Stray Goat On A Risky Hill
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Comment from davisr (Rhonda)
Oh wow, what a haunting story, Jim. I can feel your own loss guiding the emotions of Oliver. The one time he leaves her alone, it happens. Too bad he couldn't have foreseen that ahead of time, but that's how such gifts work, I suppose.
You do such an excellent job of using the flashback and of describing emotion. Great dialogue.
Hugs,
Rhonda
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Oh wow, what a haunting story, Jim. I can feel your own loss guiding the emotions of Oliver. The one time he leaves her alone, it happens. Too bad he couldn't have foreseen that ahead of time, but that's how such gifts work, I suppose.
You do such an excellent job of using the flashback and of describing emotion. Great dialogue.
Hugs,
Rhonda
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much. Yes, I tried to use my emotions following my wife's death. I wanted to make it a might longer, but feared no one would read it and didn't want to split the chapter.
Comment from barbara.wilkey
Oh my!! This started out being a beautiful romance, and then the twist at the end. You did an excellent job writing this. I enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this post.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Oh my!! This started out being a beautiful romance, and then the twist at the end. You did an excellent job writing this. I enjoyed reading and couldn't find any way to improve this post.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you so much! I appreciate your words.
Comment from Nicki Nance
Nothing less than excellent. Great fantasy, scifi, and romance in a well written passage. The contrast of your poetic writing and jarring story is compelling.
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Nothing less than excellent. Great fantasy, scifi, and romance in a well written passage. The contrast of your poetic writing and jarring story is compelling.
Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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I appreciate your kind words very much.
Comment from BethShelby
This is excellent story. It is sad about Jean and what happened to her. I haven't read all the chapters to this book but this very well written and interesting. I'll try not to miss any more of them.
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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This is excellent story. It is sad about Jean and what happened to her. I haven't read all the chapters to this book but this very well written and interesting. I'll try not to miss any more of them.
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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The chapters have been spread apart. I'll have to work on doing the next chapter in a more timely manner.
Comment from GoWiSt
"Stray Goat On A Risky Hill" Sounds like my life story--*sigh*.
A clairvoyant, sort of mind-reading, seer gets visions of the past, of horrific things that happened back then. Interesting stuff.
Wonder what comes next...
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reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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"Stray Goat On A Risky Hill" Sounds like my life story--*sigh*.
A clairvoyant, sort of mind-reading, seer gets visions of the past, of horrific things that happened back then. Interesting stuff.
Wonder what comes next...
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Comment Written 30-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 02-Jul-2024
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Thank you. As i haven't written it yet, I, too, wonder...