Teeth
a 5-7-518 total reviews
Comment from estory
There's a tongue in cheek moral to this haiku like piece, a satyrical view of what happens when you don't keep up with proper hygene. The closing image is sharp and leaps off the page. estory
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There's a tongue in cheek moral to this haiku like piece, a satyrical view of what happens when you don't keep up with proper hygene. The closing image is sharp and leaps off the page. estory
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, estory
Comment from Dr. Nad
I like it, this is funny. Best of luck in the contest. This 5-7-5 gives me a sense of wonderment and a juxtaposition. Am I celebrating his lack of dental hygiene which created a near perfect smile and grin? I don't know, but I sure hope I'm not him. I both brush and floss L O L
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I like it, this is funny. Best of luck in the contest. This 5-7-5 gives me a sense of wonderment and a juxtaposition. Am I celebrating his lack of dental hygiene which created a near perfect smile and grin? I don't know, but I sure hope I'm not him. I both brush and floss L O L
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Me too. Thanks for taking a look, Doc
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You are most welcome, my friend.
Comment from Gunner Lil
Great picture. My dad kept his like that with salt.
A cute story that was an easy read that has a good pace and flow.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Great picture. My dad kept his like that with salt.
A cute story that was an easy read that has a good pace and flow.
Thanks for sharing and good luck.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, GL
Comment from Brenda Strauser
I like your poem. Very funny. It is clever and picture matches well. I like the last line about the grin in the glass. Good luck in the contest. Very good entry.
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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I like your poem. Very funny. It is clever and picture matches well. I like the last line about the grin in the glass. Good luck in the contest. Very good entry.
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Brenda.
Comment from Michael Ludwinder
haha. Your poem is so sharp. You shared a humorous tale in just a few lines. The imagery of "keeps grin in a glass" is perfect! I love how you've managed to blend humor and a word of caution with just 15 syllables. Great job!
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haha. Your poem is so sharp. You shared a humorous tale in just a few lines. The imagery of "keeps grin in a glass" is perfect! I love how you've managed to blend humor and a word of caution with just 15 syllables. Great job!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Michael.
Comment from Steve Foreman
A really funny 5-7-5 poem, well thought out and composed. I love the fact you used 'grin' insted of simply 'teeth'. I also love the illustration you chose to support the subject matter. Good job!
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A really funny 5-7-5 poem, well thought out and composed. I love the fact you used 'grin' insted of simply 'teeth'. I also love the illustration you chose to support the subject matter. Good job!
Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Steve
Comment from teafor2
An excellent funny way to remind all about the importance of oral hygiene.
Advice seem to be received easier when its wrapped in humor...The difficulty of eating any solid foods is a certainty if/when your teeth are
stored somewhere other than your own mouth. Good luck in the contest.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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An excellent funny way to remind all about the importance of oral hygiene.
Advice seem to be received easier when its wrapped in humor...The difficulty of eating any solid foods is a certainty if/when your teeth are
stored somewhere other than your own mouth. Good luck in the contest.
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Comment Written 28-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, T
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You are welcome.
Comment from Marilyn Hamilton
An excellent entry for the Write a Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt. LOL this one get a laugh out of me. I guess keeping your grin in a glass is better than losing it altogether. Good job.
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reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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An excellent entry for the Write a Humorous 5-7-5 writing prompt. LOL this one get a laugh out of me. I guess keeping your grin in a glass is better than losing it altogether. Good job.
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Comment Written 27-Jun-2024
reply by the author on 28-Jun-2024
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Thank you, Marilyn