Stop the Boat.
A rescue with a difference.19 total reviews
Comment from Sharon Elwell
Well done! You drew believable characters and created a setting and situation with very economical use of words. The ending was surprising and funny. It was easy to picture this situation and enjoy this story!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Well done! You drew believable characters and created a setting and situation with very economical use of words. The ending was surprising and funny. It was easy to picture this situation and enjoy this story!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Sharon,
Thanks for the review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, a very funny moment for all the family. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Nicki.B
Well this was a fun and entertaining story. I was eager for Trixie to be saved and was delighted when she was but what a laugh that your aunt fell instead. I can just imagine alright the hoot you all have telling that story and told it so well. Well done, thanks for sharing!
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Well this was a fun and entertaining story. I was eager for Trixie to be saved and was delighted when she was but what a laugh that your aunt fell instead. I can just imagine alright the hoot you all have telling that story and told it so well. Well done, thanks for sharing!
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Nicki,
Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, it was a very funny moment. Trixie provided us with many funny moments. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
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You're welcome Barry, you too have a great day!
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It's a cute story. I strongly suggest you review the rules for writing dialogue.
kay, when writing dialogue each person speaking gets their very own paragraph. Also in dialogue people speak in contractions, example, She'll)
at the top of her voice yelled
"Come on Trixie, keep going, we are waiting. Come on." (yelled,)
and soon instructed
"Okay, let's all move a bit to the starboard and take her into the boat on the port side. (instructed,)
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thank you for sharing this writing prompt entry with us. I enjoyed reading. It's a cute story. I strongly suggest you review the rules for writing dialogue.
kay, when writing dialogue each person speaking gets their very own paragraph. Also in dialogue people speak in contractions, example, She'll)
at the top of her voice yelled
"Come on Trixie, keep going, we are waiting. Come on." (yelled,)
and soon instructed
"Okay, let's all move a bit to the starboard and take her into the boat on the port side. (instructed,)
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Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Barbara,
Thanks so much for your review. Also, your helpful hints are always appreciated. Please take care and have a wonderful day.
Regards
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Debbie D'Arcy
Nicely done, Barry! Poor old Auntie! I love that twist at the end, inserted so casually: "One problem. Auntie was out." I defy anyone not to have a smile on their face by the end of this well structured and humorous story! Good luck, Barry! Debbie
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Nicely done, Barry! Poor old Auntie! I love that twist at the end, inserted so casually: "One problem. Auntie was out." I defy anyone not to have a smile on their face by the end of this well structured and humorous story! Good luck, Barry! Debbie
Comment Written 04-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Debbie,
Thanks for your kind review. Yes, this was a very funny incident. Trixie provided us with many golden moments as did my Auntie.
Take care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
Aww, bless her heart, I'm glad your auntie insisted on them stopping. That dog managed to get to the boat, and auntie was soon to swap places with Trixie! So funny. I really enjoyed your true story, it is a fun memory. Good luck in the contest. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Aww, bless her heart, I'm glad your auntie insisted on them stopping. That dog managed to get to the boat, and auntie was soon to swap places with Trixie! So funny. I really enjoyed your true story, it is a fun memory. Good luck in the contest. Warm hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Sandra,
Thanks so much for your kind review. Yes, it was a very funny incident. Trixie and Auntie provided many golden memories. Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry.
Comment from Begin Again
Man Overboard! Or to be accurate - Auntie's Overboard. Rescue was accomplished but not exactly as planned. Very cute and enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Man Overboard! Or to be accurate - Auntie's Overboard. Rescue was accomplished but not exactly as planned. Very cute and enjoyable to read. Thank you for sharing.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Carol,
Thanks for your kind review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, Trixie and Auntie provided many golden memories.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Pamusart
Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Yeah. That is pretty funny. The question that comes to mind for me is how old auntie was. But I can see that happening. She bends down to get the dog and just keeps going. But, at least she was a good sport about it
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Hi
This looks like a good entry for the contest. Good luck with that!!
Yeah. That is pretty funny. The question that comes to mind for me is how old auntie was. But I can see that happening. She bends down to get the dog and just keeps going. But, at least she was a good sport about it
I enjoyed reading your story
Good job. Thank you for sharing.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Thanks for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Yes, Auntie and Trixie, provided many golden memories for all the family. She was a good swimmer as well.
Take Care
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the True Humor Flash writing prompt. This was a fun story to read. Well written. The family dynamics were described wonderfully. .loved it.
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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An excellent entry for the True Humor Flash writing prompt. This was a fun story to read. Well written. The family dynamics were described wonderfully. .loved it.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Marilyn,
Thanks so much for your review. I am glad you enjoyed the read. I have many fond memories of Trixie and Auntie.
Take care and have a wonderful day.
Cheers
Barry Penfold.
Comment from Wendy G
An excellent story, filled with humour. I can understand your aunt's concern - and I had a feeling that she might come to need the towel herself. Well written. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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An excellent story, filled with humour. I can understand your aunt's concern - and I had a feeling that she might come to need the towel herself. Well written. Good wishes for your entry.
Wendy
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Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 05-Jul-2024
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Wendy,
Thanks so much for your review. Glad you enjoyed the read. Trixie and Auntie provided many great memories for the family.
Take care.
Barry Penfold.