibly the same. I guess we wait and see.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Teri7
This is the beginning of a very good story or book. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you used and from the dialogue. You are very good with the ghost appearing in your work. Great job! love and blessings, teri
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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This is the beginning of a very good story or book. You used great descriptive words and very good imagery from the artwork you used and from the dialogue. You are very good with the ghost appearing in your work. Great job! love and blessings, teri
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Wow...thanks Teri for enjoying my new story. I think this one will be a fun one as well. I appreciate your comments and the stars. My eyes are glittering with happiness too.
Smiles, Carol
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You are so welcome sweet and dear friend! You are so talented. God has blessed you with a pen that just keeps putting out good stories! love and blessings, Teri
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Excellent start, Carol, why isn't this in the contest? This is going to be a fabulous story, my friend. I already love Eleanor, she's going to be fun. Her relatives need a boot up their backsides believing they should have inherited it all. Now the lawyer is coming and I can't wait to hear what Eleanor has put in her will. I'm sure she was very rich. Love this! Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Excellent start, Carol, why isn't this in the contest? This is going to be a fabulous story, my friend. I already love Eleanor, she's going to be fun. Her relatives need a boot up their backsides believing they should have inherited it all. Now the lawyer is coming and I can't wait to hear what Eleanor has put in her will. I'm sure she was very rich. Love this! Well done, my friend. :)) Sandra xx
Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Well, I thank you my dear friend for reading the new chapter and for enjoying. I am thrilled that you like it. I just posted Chapter 2 because I need to get caught up a little. Not much money on it so I apologize,
Thank you so much.
Smiles, hugs, and love, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait for this adventure to continue. This is an excellent write.
Jonathan chuckled, "Sorry, sweetie, if I'm not mistaken, (chuckled,)
"But I am here." The voice startled Jenna. (here," the)
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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I can't wait for this adventure to continue. This is an excellent write.
Jonathan chuckled, "Sorry, sweetie, if I'm not mistaken, (chuckled,)
"But I am here." The voice startled Jenna. (here," the)
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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I think this will be a fun one. Or at least I hope it is. Just posted Chapter 2, trying to catch up a little and get the story rolling. Fixed those commas and periods. They hate me!
Thanks so much for reading, reviewing and especially for enjoying.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is captivating. I was drawn into a world of mystery and family dynamics. The descriptions are well done like the weathered facade of Eleanor Bennett's home and the scent of blooming lilacs. That atmosphere you create brings the setting to life. The tension among the characters is well written.
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reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Your writing is captivating. I was drawn into a world of mystery and family dynamics. The descriptions are well done like the weathered facade of Eleanor Bennett's home and the scent of blooming lilacs. That atmosphere you create brings the setting to life. The tension among the characters is well written.
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Comment Written 08-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 08-Jul-2024
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Thank you as always, Michael. I sincerely appreciate your kind words and the fact that you enjoy what I write. As for the tension, get ready for it to really kick in.
Smiles, Carol