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Viewing comments for Chapter 40 "Battle of Nyx Valley"Fantasy based on the intersection of two worlds.
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Comment from Sally Law
WOW! This got my blood pumping this a.m.!! This went straight to action and never let up. Hermes, Theo and Adam showed their God-like warrior qualities. I fear for Adam though and for Theo and Echo. We're at the climax and holding on for dear life as the fight unfolds!
Magnificent writing and beautifully illustrated and presented. Flawless, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and Love & Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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WOW! This got my blood pumping this a.m.!! This went straight to action and never let up. Hermes, Theo and Adam showed their God-like warrior qualities. I fear for Adam though and for Theo and Echo. We're at the climax and holding on for dear life as the fight unfolds!
Magnificent writing and beautifully illustrated and presented. Flawless, my friend.
Sending you my best today as always, and Love & Blessings across the bridge.
Sal XOs
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Hi Sally, thanks so much for the six dazzling star review!
I appreciate the support and the lovely comments! The action will continue at least one more chapter, lol!
Love you much!,
🥰💝🤗🥰🤟🏻🤟🏻🤟🏻💓🙏🏻🙏🏻💗❤️😘❤️🩹❣️🫶🏻🫶🏻💕💗
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I can hardly wait for the next chapter!!! Sal XOs
Comment from Pam (respa)
Excellent artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. You create a vivid word picture of each scene. There is also very good back and forth action. One minute the good guys are doing well; the next, things reverse and they have another problem to solve.
Theo has done a great job of getting into the battle and saving Adam, but he also paid a price when searing pain would strike from wounds, but Hermes intervened and took charge of the situation. Theo and Adam are in no shape to do battle. The part about Hypnos putting dust in Theo's face to make him rest added a bit of levity and brief escape from the battle that was taking place.
A good job with the dream scene. I don't know if Theo had thought about marrying Echo, but he certainly heard it from her voice when Hades wanted her to go with him. It's a good scene showing the strength and determination of a strong female character.
At the same time Adam is berating himself for not having done the things he thought he should have been doing, but it was no fault of his. These characters are not in a condition to so what they normally would, but they haven't lost their spirit and sense of right and wrong, as well as compassion and love for others who are in difficult situations. The concluding paragraphs are proof of this as Adam takes control of the situation.
Very well done, my friend.
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Excellent artwork and story to go with it, Rhonda. You create a vivid word picture of each scene. There is also very good back and forth action. One minute the good guys are doing well; the next, things reverse and they have another problem to solve.
Theo has done a great job of getting into the battle and saving Adam, but he also paid a price when searing pain would strike from wounds, but Hermes intervened and took charge of the situation. Theo and Adam are in no shape to do battle. The part about Hypnos putting dust in Theo's face to make him rest added a bit of levity and brief escape from the battle that was taking place.
A good job with the dream scene. I don't know if Theo had thought about marrying Echo, but he certainly heard it from her voice when Hades wanted her to go with him. It's a good scene showing the strength and determination of a strong female character.
At the same time Adam is berating himself for not having done the things he thought he should have been doing, but it was no fault of his. These characters are not in a condition to so what they normally would, but they haven't lost their spirit and sense of right and wrong, as well as compassion and love for others who are in difficult situations. The concluding paragraphs are proof of this as Adam takes control of the situation.
Very well done, my friend.
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 03-Jul-2024
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Hi Pam, thank you for the six stars and for the detailed review.
The back and forth of action was something I?m glad came off well. It?s not my comfort zone, dialogue is more my thing, lol.
I needed the dream sequence, like you said, for a break in action, but also to set up the final confrontation with Hades. Theo needs some first hand knowledge.
The Adam part I felt was necessary because, so far, poor Adam has been a weak character. I needed to build him some depth. Theo is ahead to give more substance. He?s relied a lot on others.
Thanks so much for your perceptive review,
Rhonda
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You are very welcome and deserving of the stars and review, Rhonda. I appreciate your reply and agree with your take on the characters and situations.
