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A Mysterious Inheritance and Murders

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Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
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Aww, I'm going to miss these ghosts and mortals, I've enjoyed every moment you've allowed them to share with us. I'm glad that everyone is happy, and with Noah at her side, so will Madeline be happy. One more to go. You've done a wonderful job, my clever friend. Love you lots, Sandra xxx

 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
    I really got into the writing mode and couldn't stop. Guess what? I wrote a prologue and a chapter in the next adventure. I'm entering the contest and ....drumroll.... there's a ghost. LOL Thanks and hope you love the ending tomorrow.
    Smiles, Carol
Comment from barbara.wilkey
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I sure hope your ending lets us know how Michael and Sandra are going to work it out. I have an idea, but not sure. I do like this story.

Madeline's voice trembled. "What will I do without you? (trembled,)

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
    I think the ending will answer all your questions. And guess what? I got into writing mode during the middle of the night, finished this story, and started a new one. LOL, I guess I'm entering the contest. Ready, set, read, and correct, Barbara.
    Smiles and hugs, Carol
Comment from Pamusart
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Hi, Carol. I hope you are well

You threw me a curveball by incorporating Noah in the last part of your story. He hadn't been in this chapter at all until the very end.

Maybe I've missed some chapters, but I don't remember Noah and what his role is

I guess I'm glad Esther has found peace and could move onto the other side

I guess the treasure chest is what did that. Maybe it's more like restoring the family's heritage than it is for any of the jewels or money. Money can't buy happiness. Esther knows that and all the rest of the ghosts and humans know that too (for now)

You've got this girl (haha, wishful thinking?) interested.

Now, what could happen next? Is there some villain out there that's going to challenge the family heritage? I'm guessing so and I'm guessing that villain may already be a ghost I guess I have a 50-50 chance there lol

I enjoyed reading your story

Good job. Thank you for sharing.

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 Comment Written 06-Jul-2024


reply by the author on 06-Jul-2024
    Sorry you didn't know about Noah. He's been scattered throughout the story, especially in the beginning. He was married to Madeline, murdered (some accused his wife but she was proven innocent even though she had cheated on him) and he's drifted in and out of the story since he hadn't been sent to purgatory as of yet. And the final chapter is tomorrow. Thank you so much for trying to catch up and follow the story. It's been a fun one to write.
    Smiles, Carol