The Runaway
A runaway finds herself in big trouble39 total reviews
Comment from Madeleine Mardis
Pamusart, this is a vital piece of writing! Deserves my last six! Just incredible, such a needed warning, there are "gorilla pimps" out
there! They kidnap, drug and beat, and put out on the street, many a runaway!
Hey, I changed vill to ville, it's more easily recognized as a word.
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Pamusart, this is a vital piece of writing! Deserves my last six! Just incredible, such a needed warning, there are "gorilla pimps" out
there! They kidnap, drug and beat, and put out on the street, many a runaway!
Hey, I changed vill to ville, it's more easily recognized as a word.
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 26-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful comments and a great review
And especially for the six shiny stars. It made my day.
Comment from Erika Whittle
It does speak for itself and I personally feel very strongly about this topic. I once listened to a lady speak about her organization that helped victims of human trafficking. The psychological problems were the hardest to work through. It's sickening what humans do to other humans
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It does speak for itself and I personally feel very strongly about this topic. I once listened to a lady speak about her organization that helped victims of human trafficking. The psychological problems were the hardest to work through. It's sickening what humans do to other humans
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
Comment from Steve Foreman
Jeez! Yep, it speaks for itself. You say it is fiction, and I get that (for this poem), but the situation you describe is all too real, unfortunately.
Well constructed. Good rhyming and choice of words. A great piece of emotive writing.
(One tiny comment; I would have said "turning" tricks, instead of "doing" tricks.)
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Jeez! Yep, it speaks for itself. You say it is fiction, and I get that (for this poem), but the situation you describe is all too real, unfortunately.
Well constructed. Good rhyming and choice of words. A great piece of emotive writing.
(One tiny comment; I would have said "turning" tricks, instead of "doing" tricks.)
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Hi Steve. Thank you for your wonderful comments and review. I did make that change you suggested.: turning tricks. So I thank you for that as well.
Comment from Aussie
Of course it speaks for itself. Twelve year old kids are snatched and this is the result. What a sick world we live in. Pedophiles are on the rise as well. We can't stop these happenings, only keep our kids close to us and educate them. K xx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Of course it speaks for itself. Twelve year old kids are snatched and this is the result. What a sick world we live in. Pedophiles are on the rise as well. We can't stop these happenings, only keep our kids close to us and educate them. K xx
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Wendy G
It might be fiction but for many it is a bitter reality, which you have captured well. The hopelessness and despair that accompany both addiction and being a victim of trafficking are well described. Excellent poem, thought-provoking and very sad and moving.
Wendy
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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It might be fiction but for many it is a bitter reality, which you have captured well. The hopelessness and despair that accompany both addiction and being a victim of trafficking are well described. Excellent poem, thought-provoking and very sad and moving.
Wendy
Comment Written 05-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from QC Poet
Glad your note mentions that this is fiction but I know the Two problems are real addiction and a type of slavery in prostitution
So many people fall into that mess sadly never make it out alive Thanks for highlighting this issue
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Glad your note mentions that this is fiction but I know the Two problems are real addiction and a type of slavery in prostitution
So many people fall into that mess sadly never make it out alive Thanks for highlighting this issue
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Another of your themes, Pam, in which you take on a very tragic social issue and commit it to your well-crafted rhyming verse! This particular trade is absolutely horrifying and girls are indeed caught in a web of drug addiction and abuse in which all personal agency is lost. Well done for reiterating the tragedy of it here! Debbie
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Another of your themes, Pam, in which you take on a very tragic social issue and commit it to your well-crafted rhyming verse! This particular trade is absolutely horrifying and girls are indeed caught in a web of drug addiction and abuse in which all personal agency is lost. Well done for reiterating the tragedy of it here! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Nicki.B
This was so so upsetting it gave me goosebumps thinking of those poor unfortunate souls who have been kidnapped to the despicable and devastating trade. You have written the story very well with great use of rhyme to convey the it. Well done
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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This was so so upsetting it gave me goosebumps thinking of those poor unfortunate souls who have been kidnapped to the despicable and devastating trade. You have written the story very well with great use of rhyme to convey the it. Well done
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
Comment from Samantha Wymer
Your poem speaks loud and clear with a powerful message. Thank you for writing this and sharing for us to read. All your poems that I have read so far is excellent.
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Your poem speaks loud and clear with a powerful message. Thank you for writing this and sharing for us to read. All your poems that I have read so far is excellent.
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
Comment from Ulla
I am so glad it is fiction, but for so many it the reality of a cruel life. They are slaves to their handlers and when they are used up the are discarded as a piece of garbage. It's a poem well written. Ulla xcx
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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I am so glad it is fiction, but for so many it the reality of a cruel life. They are slaves to their handlers and when they are used up the are discarded as a piece of garbage. It's a poem well written. Ulla xcx
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 11-Jul-2024
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Thank you for your wonderful review
and excellent stars