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I really need to save a couple of sixes for the middle of the week. This was an incredible chapter, Rhonda. I do hope Adam can help Hermes. To have all three of them in trouble would be disastrous. Echo needs Theo, they have to win this battle or they are all doomed. What a fabulous chapter, my friend, well done, and please, get the next chapter out on Sunday!! :)) Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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I really need to save a couple of sixes for the middle of the week. This was an incredible chapter, Rhonda. I do hope Adam can help Hermes. To have all three of them in trouble would be disastrous. Echo needs Theo, they have to win this battle or they are all doomed. What a fabulous chapter, my friend, well done, and please, get the next chapter out on Sunday!! :)) Warmest hugs, Sandra xx
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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Hi Sandra,
Thank you for the wonderful review. I know I was late posting. I?ve had a lot of family over. I?ll take the brilliant review, my friend. I know where your heart is.
Echo does need Theo, and he?s about to step up to the plate. Until now, he?s sort of depended on other people.
Thanks so much,
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from royowen
The battle has proven to give Hermes and Theo injuries and Adam has been feeling guilty because he's been tied up and not being to join his brother and Hermes in battle, so he sets off to help, Theo dreams of Echo with Hades, well done, Rhonda, blessings Roy
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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The battle has proven to give Hermes and Theo injuries and Adam has been feeling guilty because he's been tied up and not being to join his brother and Hermes in battle, so he sets off to help, Theo dreams of Echo with Hades, well done, Rhonda, blessings Roy
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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Hi Roy, thank you for the review, my friend. Blessings back to you,
Rhonda
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Good job Rhonda
Comment from Begin Again
Awesome of course, Rhonda. The battle, Theo's dream of Echo, Adam's growth, it's all perfect and so enjoyable to read. Well done! Now, I hope Adam will remain safe.
Smiles, Carol
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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Awesome of course, Rhonda. The battle, Theo's dream of Echo, Adam's growth, it's all perfect and so enjoyable to read. Well done! Now, I hope Adam will remain safe.
Smiles, Carol
Comment Written 03-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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Hi Carol, thank you for the review. I always appreciate your contributions.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from lyenochka
I hope Adam will be successful! It's interesting how Hypnos is able to give Theo a message about what's happening/happened to Echo via a dream. I like how the brothers are looking out for one another. I'm sure Echo will find a way to undo whatever the "kiss" did to her.
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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I hope Adam will be successful! It's interesting how Hypnos is able to give Theo a message about what's happening/happened to Echo via a dream. I like how the brothers are looking out for one another. I'm sure Echo will find a way to undo whatever the "kiss" did to her.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 04-Jul-2024
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Hi Helen,
Thank you for the review, my friend. Yes, the brothers are finding a way to finally bond, and helping each other out.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Daylily
I like the transformation taking place in Adam and that he did not hesitate to enter the battle and help Hermes. There is a lot of good action in this chapter, too. I also like the horse-name, Recovery.
Note: Something is amiss here: Though difficult work, he was gave more damage than he received.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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I like the transformation taking place in Adam and that he did not hesitate to enter the battle and help Hermes. There is a lot of good action in this chapter, too. I also like the horse-name, Recovery.
Note: Something is amiss here: Though difficult work, he was gave more damage than he received.
Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Hi Lily,
Thank you so much for the brilliant six stars, my friend!! I'm glad you liked the action, and thank you for finding the extra word in the sentence.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from prettybluebirds
In your first paragraph, it should be (giving) instead of (gave). He was giving more damage than he received. Other than that, It is perfect and full of action. I loved every word.
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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In your first paragraph, it should be (giving) instead of (gave). He was giving more damage than he received. Other than that, It is perfect and full of action. I loved every word.
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much for the review, my friend, and for finding the extra word!! I appreciate your point of view.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is so enjoyable. The way you weave dreams and reality together creates a unique story that pulled me into the heart of the characters' struggles. Each scene unfolds with such clarity and urgency, making it impossible not to be drawn into their world. Keep up the excellent work! I look forward to reading more from you!
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Your writing is so enjoyable. The way you weave dreams and reality together creates a unique story that pulled me into the heart of the characters' struggles. Each scene unfolds with such clarity and urgency, making it impossible not to be drawn into their world. Keep up the excellent work! I look forward to reading more from you!
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Comment Written 02-Jul-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Hi Michael,
Thank you so much for the lovely, well written, review, my friend! You were specific and supportive.
Take care,
Rhonda
