The Unwilling Heir
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Comment from barbara.wilkey
I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. Thank you for sharing.
"Grandfather if this is real -- what -- what do you want me to do?" (Grandfather, You're addressing him)
A gruff voice answered. "I can help you with that, Sheriff." (answered,)
Sandra's anger flared as Les winked in her direction before he spoke. "I pride myself on being on top of the big stories (spoke,)
"Sandra â?" I can see you're upset, but let me handle this." (don't need to quotation after Sandra?)
and they are going to steal a fortune in jewels, antiques, paintings â?": (paintings")
Les jumped into the conversation. "My crew will be right behind you, getting (conversation,)
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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I can't wait to see what's going to happen next. Thank you for sharing.
"Grandfather if this is real -- what -- what do you want me to do?" (Grandfather, You're addressing him)
A gruff voice answered. "I can help you with that, Sheriff." (answered,)
Sandra's anger flared as Les winked in her direction before he spoke. "I pride myself on being on top of the big stories (spoke,)
"Sandra â?" I can see you're upset, but let me handle this." (don't need to quotation after Sandra?)
and they are going to steal a fortune in jewels, antiques, paintings â?": (paintings")
Les jumped into the conversation. "My crew will be right behind you, getting (conversation,)
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you as always, Barbara. Fixed and done. Appreciate the help and glad you enjoyed the chapter.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Sandra Stoner-Mitchell
I love,love,loved this chapter!!! What fun the Judge had, I would have loved to have been there ... well you know what I mean, if it was real!! LOL. I do hope you are going to write that Book in a Month and do another ghostly one, you have written this one so well! I really enjoyed 'watching' Jack when he saw his grandfather. Carol, this was a joy to read! Well done!!!!! Love and hugs! Sandra xxx
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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I love,love,loved this chapter!!! What fun the Judge had, I would have loved to have been there ... well you know what I mean, if it was real!! LOL. I do hope you are going to write that Book in a Month and do another ghostly one, you have written this one so well! I really enjoyed 'watching' Jack when he saw his grandfather. Carol, this was a joy to read! Well done!!!!! Love and hugs! Sandra xxx
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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This was a fun chapter for me as well, Sandra. I love your reviews because first they always make me feel so good and secondly, I like how you point out the parts you liked. It's funny you mentioned another ghost story because my thoughts wwew playing with an idea (a woman with a dysfunction family and a secret past who enjoys messing with her family after her death)...but I'm not sure where to go with it yet. It's just a thought.
Thank you again for making me smile. Glad you loved it.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
Your writing is so engaging. I think I've mentioned this to you in the past. But it should be repeated. Your writing maintains a brisk pace, keeping me hooked. The transitions between different perspectives and scenes are smooth, and the dialogue is sharp and natural. You've created an intriguing world! I'm enjoying the characters and a plot that seems to promise many twists and turns.
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Your writing is so engaging. I think I've mentioned this to you in the past. But it should be repeated. Your writing maintains a brisk pace, keeping me hooked. The transitions between different perspectives and scenes are smooth, and the dialogue is sharp and natural. You've created an intriguing world! I'm enjoying the characters and a plot that seems to promise many twists and turns.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Hello, Michael. How nice to see you stopping by to read and enjoy another chapter of my story. I love twists and turns in my stories and the ghosts, gangsters, and everyone else seem to fill the bill for me. Thanks again.
Smiles, Carol
Comment from BethShelby
This is quite a tale and it just keeps geting weirded. You've got a whole
lot of city officials and other people stareing to get used to ghosts on the move. It's hard enough dealing with the moral world without having to interact with the ghost world in which they can be ethereal or solid, It really complicates things. It's a fun story. I'm glad it is you having to juggle all these characters.
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This is quite a tale and it just keeps geting weirded. You've got a whole
lot of city officials and other people stareing to get used to ghosts on the move. It's hard enough dealing with the moral world without having to interact with the ghost world in which they can be ethereal or solid, It really complicates things. It's a fun story. I'm glad it is you having to juggle all these characters.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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I guess I happened across a bunch of ghosts who excell in convincing people they are real...lucky me. I'm having a lot of fun with it regardless if it could be real or not. thanks so much, Beth.
Smiles, Carol